It Is Everywhere
Tetractys17 total reviews
Comment from Selina Stambi
Santha,
I'm so delighted to see your recent writing.
My dear friend, your recent 'dark' spell seems to have led you to some kind of epiphany - this, and the previous piece are absolutely brilliant.
They FLOW with an inner glow that I haven't felt in your previous writings.
When God comes ... he comes!!
Hugs and so much love,
xxx
Sonali :)
(dewdrop)
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2014
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Santha,
I'm so delighted to see your recent writing.
My dear friend, your recent 'dark' spell seems to have led you to some kind of epiphany - this, and the previous piece are absolutely brilliant.
They FLOW with an inner glow that I haven't felt in your previous writings.
When God comes ... he comes!!
Hugs and so much love,
xxx
Sonali :)
(dewdrop)
Comment Written 09-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2014
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Thank you very mmuch ,Sonali.I dont know why i get these bouts,but when i do get those ,I feel unappreciated by those around me. sadly there is no one I can talk to.So i talk to God ,and then I feel reassured that each one of us have been designated to a life by Him.Our duty is to live this life. Fanstory is my private world. i can be myself here sans the mask .do you know no one ever ask me what i write?
Sorry for cribbing.you will soon find me cheerful.Thanks so much for encouraging me.
Comment from adewpearl
Your poem is beautifully presented and is in good syllable count for the tetractys
nice alliteration in dew drop
sun-kissed grass - add the hyphen
blades...glitters - should be blades...glitter
you create a lovely scene with a thoughtful nod to the Creator of that scene :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2014
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Your poem is beautifully presented and is in good syllable count for the tetractys
nice alliteration in dew drop
sun-kissed grass - add the hyphen
blades...glitters - should be blades...glitter
you create a lovely scene with a thoughtful nod to the Creator of that scene :-) Brooke
Comment Written 05-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2014
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Thank you very much ,Brooke.Thank you for pointing out the hyphen .
A dew drop( glitters.)
but now i feel 'blades' should have been 'blade' since it is only a single dew drop.or as another reviewer sugested, i should keep "these dew drops'instead of 'a'.
A reviewer suggested changing it to "these' dew drops glitter
Comment from emrpoems
A
dew drop
on the green
blades of sun kissed
grass glitters with His deep enduring love.
Perfect structure for the Tetractys poem
lovely piece on nature. Something we take for granted each day. God luck in the contest
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2014
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A
dew drop
on the green
blades of sun kissed
grass glitters with His deep enduring love.
Perfect structure for the Tetractys poem
lovely piece on nature. Something we take for granted each day. God luck in the contest
Comment Written 05-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2014
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Thank you very much.
Comment from jmdg1954
A
dew drop
on the green
blades of sun kissed
grass glitters with His deep enduring love.
All we have to do is look around and we will see signs of God and his love for us. Yesterday a dew drop, today a rain storm. He is all around us, John
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2014
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A
dew drop
on the green
blades of sun kissed
grass glitters with His deep enduring love.
All we have to do is look around and we will see signs of God and his love for us. Yesterday a dew drop, today a rain storm. He is all around us, John
Comment Written 05-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2014
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thank you very much.
Comment from Carolyn 'Deaton' Stephens
Simply sensational. Short, concise and easily interpreted. A poem of tribute to God the creator of all living things, because of His deep enduring love. Good luck, great job, Carolyn
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2014
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Simply sensational. Short, concise and easily interpreted. A poem of tribute to God the creator of all living things, because of His deep enduring love. Good luck, great job, Carolyn
Comment Written 05-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2014
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Thank you very very much for reading and enjoying this little piece .i am honoured, and believe me this has lightened my gloom.
Comment from handmadecards
A solid & truthful piece of writing. Follows the tetractys prompt to a tee. Great choice of artwork. However, being a competition entry, I feel it lacks originality to really make it stand out. That said, it is still a very beautiful piece.
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2014
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A solid & truthful piece of writing. Follows the tetractys prompt to a tee. Great choice of artwork. However, being a competition entry, I feel it lacks originality to really make it stand out. That said, it is still a very beautiful piece.
Comment Written 04-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2014
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Thank you very much for reading and reviewing.I agree ,this is a commonplace theme.
Comment from in777wr#
This was a wonderfully written tetractys poem. Your 1/2/3/4/10 syllable count is in good order. The last line of this poem brings it together well. Nice job.
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2014
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This was a wonderfully written tetractys poem. Your 1/2/3/4/10 syllable count is in good order. The last line of this poem brings it together well. Nice job.
Comment Written 04-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2014
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Thank you very much for this beautiful review.
Comment from rouskin
Compelling pairing of poem and picture:blades of sun kissed
grass glitters with His deep enduring love. Best of luck in your contest
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2014
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Compelling pairing of poem and picture:blades of sun kissed
grass glitters with His deep enduring love. Best of luck in your contest
Comment Written 04-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2014
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Thank you very much for this beautiful review.
Comment from suep
This is a beautifully written poem. You meet the line and syllable requirements. Nice alliteration. Great rhythm and flow. Wonderful message. Excellent work ... Best wishes in the contest! :)
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2014
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This is a beautifully written poem. You meet the line and syllable requirements. Nice alliteration. Great rhythm and flow. Wonderful message. Excellent work ... Best wishes in the contest! :)
Comment Written 04-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2014
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Thank you very very much for this generous star and for reading and enjoying my little piece of poetry. You have made my day!
Comment from MarjorieAnne
Compliments for great subject matter, appealing alliteration and assonance. Rather than "A" as first word, how about "These"--and then make "drop" plural and take the S off "glitter"? Also, I'd suggest using "God's" instead of "His".
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reply by the author on 05-Feb-2014
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Compliments for great subject matter, appealing alliteration and assonance. Rather than "A" as first word, how about "These"--and then make "drop" plural and take the S off "glitter"? Also, I'd suggest using "God's" instead of "His".
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 04-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2014
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Thank you very much for reading and giving these valuable suggestion.i will surely think about incorporating the ideas.
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You're welcome
