A Lonely Rose
Room to Bloom38 total reviews
Comment from Dawn of Tomorrow
Beautiful, David. A different kind of writing for you. Such deep, heartfelt emotion coming forth that touches the reader. I love this
The rose, when set within its vase,
Becomes a dream of fragrant grace,
An acolyte to reignite
The glow in every room.
Lovely work, my friend. Love the 8886, and the rhyme scheme worked very well, but you can pull off anything.
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2014
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Beautiful, David. A different kind of writing for you. Such deep, heartfelt emotion coming forth that touches the reader. I love this
The rose, when set within its vase,
Becomes a dream of fragrant grace,
An acolyte to reignite
The glow in every room.
Lovely work, my friend. Love the 8886, and the rhyme scheme worked very well, but you can pull off anything.
Comment Written 17-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2014
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Thanks so much, my friend. I really appreciate that sixer, JL, and your compliments. I really like this form.
Comment from Norbanus
Delightful quatrains you have choose
to paint these verses of the rose
Each tied directly to the next
with perfect metered three foot text.
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2014
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Delightful quatrains you have choose
to paint these verses of the rose
Each tied directly to the next
with perfect metered three foot text.
Comment Written 17-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2014
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Thank you so much, my friend, for your great review! I really appreciate it! The sixer is the icing, Fred, and it tastes great.
Comment from Darshi04
Your versatility in terms of genre of poem, thoughts and vocabulary really amazes me.
Absolutely loved the poem.
Looking forward to read more!
P.S: I loved the analogies and metaphors that you've used in this one!
Keep writing!
~Darshi
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2014
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Your versatility in terms of genre of poem, thoughts and vocabulary really amazes me.
Absolutely loved the poem.
Looking forward to read more!
P.S: I loved the analogies and metaphors that you've used in this one!
Keep writing!
~Darshi
Comment Written 17-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2014
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Thank you so much, my friend. I really appreciate your kind words and great review, and I'll follow suit by adding you to my list.
Comment from Robin Gilmor
You are so right, love is so very fragile. It can never be left alone to bloom and die on its own. Love just like the tender rose needs to be nurtured and tended to or it will wilt and disappear. Beautiful verse that graciously flows in your AABC rhyme. Smiles, Robin :)
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reply by the author on 17-Feb-2014
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You are so right, love is so very fragile. It can never be left alone to bloom and die on its own. Love just like the tender rose needs to be nurtured and tended to or it will wilt and disappear. Beautiful verse that graciously flows in your AABC rhyme. Smiles, Robin :)
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Comment Written 17-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2014
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Thank you so much, my friend. I appreciate your insightful thoughts and great review, Robin.
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Six lovely stanzas with an unusual rhyme scheme that works well. Enjoyed the content of the poem which was contrasting human feelings with that of a neglected rose. Grown where it will not flourish and die has similarities with human love. Well thought out. An enjoyable read.
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reply by the author on 17-Feb-2014
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Six lovely stanzas with an unusual rhyme scheme that works well. Enjoyed the content of the poem which was contrasting human feelings with that of a neglected rose. Grown where it will not flourish and die has similarities with human love. Well thought out. An enjoyable read.
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 17-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2014
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Thank you so much, Dorothy! I love writing in this form, and it seemed to fit the content.
Comment from 24chas
What a masterful write, Marillion. I just have one nit on the meter... who am I kidding? It's perfect as usual. Great job.
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2014
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What a masterful write, Marillion. I just have one nit on the meter... who am I kidding? It's perfect as usual. Great job.
Comment Written 17-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2014
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Thanks so much, Chas! I appreciate it!
Comment from closetpoetjester
A beautiful poem featuring the bloom of love; the rose. Symbolic of where it all starts...deep below the surface, adverse conditions of course, but it sprouts...you explored the absolute fragility of feelings and the first tentative steps towards a union through this eloquent expression and I enjoyed this read immensely. The rose is one of my favourite flowers so it was easy to find harmony with this one. Okay, I lie...there were some terrific internals and your iambics are highly polished as always, faultless. I liked the common thread of that gorgeous bloomer throughout and you wove this one like magic. So many great lines but I really liked these ones:
"But love embraced is glassed and placed
On sun-shot window sills."
my faves though:
"The water and the sun entwine,
Kaleidoscopically divine,"
The latter line I can only describe as itself. So no need to cut and paste again. Haha
Great stuff, my friend...
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reply by the author on 17-Feb-2014
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A beautiful poem featuring the bloom of love; the rose. Symbolic of where it all starts...deep below the surface, adverse conditions of course, but it sprouts...you explored the absolute fragility of feelings and the first tentative steps towards a union through this eloquent expression and I enjoyed this read immensely. The rose is one of my favourite flowers so it was easy to find harmony with this one. Okay, I lie...there were some terrific internals and your iambics are highly polished as always, faultless. I liked the common thread of that gorgeous bloomer throughout and you wove this one like magic. So many great lines but I really liked these ones:
"But love embraced is glassed and placed
On sun-shot window sills."
my faves though:
"The water and the sun entwine,
Kaleidoscopically divine,"
The latter line I can only describe as itself. So no need to cut and paste again. Haha
Great stuff, my friend...
P
Comment Written 17-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2014
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You're so kind, my friend, for giving a sixer to this one, and I truly appreciate it. So many great comments, and such understanding. I do hope you're on a plane so that I may thank you properly. D
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No. I missed my flight, darn it.
LOL
Comment from Rondeno
"an acolyte to reignite"! Love it! You get a "dying fall" with those three-iamb end lines. Graceful, melancholic ... the perfect fusion of form and content. You're unstoppable, David.
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2014
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"an acolyte to reignite"! Love it! You get a "dying fall" with those three-iamb end lines. Graceful, melancholic ... the perfect fusion of form and content. You're unstoppable, David.
Comment Written 17-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2014
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Many thanks, my friend, for your generous comments and charitable sixer. I really appreciate your kindness, Mike.
