Courtesy Call
The Reaper isn't always grim...44 total reviews
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Well written in rhyming couplets. I don't believe what you say about the Grim Reaper - when he calls that's it! You're a gonna. But your story is good, well told and in perfect iambic heptameter - It would be nice to just get a wake-up call, LOL. Regards Dorothy
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2014
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Well written in rhyming couplets. I don't believe what you say about the Grim Reaper - when he calls that's it! You're a gonna. But your story is good, well told and in perfect iambic heptameter - It would be nice to just get a wake-up call, LOL. Regards Dorothy
Comment Written 13-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2014
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Thanks, Dorothy. I appreciate it very much. In this case, the reaper is really part of an internal conversation, but you're exactly right about the Reaper. Glad it was internal, and the real dude. ;-)
Comment from Hadria
I think this is one of those things that just seem to come into your head, fall into place, and be exactly right. I can see nothing there to revise, it does, and is, everything that it should do. The rhymes are impeccable. I particularly like the lines "But home is where you choose it, and the choice is yours to make,
So use the choice or loose it, to a Reaper sent to take
Your soul into forever........" sums up the ethos of the whole thing. It rolls along with a grand swing to it, making it very easy to memorise. Best wishes Hadria
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I think this is one of those things that just seem to come into your head, fall into place, and be exactly right. I can see nothing there to revise, it does, and is, everything that it should do. The rhymes are impeccable. I particularly like the lines "But home is where you choose it, and the choice is yours to make,
So use the choice or loose it, to a Reaper sent to take
Your soul into forever........" sums up the ethos of the whole thing. It rolls along with a grand swing to it, making it very easy to memorise. Best wishes Hadria
Comment Written 13-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2014
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Hadria, thank you so much for your six-star rating, and also your deft understanding of the origin of this, and other, poems that "just happen". While sitting here, snowbound, the conceit occurred to me and I just started writing, not even looking back at previous rhymes and words, and it all worked out. I'm most appreciate of your kind comments and great review. David
Comment from in777wr#
This was a very good poem. The title of this poem immediately caught my attention. The poem's message was powerful, and thought provoking. There were many lines in this poem that stood out to me, but to make good use of your time was key in this poem. Nice job.
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2014
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This was a very good poem. The title of this poem immediately caught my attention. The poem's message was powerful, and thought provoking. There were many lines in this poem that stood out to me, but to make good use of your time was key in this poem. Nice job.
Comment Written 13-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2014
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Thank you so much for the wonderful use of the sixer, and your kind words and great review.
Comment from pipersfancy
To enter into self-reflection, question our past direction, and adjust the sails accordingly to set us upon our own path of greatest achievement - to reach for that highest calling we all hear, though not all choose to answer.
I think these are hallmarks of the person on a quest to become the fully-realized being that they are capable of.
This is a well-spoken re-telling of that archetypical journey.
I can hardly wait to see the end result!
Only virtual stars remain this week ****** ****** ****** ****** !!!
PF
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To enter into self-reflection, question our past direction, and adjust the sails accordingly to set us upon our own path of greatest achievement - to reach for that highest calling we all hear, though not all choose to answer.
I think these are hallmarks of the person on a quest to become the fully-realized being that they are capable of.
This is a well-spoken re-telling of that archetypical journey.
I can hardly wait to see the end result!
Only virtual stars remain this week ****** ****** ****** ****** !!!
PF
Comment Written 13-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2014
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I'll take them, happily, my friend, and thank you for it.
My favorite quote is George Eliot's "It's never too late to become the person you were meant to be."
I really appreciate your kind words, my friend. It means a lot.
Comment from Ric Myworld
New to poetry and its many styles and structures, I usually spend more time trying to decipher, and being wrong, than understanding and enjoying. Thanks for your easily understandable and enjoyable read.
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New to poetry and its many styles and structures, I usually spend more time trying to decipher, and being wrong, than understanding and enjoying. Thanks for your easily understandable and enjoyable read.
