They Claim a Cupcake's Missing
rhyming quatrains207 total reviews
Comment from Lady Ophelia
This was such a fun read! Thanks for a few chuckles on a gloomy day! The rhyming is good, the flow is excellent and it has a nice pace. The story is fun and recognizable to anyone that remembers their childhood or knows a small child. I especially love the third verse "I know my lips are coated/but cut a guy a break/there isn't any way to prove/it's icing from this cake". The picture is adorable and works perfectly. Great work! :)
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2014
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This was such a fun read! Thanks for a few chuckles on a gloomy day! The rhyming is good, the flow is excellent and it has a nice pace. The story is fun and recognizable to anyone that remembers their childhood or knows a small child. I especially love the third verse "I know my lips are coated/but cut a guy a break/there isn't any way to prove/it's icing from this cake". The picture is adorable and works perfectly. Great work! :)
Comment Written 11-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2014
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Lady Ophelia, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Jumbo J
Hi Brooke,
you never fail to bring a smile to my lips... the visual alone was enough for that.
Just a superbly crafted, light-hearted work of joy... and one that I can relate to... not saying I'm a food snaveler... lets just say I might have been wrongly accused a few times... a picture tell a thousand tales, and this is a beauty... enjoyable and... yummy!
Wish I had the stars your work deserves.
With our thoughts we create,
plausible reasoning,
James xx
******Stars!!!!!!
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2014
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Hi Brooke,
you never fail to bring a smile to my lips... the visual alone was enough for that.
Just a superbly crafted, light-hearted work of joy... and one that I can relate to... not saying I'm a food snaveler... lets just say I might have been wrongly accused a few times... a picture tell a thousand tales, and this is a beauty... enjoyable and... yummy!
Wish I had the stars your work deserves.
With our thoughts we create,
plausible reasoning,
James xx
******Stars!!!!!!
Comment Written 11-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2014
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James, thank you so very much :-) Brooke
Comment from Paddywack
Of course it isn't this cute angel - you can tell how innocent he is just by looking at him. Sensational poetry again, Brooke. Love abounds in your writing - it's such a pleasure to read.
Thanks for sharing,
Paddy
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2014
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Of course it isn't this cute angel - you can tell how innocent he is just by looking at him. Sensational poetry again, Brooke. Love abounds in your writing - it's such a pleasure to read.
Thanks for sharing,
Paddy
Comment Written 11-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2014
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Paddy, thank you so very much for your thoughtful and generous response to this poem :-) Brooke
Comment from IndianaIrish
Your quatrains read effortlessly, Brooke, and I love the story of presumed innocence. All kids go through this and it's so much fun to hear their excuses that it wasn't them.
Smiles,
Karyn : )
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2014
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Your quatrains read effortlessly, Brooke, and I love the story of presumed innocence. All kids go through this and it's so much fun to hear their excuses that it wasn't them.
Smiles,
Karyn : )
Comment Written 11-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2014
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Karyn, thank you so very much :-) Brooke
Comment from Merriweather
I really enjoyed your delightful poem Brooke. Rhyming flawless. Shows how an ordinary subject such as a missing cupcake can be a lovely, clever poem. Sawyer must feel like a real star. I hope that you are putting your poems in a book for him, as he must feel very special. I feel that I know him in the short time I have been on site. Always enjoy your writing.
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2014
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I really enjoyed your delightful poem Brooke. Rhyming flawless. Shows how an ordinary subject such as a missing cupcake can be a lovely, clever poem. Sawyer must feel like a real star. I hope that you are putting your poems in a book for him, as he must feel very special. I feel that I know him in the short time I have been on site. Always enjoy your writing.
Comment Written 11-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2014
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Merriweather, thank you so much :-) At his age he just knows his mother loves to take pictures. LOL Brooke
Comment from Cedar
I'm sure little Sawyer is just holding the cupcake for the real thief. With those big eyes, he couldn't be guilty, no way. I enjoy reading your quatrains about Sawyer and all his adventures. Take care. Bill
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2014
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I'm sure little Sawyer is just holding the cupcake for the real thief. With those big eyes, he couldn't be guilty, no way. I enjoy reading your quatrains about Sawyer and all his adventures. Take care. Bill
Comment Written 11-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2014
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Thanks so very much, Bill :-) Brooke
Comment from Starlit Ink
Heh, heh, I enjoyed reading this light-hearted and fun poetry. Even kids know that when goodies are swiped, you can swallow the evidence. Maybe he will be a good lawyer when he grows up, since his argument is so convincing. :)
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2014
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Heh, heh, I enjoyed reading this light-hearted and fun poetry. Even kids know that when goodies are swiped, you can swallow the evidence. Maybe he will be a good lawyer when he grows up, since his argument is so convincing. :)
Comment Written 11-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2014
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Starlit Ink, thank you so very much :-) Brooke
Comment from crookedtoes
You are very very good at this, with this cupcake and the kid. He looks a bit suspicious, maybe that is what he did. Yet, who knows maybe he was just set-up, for to make it look that way. So the kid would maybe get a spank to make the guilty's day.
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2014
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You are very very good at this, with this cupcake and the kid. He looks a bit suspicious, maybe that is what he did. Yet, who knows maybe he was just set-up, for to make it look that way. So the kid would maybe get a spank to make the guilty's day.
Comment Written 11-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2014
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Thanks so much, crookedtoes, for your thoughtful and generous review :-) Brooke
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I believe you deserved it!!! I usually do enjoy reading your poems.
Comment from Kimberly216
I love this poem! It seriously reminds me of my nephew and the time he got caught with a bunch of cookies in his mouth. He denied it denied it denied it! Great topic!
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2014
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I love this poem! It seriously reminds me of my nephew and the time he got caught with a bunch of cookies in his mouth. He denied it denied it denied it! Great topic!
Comment Written 11-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2014
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Kimberly, thank you for sharing that memory and for your review :-) Brooke
Comment from Cornelius2000
That boy sure is growing fast, and it's been fun watching him do so through your picture progression. This is another one for your children's book of poetry....perfectly executed as usual....and a fun topic. Nicely done.
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2014
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That boy sure is growing fast, and it's been fun watching him do so through your picture progression. This is another one for your children's book of poetry....perfectly executed as usual....and a fun topic. Nicely done.
Comment Written 11-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2014
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Cornelius, thank you so much, my friend :-) Brooke
