They Claim a Cupcake's Missing
rhyming quatrains207 total reviews
Comment from Kingsrookviii
Guilty! I love this. The picture is priceless. This also may be my favorite adventure of Mr. Sawyer, so far. I remember being in those shoes! I dare say that this little boy is very well loved. To chronicle these things as you are will make for a gift your family will treasure forever. Great job.
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2014
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Guilty! I love this. The picture is priceless. This also may be my favorite adventure of Mr. Sawyer, so far. I remember being in those shoes! I dare say that this little boy is very well loved. To chronicle these things as you are will make for a gift your family will treasure forever. Great job.
Comment Written 10-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2014
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Kingsrook, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from onkughosh19
Anther beautiful write.I like the simplicity of this poem.To has innocent expression on hi face as though he hadn't done anything and he was being suspected pointlessly.
All the lines are beautiful but I especially like the last para "I say the thief is clever......the culprit isn't me"
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2014
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Anther beautiful write.I like the simplicity of this poem.To has innocent expression on hi face as though he hadn't done anything and he was being suspected pointlessly.
All the lines are beautiful but I especially like the last para "I say the thief is clever......the culprit isn't me"
Comment Written 10-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2014
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onkughosh, thank you so much for your generous rating and thoughtful comments :-) Brooke
Comment from expressions9
A wonderfully amusing poem Brooke! The words and photo of Sawyer blend perfectly. You really take us into his world and with a photo like that - who can't sympathise? ! The abcb rhyme and rhythm really suit this lovely poem. Thanks for sharing :)
Love Christine
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2014
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A wonderfully amusing poem Brooke! The words and photo of Sawyer blend perfectly. You really take us into his world and with a photo like that - who can't sympathise? ! The abcb rhyme and rhythm really suit this lovely poem. Thanks for sharing :)
Love Christine
Comment Written 10-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2014
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Christine, thank you so very much :-) I so appreciate your encouragement and generous sixth star. Brooke
Comment from MoonWillow
That look on Sawyer's face is priceless! LOL. Gee, I wonder who took the cupcake? Even if he didn't have it in his hands, he looks guilty! I laughed out loud just from the title and photo. Fun read, Brooke. Poem and photo are a perfect combination. :)MW
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2014
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That look on Sawyer's face is priceless! LOL. Gee, I wonder who took the cupcake? Even if he didn't have it in his hands, he looks guilty! I laughed out loud just from the title and photo. Fun read, Brooke. Poem and photo are a perfect combination. :)MW
Comment Written 10-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2014
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Thank you so much, MW :-) I'm so glad this made you laugh, and I appreciate your generous sixth star :-) Brooke
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You're very welcome. I've been up all night working, so it was a real pleasure to read something lighthearted. So funny :)))
Comment from Righteous Riter
Good use of the abcb rhyme scheme. Good end rhyming. Good perfect rhyming with hands/lands. Good alliteration with claim/cupcakes...the/thief. Good rhythm and flow. Good complimentary photo followed by a humorous message.
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2014
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Good use of the abcb rhyme scheme. Good end rhyming. Good perfect rhyming with hands/lands. Good alliteration with claim/cupcakes...the/thief. Good rhythm and flow. Good complimentary photo followed by a humorous message.
Comment Written 10-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2014
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Thanks so much, Righteous Riter :-) Brooke
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
I say the thief is clever,
he got away scot free.
The only thing I know for sure --
the culprit isn't me.
Ha ha - his little face alone would
give him away, Brooke.
My youngest grandson is the same with
anything sweet, so his mother is buying
less and baking less sweet things.
margaret
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2014
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I say the thief is clever,
he got away scot free.
The only thing I know for sure --
the culprit isn't me.
Ha ha - his little face alone would
give him away, Brooke.
My youngest grandson is the same with
anything sweet, so his mother is buying
less and baking less sweet things.
margaret
Comment Written 10-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2014
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So glad this made you laugh, Margaret :-) Thanks so much. Brooke
Comment from Alanna Renee
I love it! You've done such a good job of sustaining a tone of fake innocence and playfulness throughout the entire poem. Good rhythm, too, especially the lines "in my unwilling hands", "for where suspicion lands".
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2014
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I love it! You've done such a good job of sustaining a tone of fake innocence and playfulness throughout the entire poem. Good rhythm, too, especially the lines "in my unwilling hands", "for where suspicion lands".
Comment Written 10-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2014
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Alanna, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from The Death
Hehe..cute, and lovely! :)
I like how you have written this from his point of view.
There's a reflection of innocence in this one.
Excellent rhyming as always.
I like the last two verses very much.
I enjoyed reading this one throughout.
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2014
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Hehe..cute, and lovely! :)
I like how you have written this from his point of view.
There's a reflection of innocence in this one.
Excellent rhyming as always.
I like the last two verses very much.
I enjoyed reading this one throughout.
Comment Written 10-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2014
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Anupam, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from amahra
You can make a poem out of anything, LOL. Sawyer reminds me of my sweet dog 'Gallow' when a hamburger was missing from the over pan that was still sitting on the over door. We looked at both dogs, but only Gallow had a string of cooked onions on his white mouth.
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2014
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You can make a poem out of anything, LOL. Sawyer reminds me of my sweet dog 'Gallow' when a hamburger was missing from the over pan that was still sitting on the over door. We looked at both dogs, but only Gallow had a string of cooked onions on his white mouth.
Comment Written 10-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2014
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amahra, thank you so much :-) Gallow sounds like he's lots of fun :-) Brooke
Comment from Jackarrie
Hmm, I wonder who stole the cup cake, certainly not Sawyer, he wouldn't do such a thing. You only have to look at his face to know the child is innocent.
~A great poem, with fab rhymes.
Well done. Mary
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2014
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Hmm, I wonder who stole the cup cake, certainly not Sawyer, he wouldn't do such a thing. You only have to look at his face to know the child is innocent.
~A great poem, with fab rhymes.
Well done. Mary
Comment Written 10-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2014
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Thank you so much, Mary - that is what I say, couldn't possibly be sweet Sawyer. LOL :-) Brooke
