A Lonely Rose
Room to Bloom38 total reviews
Comment from honeytree
I loved the symbolic art work of a rose for these words.
As human beings we know fear, we know hate and sadness
We also know the word love but some of don't know of love
Some of us do.
honey tree
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2014
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I loved the symbolic art work of a rose for these words.
As human beings we know fear, we know hate and sadness
We also know the word love but some of don't know of love
Some of us do.
honey tree
Comment Written 17-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2014
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Thank you very much, honey tree, for your sweet review!
Comment from Ekim777
Even as the visual images pour forth we quickly learn that our poet is a technical perfectionist at heart eager to display his skills. I have only learned to master the classic, deceptively simple sonnet. The rose of course is the queen of flowers challenged only by the orchid. It takes a brave poet to embrace her. There is a dark side to the rose as illustrated by Blake; "Rose thou art sick./ The worm that flies by night.....does thy life destroy..." I like the way she personifies the exigencies of two lovers if I got it right. A fine poem! -Ekim777
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2014
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Even as the visual images pour forth we quickly learn that our poet is a technical perfectionist at heart eager to display his skills. I have only learned to master the classic, deceptively simple sonnet. The rose of course is the queen of flowers challenged only by the orchid. It takes a brave poet to embrace her. There is a dark side to the rose as illustrated by Blake; "Rose thou art sick./ The worm that flies by night.....does thy life destroy..." I like the way she personifies the exigencies of two lovers if I got it right. A fine poem! -Ekim777
Comment Written 17-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2014
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I really appreciate your great review, the sixer, and your wonderful thoughts, complete with a Blake quote. I love the Romantic Era, so it resonated with me.
Comment from AnnieGale
Beautiful photo ..The rose, the symbol of love, lovers. This is a very beautifully written poem. Most love to receive the roses for Valentines Day, which this reminded me of since I was just out delivering them Friday. I did save one lone rose bloom, placed it in water and now it is drooped and dying...poor thing, lol...thank you for sharing
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2014
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Beautiful photo ..The rose, the symbol of love, lovers. This is a very beautifully written poem. Most love to receive the roses for Valentines Day, which this reminded me of since I was just out delivering them Friday. I did save one lone rose bloom, placed it in water and now it is drooped and dying...poor thing, lol...thank you for sharing
Comment Written 17-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2014
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Thank you so much, Annie, for your great review! Sorry to hear the rose is on its last legs, or, rather, stem. :)
Comment from mountainwriter49
David
This is quite lovely. I admire how you've juxtapositioned the withering rose to the blooming rose vis-a-vis relationships that fail and those that survive and thrive.
Your technique is spot-on and delightful. The reading of the poem is as fine Venetian silk flowing in the breezes along le Canale Grande.
Well done, my friend.
Ray
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2014
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David
This is quite lovely. I admire how you've juxtapositioned the withering rose to the blooming rose vis-a-vis relationships that fail and those that survive and thrive.
Your technique is spot-on and delightful. The reading of the poem is as fine Venetian silk flowing in the breezes along le Canale Grande.
Well done, my friend.
Ray
Comment Written 17-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2014
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Many thanks, my friend, for your excellent and eloquent review. I really appreciate that, AND the sixer, Ray. Hoping to see something new from you soon!
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You're welcome, David. The Muse has run off to Capri and left me stranded in the aftermath of this winter's endless wrath. Perhaps she'll resurface tomorrow night at Irregardless. I admire the versatility of your writings.
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Thank you, my friend. You're going to Irregardless tomorrow night? That's two blocks from my office! I'm going to lunch there Friday.
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Yessir. I've not been in a while and I'm fascinated by the name. I remember when it was a 'weird vegetarian place' in the other building across the street way back in the day when it was first established. OMG! I'm telling my age...
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I remember, too! :-)
Comment from joeakeefe
The minute I read your piece I thought of the 1916 song,Roses of Picardy. The tell tale clue lies in the line "implanted deep in no-mans land."
This is one of the finest pieces of your work that I have read. It has a sophisticated way of making the point of rose as symbol of love.
The line "an acolyte to reignigt the glow in every room" is exquisite.
Great job with this theme, my friend.
joeakeefe
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2014
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The minute I read your piece I thought of the 1916 song,Roses of Picardy. The tell tale clue lies in the line "implanted deep in no-mans land."
This is one of the finest pieces of your work that I have read. It has a sophisticated way of making the point of rose as symbol of love.
The line "an acolyte to reignigt the glow in every room" is exquisite.
