Comment from Dom G Robles

Exceptional

This piece is truly amazing to me. It resounded like the echo of Edgar Allan Poe in his poem Lenore(?)It is brilliantly coined. I thought the ghost of Poe came into being. My sincere congratulations. My friend, I wish to be one of your admirers. Dom

 Comment Written 18-Feb-2014

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reply by the author on 18-Feb-2014

Hi Dom,

Thanks for this generous review which I appreciate much. Yes, it's similar to The Raven by Poe which was about his dead lover, Lenore :) R

reply by Dom G Robles on 18-Feb-2014

Very well done. E. A. Poe is one that I also admire most and he is my idol until today. Dom

Comment from Just Alyx

Excellent

That ringing is the preliminary call to astral travelling, which is exactly what we do when our bodies are resting. He should've ignored it; the poor guy dipped a toe in his own hell for a few terrifying moments. Looking to ourselves over troubles can be scary stuff. The Poe influence was light enough to be very good and effective. Loved the power of the alliteration that fully shaped it and drove the story. It reads fantastically aloud and can be influenced in different ways through inflection while still keeping the beat. Excellent poem. Unreal artwork; perfect.

 Comment Written 17-Feb-2014

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reply by the author on 18-Feb-2014

Thanks Just Alyx! Glad you like it and do feel free if you want to influence this. I'm willing to learn :) R

reply by Just Alyx on 18-Feb-2014

Chances are way higher I would learn from you :) Cheers, R.

Comment from DonandVicki

Excellent

"The Raven" Nicely done and In good style too. I love Edgar Allen Poe and your poem would make him smile, I'm sure. The photo is haunting. Don and Vicki

 Comment Written 17-Feb-2014

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reply by the author on 18-Feb-2014

Thanks D & V! :)

Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca

Exceptional

This is absolutely wonderful. A fan of EAPoe, I recognize the beautiful style. Definitely following the master, this is right up there. And yet your own style too

 Comment Written 17-Feb-2014

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reply by the author on 18-Feb-2014

Thanks ever so much Barb. Glad you read, liked and reviewed this! R

Comment from Chuck23

Excellent

This was interesting! I liked the repeating synonyms, it seemed to sort of quicken the rhythm. The darkness to it, and the mention of it being inspired by Poe drew me in for the read.

 Comment Written 17-Feb-2014

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reply by the author on 18-Feb-2014

Thank you Chuck!

Comment from GWinterwin

Excellent

Sounds like a very scary dream. Good word flow and rhyming as you tell this scary tale about a bad dream. Not a kind of dream, one would want to have.

 Comment Written 17-Feb-2014

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reply by the author on 18-Feb-2014

Thanks GWinterwin. Not for recurring, this dream! R

Comment from J. P. Egry

Excellent

Hmmm. Sounds like many of my dreams in content if not in rhyme. You've used so many vivid sight and sound words that evoke the exactly intended response. I love Poe, partly because of the content, because the creepy darkness appeals to me, but more so because of the musicality of his words. You've captured that very well here, almost as a parody, not quite bordering on plagiaristic copy. This is a most enjoyable read and would be perfect for a group ghost story night.

 Comment Written 17-Feb-2014

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reply by the author on 18-Feb-2014

Thanks J.P.!

Comment from Dirus

Exceptional

Hi there,

nice job on this one. All grammar looks good. Nice choice of words on this poem keep up the good work. spooky and well done. Thank you for the good read. Also I liked the picture. :)

 Comment Written 17-Feb-2014

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reply by the author on 18-Feb-2014

Thanks to you Dirius! Glad you like this. R

Comment from SLHarper

Excellent

This definitely takes on a tone worthy of the category of "horror and thriller," and Poe being my all time favorite, I was able to recognize the piece you were imitating. I kept waiting for the Raven to appear on the narrator's headboard, quothing, "Nevermore!" That being said, I also feel compelled to mention that though recognizable, your rhyme scheme and meter were rather sloppy. I appreciate better than anyone how difficult it is ACTUALLY to imitate the style of the master -- no one ever has or can come close (believe me, I know, because I've tried: a piece in my profile entitled The Rabbit takes a stab at it, if you'd be interested in checking it out) to perfecting the timing, cadences, and evocativeness of Poe's masterpiece. But, truly, I appreciate that you were won't to try. It shows you have good taste! Cheers, Stephanie

 Comment Written 17-Feb-2014

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reply by the author on 17-Feb-2014

Hi Stephanie,

Thanks for the review and the kind words. I'm glad you are a Poe fan too. I wasn't actually going all out to imitate him (he was more of an inspiration) and it was actually the following lines that helped serve as a template for the poem:

"Deep into that darkness peering, long I stood there, wondering, fearing,
Doubting, dreaming dreams no mortal ever dared to dream before."

Anyway, thanks for the review and I've just had a look at your poem which was very well written, I must say. R

reply by SLHarper on 17-Feb-2014

Awesome! Thank you for humoring me and taking a peek at my tribute to the master! Mine decidedly DOES NOT fall into the horror and thriller category! Lol! Yours, Steph

Comment from LaineyZ

Excellent

Wow, you certainly were successful in making this scary! The words you used, the imagery,("..'twas dark as the Devil's door!") and of course the choice of picture and background color all worked extremely well to create a feeling of horror. I'm not necessarily a fan of Poe, but I have read him and you definitely captured his style!

Extremely well done

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 Comment Written 17-Feb-2014

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reply by the author on 17-Feb-2014

Thanks LaineyZ. Glad you like this! R