Comment from trimple

Excellent

A deep, dark brackish sea, flows with no finer bed of feathered oyster pearl. Is how I would describe your excellent way of crafting prose. Great sence of ol'e sea dog verbal splatter.

Loved 'well bred, with length of bone, LOL

Sorry I hadn't taken the opportunity to read your works.
Cleary my loss. But I shall now, after reading this splendid
piece. Miss no more.

My ammunition of stars have been already been shot, otherwise, a full galaxy would have been duly given.


Kindest regards
My virtual friend
tracey trimple :)

 Comment Written 21-Feb-2014

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reply by the author on 21-Feb-2014

Hey, thank you very much, trimple. The fact that you enjoyed it means more to me than an extra star, my friend. Thanks again for reading and reviewing my work. Much obliged!

Comment from ann marie mazz

Excellent

hello dean

I hope this day finds you well
I've been away for awhile

you bet all your marvelous entries the sea holds secrets

have a seat dean and let me ramble
a couple of years ago jennifer lopez told a contestant on american idol there was nothing for her to say there was nothing to critique and that he could just sing and do whatever he wanted to do and she would just sit and listen

jennifer lopez was referring to a contestant named joshua
at any rate dean
this is what I want to say to you
there is nothing to say or critique from what I see
you are top level in composition and artistry
truly
the reader enters reads and enjoys your talent

yes
you set the stage and tone with the opening line and with the manner in which you spoke that is so fitting to the time and place of this tale

you also know how to deliver an ending as well

god bless martha

thank you for sharing
have a wonderful night
ann marie

you are a hoot dean

 Comment Written 20-Feb-2014

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reply by the author on 20-Feb-2014

Thanks for taking the time to catch up with this one and review it for me. Your kind comments and high praise have really helped to make my day, and I mean that sincerely.

Best wishes to you forever & always!

~Dean~

Comment from lancellot

Excellent

A well told horror tale in poetic form. This is one that should have been the Ocean contest. It cry's out beware of what the sea hides. A great job.

 Comment Written 09-Feb-2014

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reply by the author on 09-Feb-2014

Thank you very much, lancellot. At the time of it's writing, I was unaware of the contest you mention. Ah well, I am still very pleased that it has been so well received, and I'm especially pleased that you enjoyed it. Thanks for the fabulous review.

Comment from Green Lake Girl

Excellent

So glad you are posting again! How is your health?

We are vacationing on Grand Cayman Island. I will be extra cautious swimming in the briny deep! I don't want Martha tugging on my ankles. Nor do I have any desire to become a "bride" of the sea!

Well done, Dean.

 Comment Written 08-Feb-2014

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reply by the author on 09-Feb-2014

Thank you, Green Lake Girl, I appreciate it.

Have fun, stay safe...

Comment from alexgeorge

Exceptional

You truly are an awesome writer, Dean. The words you use, and the way you relate a tale is unique, a talent that cannot be copied, or maybe can't even be taught.

This was a brilliant poem with engaging, thrilling pictures. I hope to see your name one day on the cover of a published book of poems, then I can say, "I know this fellow named Dean. I met him on fanstory, and he is THE talent at writing poems."

Well done!

 Comment Written 07-Feb-2014

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reply by the author on 08-Feb-2014

Thanks so much, Alex, for your unyielding support over these past few months that I have been a member here. It is feedback from very talented writers, such as yourself, that keeps me bangin' away at my keypad.

Thanks so much for the read, the review and, most importantly of all, the wonderful compliment!

reply by alexgeorge on 08-Feb-2014

welcome

Comment from livelylinda

Excellent

Dean: of course, six star worthy but I'm out so 'twill be virtual. Well, first comes the movie "Titanic" and now this delightful little sea chant. . .will I ever again go new the water??? Great writing. Linda

 Comment Written 07-Feb-2014

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reply by the author on 08-Feb-2014

Thank you, Linda. I worry less & less now about the stars, and far more about entertaining people, much like yourself. That's the truly important thing to me, that is why I really write, when you get right down to it.

Much obliged to you, my dear friend!

Comment from faragon

Exceptional

WOW!!! Shades of Poe & Jack Sparrow! We done me matey. I was indeed shivering in me timbers as I read you lovely little ditty! Very descriptive...you can hear the cannons, picture the creature who "saves" her even before you see your picture. I thoroughly enjoyed it!

 Comment Written 07-Feb-2014

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reply by the author on 08-Feb-2014

Thank you so much, faragon. I appreciate your insights into this work, and I hope to see more reads & reviews from you in the future!

Thanks so much, again!

Comment from Twilightspire

Excellent

Nicely done, my friend. I love the length of this piece. Long enough to truly enjoy but short enough to read in one go. The poetic prose was fascinating and it wasn't hard to picture the scope and scenery if the story. Excellent touch with pics, also. Good job. Oh and near the end you misspelled "Martha"
-T.J.

 Comment Written 06-Feb-2014

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reply by the author on 08-Feb-2014

Thanks very much, TJ, as always. Pirates have always been sort of a closet fetish of mine (LOL), and I am very glad that you enjoyed this one!

Comment from Writingfundimension

Excellent

'I'm as ancient as the mountains. I'm as endless as the skies;
an eternal flowing fountain - spewing an endless web of lies...'

Just one of the many lines I totally enjoyed in this poem, Dean. Great rhyme and meter, as always.

Delightfully creepy!

Bev

 Comment Written 06-Feb-2014

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reply by the author on 08-Feb-2014

Thanks, Bev, I am truly glad you liked this one!

I have to give the nod for that stanza to ravenblack. He urged me to flesh out my villain a bit more, so I added that stanza. My sincere thanks to the both of you!

reply by Writingfundimension on 08-Feb-2014

You're very welcome, Dean. All my best, Bev

Comment from Sylvia Page

Excellent

Dean as usual your story is one that keeps the reader spellbound and glued to the end of the tale. These stories of pirates and their mutinies have to be written in a realistic manner to be credible such as what you have done here. I like the sea monster!
Cheers
Sylvia

 Comment Written 06-Feb-2014

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reply by the author on 08-Feb-2014

Thank you very much, Sylvia. I am so happy you enjoyed this one!