A Stolen Kiss
triolet197 total reviews
Comment from michaelcahill
Ha! I saved this all week because I never have one for you and you always deserve one. You certainly do here. That opening couplet is priceless. I love it. That just says so much and does so to perfection. It amazes me how you use these forms as though they are made to fit what you write and not the other way around. This is touching and amusing and wise all at the same time. Bravo! mikey
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2014
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Ha! I saved this all week because I never have one for you and you always deserve one. You certainly do here. That opening couplet is priceless. I love it. That just says so much and does so to perfection. It amazes me how you use these forms as though they are made to fit what you write and not the other way around. This is touching and amusing and wise all at the same time. Bravo! mikey
Comment Written 07-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2014
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Mikey, I'm honored. Thank you so much, my generous and thoughtful friend :-) Brooke
Comment from alexgeorge
Haha, just look at his face! He's probably thinking: "Now, what does she expect me to do in return? Surely she doesn't want a kiss back...er, mommy, I think I need help here--help!"
Haha!
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2014
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Haha, just look at his face! He's probably thinking: "Now, what does she expect me to do in return? Surely she doesn't want a kiss back...er, mommy, I think I need help here--help!"
Haha!
Comment Written 07-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2014
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Alex, thanks so much. Girls sure can be intimidating, but best he learns early. LOL I appreciate your good humor and generous sixth star :-) Brooke
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welcome :)
Comment from Just2Write
A stolen kiss is not a crime
if love is in the poacher's heart.
How sweet is that??? Loved the tone and flow of this superbly written Triolet. Great choice on the repeating line. Best of luck in the contest. This one will be hard to beat. Your picture is such an asset to the poetry.
Rose.
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2014
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A stolen kiss is not a crime
if love is in the poacher's heart.
How sweet is that??? Loved the tone and flow of this superbly written Triolet. Great choice on the repeating line. Best of luck in the contest. This one will be hard to beat. Your picture is such an asset to the poetry.
Rose.
Comment Written 07-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2014
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Thank you so much, Rose. I appreciate your thoughtful and supportive comments and generous rating :-) Brooke
Comment from Bryana
Well, Sawyer is being seduced already.
You have to warn him about women! LOL
The picture is sooooo cute and the poem
is absolutely lovely. Sawyer is going
to enjoy reading and looking at all the
poems you've written.
Have a wonderful weekend dear Brooke
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2014
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Well, Sawyer is being seduced already.
You have to warn him about women! LOL
The picture is sooooo cute and the poem
is absolutely lovely. Sawyer is going
to enjoy reading and looking at all the
poems you've written.
Have a wonderful weekend dear Brooke
Comment Written 07-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2014
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He calls this little girl up on his play phone all the time when she's not there - I think it's too late to warn him already ;-)
thanks so much, Bryana :-) Brooke
Comment from Ekim777
They say brevity is the soul of wit and I say, the same applies to fine poetry. Repeated lines well placed can be oh, so striking. To me, you finest, most striking line is;
"No bell will ring without its chime." It echoes in its profundity. -Ekim777
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2014
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They say brevity is the soul of wit and I say, the same applies to fine poetry. Repeated lines well placed can be oh, so striking. To me, you finest, most striking line is;
"No bell will ring without its chime." It echoes in its profundity. -Ekim777
Comment Written 07-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2014
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Ekim, thank you so very much for your graciousness and generosity :-) Brooke
Comment from LateBloomer
Hello adewpearl, Brooke, Your triolet is sweetly penned, and it made me smile from ear to ear. Your words ring true, especially:
and I'll not rest until you're mine
(Oh how love can move mountains, and if one is not "feeling the earth move" under their feet, something is wrong ... and if "Moses" isn't going to the mountain, then he's just not that into her. When a man loves, he will move mountains.)
I also liked:
A stolen kiss is not a crime
if love is in the poacher's heart.
(Ohhh, those stolen kisses can be the best ever - lol.)
Brooke, this is a deliciously fun poem, very timely, and graceful. As this is a contest, I wish you good luck.
LateBloomer
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2014
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Hello adewpearl, Brooke, Your triolet is sweetly penned, and it made me smile from ear to ear. Your words ring true, especially:
and I'll not rest until you're mine
(Oh how love can move mountains, and if one is not "feeling the earth move" under their feet, something is wrong ... and if "Moses" isn't going to the mountain, then he's just not that into her. When a man loves, he will move mountains.)
I also liked:
A stolen kiss is not a crime
if love is in the poacher's heart.
(Ohhh, those stolen kisses can be the best ever - lol.)
Brooke, this is a deliciously fun poem, very timely, and graceful. As this is a contest, I wish you good luck.
LateBloomer
Comment Written 07-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2014
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Thanks so much, LateBloomer. So glad you enjoyed :-) Brooke
Comment from Jeanie Mercer
"A stolen kiss is not a crime" is the perfect repeating line for this triolet. I love this form, but somehow I forget to write in it. Yours are always wonderful, as is this one. Love, Jeanie (P.S. Precious picture!)
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2014
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"A stolen kiss is not a crime" is the perfect repeating line for this triolet. I love this form, but somehow I forget to write in it. Yours are always wonderful, as is this one. Love, Jeanie (P.S. Precious picture!)
Comment Written 07-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2014
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Jeanie, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Lovewritingstuff
Good luck with this contest, Brooke. I must say the picture is lovely.
Love the way you explored the meaning of stealing a kiss. Good rhyming without seeming to be forced.
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2014
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Good luck with this contest, Brooke. I must say the picture is lovely.
Love the way you explored the meaning of stealing a kiss. Good rhyming without seeming to be forced.
Comment Written 07-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2014
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Lovewritingstuff, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
A stolen kiss is not a crime
if love is in the poacher's heart.
Oh, how lovely is this - and they are so sweet,
altho Sawyer doesn't look too sure, Brooke.
margaret
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2014
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A stolen kiss is not a crime
if love is in the poacher's heart.
Oh, how lovely is this - and they are so sweet,
altho Sawyer doesn't look too sure, Brooke.
margaret
Comment Written 07-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2014
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Margaret, thank you so much :-) BRooke
Comment from Leineco
With the picture - adorably sweet
Without the picture - nice "old world" touch on the Valentine's theme.
Seamless insertion of the repeated lines (you almost have to "search" for them to realize a Triolet has been formed. I like the kiss/crime consonance and simultaneous continuous ess sound sprinkled throughout (kiss/is/poacher's/rest/etc.) The poem is lovely to read aloud :-)
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2014
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With the picture - adorably sweet
Without the picture - nice "old world" touch on the Valentine's theme.
Seamless insertion of the repeated lines (you almost have to "search" for them to realize a Triolet has been formed. I like the kiss/crime consonance and simultaneous continuous ess sound sprinkled throughout (kiss/is/poacher's/rest/etc.) The poem is lovely to read aloud :-)
Comment Written 07-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2014
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Leineco, thank you so much :-) Brooke