Comment Written 13-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2014
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Thanks very much, Ric. I did try to take the guesswork and hard work out of the reader's job in this one, and I appreciate you saying so. Much appreciated.
Comment from hobopoet
Very cool stuff, my friend. You can tell that it all came out at once; so many times poems have that feel to them, like you can read them and tell they've been gone over a dozen times. This feels fresh and raw...hot off the presses, as you said, and it's better for it.
I wouldn't change a thing. Good job.
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2014
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Very cool stuff, my friend. You can tell that it all came out at once; so many times poems have that feel to them, like you can read them and tell they've been gone over a dozen times. This feels fresh and raw...hot off the presses, as you said, and it's better for it.
I wouldn't change a thing. Good job.
Comment Written 13-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2014
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Thanks so much, James. I've missed you around here, my friend, and I appreciate your kind words.
Comment from Cindy Warren
Perhaps this warning was meant for that rogue of yours? LOL I liked this one so much better. I was considering jumping on the bandwagon and having Jerry Jing-Jang kick that guy's ass, but I didn't think the real JJJ would like it. Rhyme and rythm here are perfect, no criticism.
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2014
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Perhaps this warning was meant for that rogue of yours? LOL I liked this one so much better. I was considering jumping on the bandwagon and having Jerry Jing-Jang kick that guy's ass, but I didn't think the real JJJ would like it. Rhyme and rythm here are perfect, no criticism.
Comment Written 13-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2014
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Thanks very much, Cindy. You'll find several poems that seem like an internal/external dialogue for and between the rogue and the man. Feel free to jump in the fray anytime you feel like it. :-) I appreciate the great review.
Comment from Righteous Riter
The photo fits this piece perfectly as the words bring the photo to life. Good end rhyming. Good perfect rhyming with tell/hell...reach/teach...make/take...give/live...night/light...head/dead...fall/call. Good rhythm and flow. I see nothing that I would add, take out or change in this piece. Good work.
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2014
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The photo fits this piece perfectly as the words bring the photo to life. Good end rhyming. Good perfect rhyming with tell/hell...reach/teach...make/take...give/live...night/light...head/dead...fall/call. Good rhythm and flow. I see nothing that I would add, take out or change in this piece. Good work.
Comment Written 13-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2014
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Thank you, RR.
Comment from jluzzle
You?ve managed and you?ve mastered all the lies you learned to tell - believed all the evil you've come to comfort, and posses the truth you seek within
This style of writing has always been my go to, I enjoy reading/writing it, you have constructed a well spelled out glance into the thoughts of the re-born-newly-un-damned. The twisted rails and wrinkled nails that make the thoughts that live behind my eyes...
And come the bitter morning (mourning) for some reason, that is how I read it at first...
Great piece of poetry and self examination here, really nice piece of art.
NICE WRITE...
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2014
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You?ve managed and you?ve mastered all the lies you learned to tell - believed all the evil you've come to comfort, and posses the truth you seek within
This style of writing has always been my go to, I enjoy reading/writing it, you have constructed a well spelled out glance into the thoughts of the re-born-newly-un-damned. The twisted rails and wrinkled nails that make the thoughts that live behind my eyes...
And come the bitter morning (mourning) for some reason, that is how I read it at first...
Great piece of poetry and self examination here, really nice piece of art.
NICE WRITE...
Comment Written 13-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2014
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Thanks so much, jluzzle. I was tempted to put "mourning" in there, but since it was a positive place, it didn't fit this time. I appreciate the great review, and the kindred way of thinking.
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completely my pleasure
Comment from judester
A productive snow day. A little creepy with a positive message. So there is hope for us all? I enjoyed reading this and it flowed, as they say, cheers Judester
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A productive snow day. A little creepy with a positive message. So there is hope for us all? I enjoyed reading this and it flowed, as they say, cheers Judester
Comment Written 13-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2014
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Thanks so much, judester. I appreciate the review.
