The Heart of Poetry
Viewing comments for Chapter 122 "Empty Garbage Cans (senryu)"'Tis not the Bard, but pretty good poetry anyway
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Comment from Dean Kuch
Yep, nothing is more disheartening than to take a stroll along a public beach and observe cans, tires and other man-made debris washed upon the shoreline. Or, to take a walk in the woods and see piles of trash and litter strewn around.
This earth is the only home we've got, and we should all show her the respect she so richly deserves...
Well stated, and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2014
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Yep, nothing is more disheartening than to take a stroll along a public beach and observe cans, tires and other man-made debris washed upon the shoreline. Or, to take a walk in the woods and see piles of trash and litter strewn around.
This earth is the only home we've got, and we should all show her the respect she so richly deserves...
Well stated, and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 13-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2014
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Thanks Dean, I appreciate your fine remarks and best wishes.
Comment from victor 66
A very nice poem indeed. So much truth in so few words is quite a marvel. I would think there are very few people who cannot relate to your work here. Thank you and best wishes.
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2014
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A very nice poem indeed. So much truth in so few words is quite a marvel. I would think there are very few people who cannot relate to your work here. Thank you and best wishes.
Comment Written 12-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2014
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Thank you for this great review and good wishes.
Comment from rouskin
Empty garbage cans Will not win Good Housekeeping's Seal of Approval Perfect pairing of poem and picture Nice contest entry Blessings , Rouskin
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2014
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Empty garbage cans Will not win Good Housekeeping's Seal of Approval Perfect pairing of poem and picture Nice contest entry Blessings , Rouskin
Comment Written 12-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2014
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Thanks for this great review.
Comment from BeasPeas
There are slobs everywhere. Those who have no regard for anything. Sometimes bears do this when hungry. Nevertheless, it's an eyesore, bringing to mind an important topic.
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2014
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There are slobs everywhere. Those who have no regard for anything. Sometimes bears do this when hungry. Nevertheless, it's an eyesore, bringing to mind an important topic.
Comment Written 12-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2014
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Thanks for this fine review.
Comment from Father Flaps
Hi Mystery Poet,
People are pigs. There's no doubt about it. At least that's true when they're out and about. Hopefully they look after their house better. Indians had the right idea. They treated the earth like it was alive. They took only what they needed. I always remember Chief Dan George's speech in the 1970 movie, "Little Big Man",
http://youtu.be/LJRs2TnP9H8
Another thing I'll tell you... many years ago, I was hunting one day and came across a pile of garbage in the woods. Someone had created their own dump. As we looked around the perimeter, we found an old family graveyard... the forest had grown up around the crudely carved stones. We noticed there was a border of stones. But now, this bit of pollution had sidled up just a few feet away. How terrible to have such a neighbour.
The picture you chose compliments your senryu entry very well. And the message rings through... we are slobs who care little about Mother Earth.
Good Luck in the contest!
cheers
Kimbob
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2014
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Hi Mystery Poet,
People are pigs. There's no doubt about it. At least that's true when they're out and about. Hopefully they look after their house better. Indians had the right idea. They treated the earth like it was alive. They took only what they needed. I always remember Chief Dan George's speech in the 1970 movie, "Little Big Man",
http://youtu.be/LJRs2TnP9H8
Another thing I'll tell you... many years ago, I was hunting one day and came across a pile of garbage in the woods. Someone had created their own dump. As we looked around the perimeter, we found an old family graveyard... the forest had grown up around the crudely carved stones. We noticed there was a border of stones. But now, this bit of pollution had sidled up just a few feet away. How terrible to have such a neighbour.
The picture you chose compliments your senryu entry very well. And the message rings through... we are slobs who care little about Mother Earth.
Good Luck in the contest!
cheers
Kimbob
Comment Written 12-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2014
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Well thank you for this wonderful review, rating and best wishes. I enjoyed your comments very much.
Comment from Domino 2
Indeed, mystery writer.
'Fly-tipping' is a blight on the countryside and, even when rarely caught, the culprits get away with small fines and a slap on the wrist.
Very cleverly put.
Good luck, Ted
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2014
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Indeed, mystery writer.
'Fly-tipping' is a blight on the countryside and, even when rarely caught, the culprits get away with small fines and a slap on the wrist.
Very cleverly put.
Good luck, Ted
Comment Written 12-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2014
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I appreciating your comments.. Hadn't heard of Fly-tipping but so appropriate for this write.
Comment from Smoothiecool
good luck in the contest
your Senryu has all the correct components
your words in this short poem portrays the image well of the empty garbage can not getting the approval when trash is lying about
cheers SC
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2014
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good luck in the contest
your Senryu has all the correct components
your words in this short poem portrays the image well of the empty garbage can not getting the approval when trash is lying about
cheers SC
Comment Written 12-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2014
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Thanks for this wonderful review and understanding of the poem
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most welcome...SC
Comment from Bill Schott
Right you are. Your poem captures the sarcasm we like in this format I think the garbage can was invented by a lunch lady in my old high school, so students would have a place to immediately deposit their 'food'.
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2014
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Right you are. Your poem captures the sarcasm we like in this format I think the garbage can was invented by a lunch lady in my old high school, so students would have a place to immediately deposit their 'food'.
Comment Written 11-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2014
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Ha ha, that is funny, sounds like the lunch lady thought the food might not be to good herself. Thank you Bill for this great review. :-)
Comment from in777wr#
This was a well written senryu poem. The poem reads well. Your 5-7-5 syllable count is in good order. The picture accentuates the poem well. Nicely written.
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2014
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This was a well written senryu poem. The poem reads well. Your 5-7-5 syllable count is in good order. The picture accentuates the poem well. Nicely written.
Comment Written 11-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2014
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I appreciate this fine review and rating,
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, mystery writer, you did an excellent job writing this senryu poem about the pollution that takes place every day. good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2014
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this is very well written, mystery writer, you did an excellent job writing this senryu poem about the pollution that takes place every day. good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 11-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2014
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Thanks for this great review, rating and good wishes. :-0
