They Claim a Cupcake's Missing
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Comment from DR DIP
Yeah I really like this Brooke...the rhyme and the rhythm are great the adjoining photo says it all. This is one for your book for sure!!
xxdip
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2014
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Yeah I really like this Brooke...the rhyme and the rhythm are great the adjoining photo says it all. This is one for your book for sure!!
xxdip
Comment Written 10-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2014
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Thanks so much, Dip :-) Glad you enjoyed. Brooke
Comment from RPSaxena
Hello Brooke,
Lovely piece of Humor Poetry beautifully depicting a baby's innocent lies!
Simple, but impressive wording with nice rhyming scheme and lively imagery.
The most striking lines are:
"Somebody must have slipped the cake
in my unwilling hands,
but I am not responsible
for where suspicion lands."
Excellent!
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2014
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Hello Brooke,
Lovely piece of Humor Poetry beautifully depicting a baby's innocent lies!
Simple, but impressive wording with nice rhyming scheme and lively imagery.
The most striking lines are:
"Somebody must have slipped the cake
in my unwilling hands,
but I am not responsible
for where suspicion lands."
Excellent!
Comment Written 10-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2014
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RP, thank you so very much :-) Brooke
Comment from Dustman6180
Adorable and fun. Your rhyme is always spot on. The syllable count was 7-6-8-6 on all but the second stanza, which was 8-6-8-6 -- was that intentional? Just wondering? I enjoyed reading this (as I do with all of your poems.)
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2014
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Adorable and fun. Your rhyme is always spot on. The syllable count was 7-6-8-6 on all but the second stanza, which was 8-6-8-6 -- was that intentional? Just wondering? I enjoyed reading this (as I do with all of your poems.)
Comment Written 10-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2014
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Dustman, thank you :-) I realize there was that syllable inconsistency, but it worked for me as I was composing. So long as it sounds good, I'm willing to deviate from syllable count :-) Brooke
Comment from mfowler
Is it fair that a child be taught to obfuscate at such an early age? With this degree of self denial, this little cake thief is bound to move onto meringues and sponges. Seriously I loved it. Great idea, cute as the kid, and as usual, perfectly scripted.
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2014
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Is it fair that a child be taught to obfuscate at such an early age? With this degree of self denial, this little cake thief is bound to move onto meringues and sponges. Seriously I loved it. Great idea, cute as the kid, and as usual, perfectly scripted.
Comment Written 10-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2014
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Thanks so much for your humor and your review :-) LOL Brooke
Comment from TOMORAL
This is precious, as Sawyer is also. Loved this perfect rhyme meter and flow of this. Adore the look on the thief's face. Very well done.
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2014
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This is precious, as Sawyer is also. Loved this perfect rhyme meter and flow of this. Adore the look on the thief's face. Very well done.
Comment Written 10-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2014
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Tomoral, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Angel Blessings
This is such a cute poem! Your words paint a picture with each verse. It's flows well, and has excellent rhyme and rhythm. Excellent presentation! Thank you for sharing. It put a big smile on my face. Angel Blessings
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2014
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This is such a cute poem! Your words paint a picture with each verse. It's flows well, and has excellent rhyme and rhythm. Excellent presentation! Thank you for sharing. It put a big smile on my face. Angel Blessings
Comment Written 10-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2014
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Angel Blessings, thank you so much for your gracious and generous review :-) Brooke
Comment from Aussie
Maybe Potato ate the cupcake? - not sure pussycats like cake? In this photo one can see the likeness to Andy. I think our most-used line to our folks when we were young, was - "I didn't do it, it wasn't me!" I liked your poem. Well done Mrs Icing.
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2014
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Maybe Potato ate the cupcake? - not sure pussycats like cake? In this photo one can see the likeness to Andy. I think our most-used line to our folks when we were young, was - "I didn't do it, it wasn't me!" I liked your poem. Well done Mrs Icing.
Comment Written 10-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2014
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Kay, that is so funny because Miranda always used to blame the gerbils. LOL Miranda was always denying in the face of overwhelmnig evidence :-) Thank you, my friend. Brooke
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Er, what is a gerbil?
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popular pets here - like hamsters - that is what Miranda had until she was 7, when we finally got cats. I refused to have cats before then because I wanted the kids to be old enough to help care for them.
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I miss the cats, still, main road and flat cats are not nice. Toby is on a diet, they put him under to operate on his leg and THEN decided he was too fat! Stupid vet. He is taking his diet well, such a beautiful natured doggie.
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that is stupid - every time they put an animal under there is risk - how horrible to make him go under twice
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Toby isn't a glutton, he is just a bad mix - tiny little legs like a cat and a big solid body. At present he weighs 10kg - Vet says he should drop to 6kg, we think that is too light - around 7-8 would do it. They flogged Lea a bag of Hills dog food @ $60 - low fat and he can fill up on it - comes from USA. I nearly died when she said $60 - he will be munching in 2025!
Comment from NewFuture
I really enjoyed this poem. It clearly told a story plus it was clever at the same time. The words flowed on rhythm with good punch lines.It reminds me of my 3 year old nephew he's so sneaky,so i could relate.I Gave It 6 stars so what wrong can I say about this Poem. I'll show my sister this poem that resembles her son. She Should get a kick out of it. Nice Poem.......
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2014
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I really enjoyed this poem. It clearly told a story plus it was clever at the same time. The words flowed on rhythm with good punch lines.It reminds me of my 3 year old nephew he's so sneaky,so i could relate.I Gave It 6 stars so what wrong can I say about this Poem. I'll show my sister this poem that resembles her son. She Should get a kick out of it. Nice Poem.......
Comment Written 10-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2014
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thank you so much, New Future. I am always thrilled when someone shares one of my poems with a friend or relative, and I very much appreciate your generous sixth star :-) Brooke
Comment from Carolyn 'Deaton' Stephens
He doesn't look guilty to me.... that's my story and I am stickin' to it. What a cute picture and wonderful poem to accompany it.
Somebody must have slipped the cake in my unwilling hands.
You go Sawyer. :-) Carolyn
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2014
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He doesn't look guilty to me.... that's my story and I am stickin' to it. What a cute picture and wonderful poem to accompany it.
Somebody must have slipped the cake in my unwilling hands.
You go Sawyer. :-) Carolyn
Comment Written 10-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2014
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Carolyn, I'm sure Sawyer appreciates your support. :-) Thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Dean Kuch
Hah! Who hasn't been caught with their hands in the cookie jar a time or two during the course of their lifetime. I know I have certainly had my fair share of experiences, both as the taker and the take-ee...
Well done, very clever & cute, adewpearl!
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2014
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Hah! Who hasn't been caught with their hands in the cookie jar a time or two during the course of their lifetime. I know I have certainly had my fair share of experiences, both as the taker and the take-ee...
Well done, very clever & cute, adewpearl!
Comment Written 10-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2014
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Dean, thank you so much :-) My daughter, Sawyer's mom, was a master of denying in the face of overwhelming evidence against her. LOL :-) Brooke
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You are more than welcome, Brooke. It was gr-r-r-e-a-t!