Great job with this theme, my friend.
joeakeefe
Comment Written 17-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2014
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Thank you so much, Joe! I'm not familiar with that song. A little before my time, I'm afraid. ;-) Much appreciated! David
Comment from barleygirl
Very nicely constructed & interesting & uniquely stated message. Altho your poem is filled with excellent imagery & metaphor, it is also straightforward & easy to interpret. Word choice is quite complex . . . sometimes it works ("Kaleidoscopically divine"), & other times clunky when read aloud ("When chemistry and roguery combine chaotic wills"). The complex phrasing keeps the reader in his/her head, rather than feeling the message on a more palpable level. Great effort & thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2014
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Very nicely constructed & interesting & uniquely stated message. Altho your poem is filled with excellent imagery & metaphor, it is also straightforward & easy to interpret. Word choice is quite complex . . . sometimes it works ("Kaleidoscopically divine"), & other times clunky when read aloud ("When chemistry and roguery combine chaotic wills"). The complex phrasing keeps the reader in his/her head, rather than feeling the message on a more palpable level. Great effort & thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 17-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2014
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Thank you for your review.
Comment from GWinterwin
Good poem with a beautiful picture. Good word flow and rhyming. Good thoughts relating the human likeness to a rose in a vase.
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2014
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Good poem with a beautiful picture. Good word flow and rhyming. Good thoughts relating the human likeness to a rose in a vase.
Comment Written 17-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2014
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Thank you very much, George. I appreciate the review.
Comment from mickbey
This poem is an interesting mix of meter, as indicated in the author notes, it makes for an interesting flow, the thought-lines and word choices are creative and give the poem a 'rich' flavor, a nice piece of work.
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2014
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This poem is an interesting mix of meter, as indicated in the author notes, it makes for an interesting flow, the thought-lines and word choices are creative and give the poem a 'rich' flavor, a nice piece of work.
Comment Written 17-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2014
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Thank you very much for the review!
Comment from Dawn Munro
Wow, talk about being on the same wavelength - you mention a parched rose, and dew, I wrote about a desiccated bloom, and dew (it isn't posted yet.) You base a romance poem on a rose, I based mine on a bloom. LOL.
There really are no new concepts, I guess. But there sure are many variations on how those ideas are presented - this is beautiful, if not a bit sad, since that endangered rose will offer its beauty and fragrance for only one final time. (Yes, that's my mood - LOL)
The phrases you come up with are so distinctive though - I particularly loved "sun-shot window sills", David.
Your poetry is such a joy to review! (Except for rating them - I don't have the sixes I need.)
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2014
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Wow, talk about being on the same wavelength - you mention a parched rose, and dew, I wrote about a desiccated bloom, and dew (it isn't posted yet.) You base a romance poem on a rose, I based mine on a bloom. LOL.
There really are no new concepts, I guess. But there sure are many variations on how those ideas are presented - this is beautiful, if not a bit sad, since that endangered rose will offer its beauty and fragrance for only one final time. (Yes, that's my mood - LOL)
The phrases you come up with are so distinctive though - I particularly loved "sun-shot window sills", David.
Your poetry is such a joy to review! (Except for rating them - I don't have the sixes I need.)
Comment Written 17-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2014
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I feel the same about you and your poetry, Dawn. Great minds do think alike, after all! Sounds like you in a glass half empty mood these days? Anyway, thank you so much, my friend.
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What a wonderful compliment! Thank you. :) No, the glass is always half full. (But wait, does moodiness come with age? LOL)
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I think it does, but it also comes with sensitivity, and artists are sensitive creatures, so...:)
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Thank you. I was scorned a while back for saying the same thing, and yet it's universal and as old as time...:)
Comment from Cumbrianlass
I haven't read your work before, but I've been meaning to. You really do have a magical way with words! This is exquisite. I'm no expert on the technical side of poetry, so this is a laywoman's review. :D
A single rose in a crystal vase on a sunny windowsill. A gorgeous image, and the way you have done justice to that image is amazing.
The third stanza, to me, is almost like a fulcrum, balancing the message of the poem.
I love the image of 'water and the sun entwine'.
If I had any suggestions at all, it would be 'beneath' instead of 'below' in the first stanza. Not a criticism ? that's just the word my mind chose as I read.
A sincere pleasure.
Av
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2014
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I haven't read your work before, but I've been meaning to. You really do have a magical way with words! This is exquisite. I'm no expert on the technical side of poetry, so this is a laywoman's review. :D
A single rose in a crystal vase on a sunny windowsill. A gorgeous image, and the way you have done justice to that image is amazing.
The third stanza, to me, is almost like a fulcrum, balancing the message of the poem.
I love the image of 'water and the sun entwine'.
If I had any suggestions at all, it would be 'beneath' instead of 'below' in the first stanza. Not a criticism ? that's just the word my mind chose as I read.
A sincere pleasure.
Av
Comment Written 17-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2014
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Av, thank you so much for stopping by!!! I really appreciate your sixer, and your thorough and helpful review. You know, it's funny about the "beneath/below" quandary. ...I go back and forth about that usage all the time. I'll take a look at it and see how that one fits. Thank you for that, AND again for the great review. David
