They Claim a Cupcake's Missing
rhyming quatrains207 total reviews
Comment from poetbear
Precious image!
Poetically pefect and adorable.
Reads well and make sense.
Many will relate.
Sent it to my neice( also a teacher)
because she loves to bake especially decorated cupcakes!
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2014
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Precious image!
Poetically pefect and adorable.
Reads well and make sense.
Many will relate.
Sent it to my neice( also a teacher)
because she loves to bake especially decorated cupcakes!
Comment Written 23-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2014
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Maddie, thank you, my friend :-) I am always thrilled when a reader thinks enough of one of my poems to share it, so thank you for telling me you did that, and thank you for the sixth star :-) Brooke
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My pleasure!
Comment from StoryBrewer
I loved this poem! It was clever and funny and so true to life experiences. The photo was perfect as well. That little face was your poem personified.
The word ?Somebody? has 3 syllables and threw the timing off for just a moment. You might want to think of another word to take its place that has two syllables in order to maintain your timing in that one verse.
I even hate to mention it because it was so small and I just loved your poem.
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2014
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I loved this poem! It was clever and funny and so true to life experiences. The photo was perfect as well. That little face was your poem personified.
The word ?Somebody? has 3 syllables and threw the timing off for just a moment. You might want to think of another word to take its place that has two syllables in order to maintain your timing in that one verse.
I even hate to mention it because it was so small and I just loved your poem.
Comment Written 22-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2014
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Thank you, CJBrewer, for your thoughtful feedback. I will reread that line :-) Brooke
Comment from bhogg
Brooke - I haven't been on site much so missed this beautiful post. You have such a gift to treasure and share life's beautiful moments. I'm signing off ... With a smile!
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2014
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Brooke - I haven't been on site much so missed this beautiful post. You have such a gift to treasure and share life's beautiful moments. I'm signing off ... With a smile!
Comment Written 15-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2014
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Bill, I just woke up from a nap - the cabin fever has me in a funk, so what a lovely surprise :-) Thank you so very much, my generous friend :-) Brooke
Comment from Sanku
Brilliant!. brilliant photograph, brilliant expression on his face and a simply brilliant poem . Sawyer cant really understand why anyone should blame him for the cup cake which somehow landed in his hands. very very cute.
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2014
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Brilliant!. brilliant photograph, brilliant expression on his face and a simply brilliant poem . Sawyer cant really understand why anyone should blame him for the cup cake which somehow landed in his hands. very very cute.
Comment Written 13-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2014
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Thank you, Sanku, for your thoughtful comments and generous rating :-) Brooke
Comment from Cumbrianlass
I know I'm late with this one, Brooke, but I had to respond. The poem, of course, is wonderful, but that pic BY A MILE is my favourite one of Sawyer so far. His expression is absolutely priceless!
The poem is brilliant and that photograph the icing on the cake. Or maybe that should be the other way around? LOL!
Av
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2014
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I know I'm late with this one, Brooke, but I had to respond. The poem, of course, is wonderful, but that pic BY A MILE is my favourite one of Sawyer so far. His expression is absolutely priceless!
The poem is brilliant and that photograph the icing on the cake. Or maybe that should be the other way around? LOL!
Av
Comment Written 12-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2014
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Thank you so very much, Av. I appreciate your reviewing when no payout was involved :-) Brooke
Comment from jaded831
Your poem had excellent rhyme, was easy to read, and had a bit of comedy too. A combination that leads to a fine bit of writing. Once again the picture puts it over the top.
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2014
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Your poem had excellent rhyme, was easy to read, and had a bit of comedy too. A combination that leads to a fine bit of writing. Once again the picture puts it over the top.
Comment Written 12-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2014
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Jaded, thank you so very much :-) Brooke
Comment from Ridley Williams
Hello Brooke,
Ha ha, This one split my sides. You see, I'm in high sympathy with the "victim", as I have a serious weakness where those little cakes are concerned...seriously! My wife bought the "fixens" to make a batch last week, but still hasn't put them together. I gave her some incentive last night as she heard me get into the frosting and sprinkles! Who needs the cake? Lol. Nice thought and delivery...a pleasurable read. Best wishes, Bill
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2014
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Hello Brooke,
Ha ha, This one split my sides. You see, I'm in high sympathy with the "victim", as I have a serious weakness where those little cakes are concerned...seriously! My wife bought the "fixens" to make a batch last week, but still hasn't put them together. I gave her some incentive last night as she heard me get into the frosting and sprinkles! Who needs the cake? Lol. Nice thought and delivery...a pleasurable read. Best wishes, Bill
Comment Written 12-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2014
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LOL - thanks so much, Bill - you remind me of my daughter when she was little - she would lick the frosting off and let me have the naked cake :-) I so appreciate your generous sixth star. Brooke
Comment from jluzzle
I am pretty sure I have had a conversation very similar to this with my niece, at least once. Nice way of capturing the mischievous nature of all children, and sometimes us adults too. Thank you for sharing...
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2014
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I am pretty sure I have had a conversation very similar to this with my niece, at least once. Nice way of capturing the mischievous nature of all children, and sometimes us adults too. Thank you for sharing...
Comment Written 12-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2014
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Almost all children will lie to you straight out even when the evidence is all over their face or sitting in their hands. LOL Thanks so much, jluzzle :-) Brooke
Comment from Smoothiecool
your words take the reader on the journey of the innocents of a child when they feel they have done nothing wrong
of coarse it not me it just got there by its self
the rhyme works well in this Quatrain flows easy read
cheers Smoothiecool
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2014
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your words take the reader on the journey of the innocents of a child when they feel they have done nothing wrong
of coarse it not me it just got there by its self
the rhyme works well in this Quatrain flows easy read
cheers Smoothiecool
Comment Written 12-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2014
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Smoothiecool, thank you so much :-) Brooke
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most welcome...SC
Comment from Watermark1974
This is such a good example of an amazing poem. It's funny too, because regardless of age people think this way all through life. It wasn't me, nope, not me at all.
Lol, I loved it. Wonderful work!
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2014
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This is such a good example of an amazing poem. It's funny too, because regardless of age people think this way all through life. It wasn't me, nope, not me at all.
Lol, I loved it. Wonderful work!
Comment Written 12-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2014
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Watermark, thank you so much :-) Brooke
