Comment from Waishali Deshmukh

Excellent

Cute child conveying this truth behind artistry..

Good alliteration in 'Talent is unlimited when instinct is the teacher.

A profound thought in simplest words. I like it.

 Comment Written 12-Feb-2014

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reply by the author on 12-Feb-2014

Waishali, thank you so much :-) Brooke

Comment from Preston McWhorter

Excellent

Hi,Brooke,
"Artistry" is an excellent poem that meets the line/syllable requirements of the whitney form. It has good flow and good figurative language and imagery. (flows through the veins). I do not usually comment on a message but to me instinct does not usually result in creative behavior. Genetic heritage on the other hand I think is what results in Sawyers creativity.
Preston

 Comment Written 12-Feb-2014

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reply by the author on 13-Feb-2014

Thanks so much, Preston :-) Brooke

Comment from victor 66

Excellent

I am quite sure I've read some of your other works. So much truth in so few words is a quite marvel. I would think there are very few parents and grandparents who would not relate to your work here. Einstein said something to the effect, "Imagination is more important than knowledge". Thank you.

 Comment Written 12-Feb-2014

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reply by the author on 12-Feb-2014

Victor, thank you so much :-) Brooke

reply by victor 66 on 12-Feb-2014

I should edit my replies, but you are welcome.

Comment from padumachitta

Excellent

Talent is
unlimited
when instinct is the teacher.

This rings so true, we push and push, when what we need is to listen.
May you be well
padumachitta

 Comment Written 12-Feb-2014

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reply by the author on 12-Feb-2014

padumachitta, thank you so much :-) Brooke

Comment from Enrique28

Exceptional

I love the sound of creature/teacher combination, the overall meaning of the poem, and its wonderful presentation. Excellent stuff! Enrique

 Comment Written 12-Feb-2014

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reply by the author on 12-Feb-2014

Enrique, thank you so very much, my generous friend :-) Brooke

Comment from Alanna Renee

Excellent

I like the rhythmic flow of this piece and the rhyme. It gives food for thought, too. How much talent is unrealized because of certain standards of what talent is? --Alanna

 Comment Written 12-Feb-2014

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reply by the author on 12-Feb-2014

Alanna, thank you so much :-) I so agree. We love our toddlers' art and then by elementary school teachers convince 90% of the children that they're not the class's star artists. Thousands and thousands of kids who once loved to draw "learn" that they don't have what it takes. Brooke

reply by Alanna Renee on 13-Feb-2014

Brooke, I have a request, but I don't know how else to contact you. I went to your profile but didn't see a way to message you. I took your advice about extending my story poem "Manatee". Would you mind looking at it and giving me any further critiques? Thanks so much. :)

reply by the author on 13-Feb-2014

at the top of a person's portfolio page there is a list of things like portfolio, become a fan, comments - the first item to the left of the page is contact - if you click on that you can send someone a PM :-) And sure I'll look :-)

reply by the author on 13-Feb-2014

I just read the longer version, and I think you did a great job. With the additional verses you've added to the emotion and the drama and the plot. If you look at winners of this story poem contest in the past, they're practically all longer like this. I think you've given yourself a much better chance in the contest by taking the time and effort to do this revision :-)

reply by Alanna Renee on 13-Feb-2014

Thank you! I'm so glad you were willing to take the time to review this again, and I sure appreciate your advice.

Comment from jadapenn

Excellent

Oh, I'm sure he will have tons of talent. Lovely Whitney, Brooke. It flowed well with the little story. I've picked up my pencils again to start drawing and shading. He's brave to climb straight into the paints. lol. :) luv jada

 Comment Written 12-Feb-2014

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reply by the author on 12-Feb-2014

Thanks so much, Jada :-) Miranda bought him special toddler-friendly paint brushes, so that helps, and I think it's his mom who is the brave one. LOL Brooke

Comment from Righteous Riter

Excellent

This piece meets the criteria of the Whitney poem as the syllable count is correct and this piece has the correct number of lines totaling seven. Good alliteration with through/the...instinct/is. Clear message that is short and simple.

 Comment Written 12-Feb-2014

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reply by the author on 12-Feb-2014

Righteous Riter, thank you for your review :-) Brooke

Comment from Smoothiecool

Excellent

your words in this short poem allows the reader to see and feel the images portrayed that the art in all living creatures flows when instinct is the teacher it is unlimited as to what one can do
easy read flows well
cheers Smoothiecool

 Comment Written 12-Feb-2014

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reply by the author on 12-Feb-2014

Smoothiecool, thank you so much :-) Brooke

reply by Smoothiecool on 12-Feb-2014

most welcome..SC

Comment from humpwhistle

Excellent

I'm guessing Sawyer's artistry will grow to fill some pretty impressive jeans. See what I did there?

Again, Brooke, you make it look easy.

Peace, Lee

 Comment Written 12-Feb-2014

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reply by the author on 12-Feb-2014

Ah, yes, I see, my clever friend :-) Thank you, Lee. Brooke

reply by humpwhistle on 12-Feb-2014

Aw, shucks!