Sharing
a whimsical minute poem147 total reviews
Comment from Zinnia48
This is a learning experience for me as I am unfamiliar with a minute poem. However, having said that, it is a fun style that explores a difference of opinion about sharing. I liked it. I liked it! Caroline
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2014
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This is a learning experience for me as I am unfamiliar with a minute poem. However, having said that, it is a fun style that explores a difference of opinion about sharing. I liked it. I liked it! Caroline
Comment Written 04-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2014
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Caroline, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Leineco
You have hit the perfect minute cadence. . .and made me chuckle to boot :D
And I'll attest to Daddy's claim -
what's mine is mine. . .
so move along!
I may share my broccoli,
my liver or my stinky cheese
but not my corn dog foot long.
And ice cream is just sacrosanct
don't even think about it
In this your momma's wrong!
LOL
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2014
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You have hit the perfect minute cadence. . .and made me chuckle to boot :D
And I'll attest to Daddy's claim -
what's mine is mine. . .
so move along!
I may share my broccoli,
my liver or my stinky cheese
but not my corn dog foot long.
And ice cream is just sacrosanct
don't even think about it
In this your momma's wrong!
LOL
Comment Written 04-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2014
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Leineco, thank you so much for your creative response to my poem :-) Brooke
Comment from michaelcahill
Hahaha. Oh dear. As an only child, I am afraid that is me! I will buy you your own, but you can't have any of mine. How awful it appears in print! This is wonderful and moves so perfectly. The form scared me off actually. It seems easy when it is executed to perfection like this. Oh, but where to begin? Loved it. mikey
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2014
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Hahaha. Oh dear. As an only child, I am afraid that is me! I will buy you your own, but you can't have any of mine. How awful it appears in print! This is wonderful and moves so perfectly. The form scared me off actually. It seems easy when it is executed to perfection like this. Oh, but where to begin? Loved it. mikey
Comment Written 04-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2014
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mikey, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from mumsyone
A cute poem in minute poem structure, something I've yet to try. You've provided a good example here.
This reminds me of my grandson, who, when he was still too young to eat solid food, opened his mouth every time I took a bite!
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2014
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A cute poem in minute poem structure, something I've yet to try. You've provided a good example here.
This reminds me of my grandson, who, when he was still too young to eat solid food, opened his mouth every time I took a bite!
Comment Written 04-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2014
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Lois, what a lovely memory. Thanks so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Kingsland
This poem had me thinking about the differences in people. would just share while others just don't see it that way. I enjoyed reading this well written verse that opened up my mind for thinking... John
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This poem had me thinking about the differences in people. would just share while others just don't see it that way. I enjoyed reading this well written verse that opened up my mind for thinking... John
Comment Written 04-Feb-2014
Comment from Just2Write
Children have such a clearer concept of civil graces. (If they think you are having something to eat - you should share.) They don't share the belief that THEY should share food, unless it's liver or spinach)
My parrot and dog feel the same way. If I am eating toast they expect some - yet they do not offer to share their treats with me.
Cute picture and a great Minute poem - I haven't seen one in ages.
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2014
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Children have such a clearer concept of civil graces. (If they think you are having something to eat - you should share.) They don't share the belief that THEY should share food, unless it's liver or spinach)
My parrot and dog feel the same way. If I am eating toast they expect some - yet they do not offer to share their treats with me.
Cute picture and a great Minute poem - I haven't seen one in ages.
Comment Written 04-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2014
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Thank you so much, Rose :-) Brooke
Comment from RalphNater
Haha, this is very cute. You have a real gift at sharing your family so eloquently. I too, suffer the curs of what's mine is mine ahahaha
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Haha, this is very cute. You have a real gift at sharing your family so eloquently. I too, suffer the curs of what's mine is mine ahahaha
Comment Written 04-Feb-2014
Comment from MelReyn
LOL! I love when a writer uses a child as the POV character but makes them sound like adults instead of dumbing them down. Kids are smart, they just look at things differently. You captured that feel brilliantly!
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LOL! I love when a writer uses a child as the POV character but makes them sound like adults instead of dumbing them down. Kids are smart, they just look at things differently. You captured that feel brilliantly!
Comment Written 04-Feb-2014
Comment from mermaids
You capture a whimsical moment with your words. The reader can laugh at this moment with father and son and the attempted sharing of a treat. Your poetic form fits this scene well.
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2014
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You capture a whimsical moment with your words. The reader can laugh at this moment with father and son and the attempted sharing of a treat. Your poetic form fits this scene well.
Comment Written 04-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2014
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Elaine, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from emrpoems
Perfect syllable count 8/4/4/4 8/4/4/4 8/4/4/4 in iambic meter
Rhyme scheme aabb ccdd eeff.
Excellent use of enjambment and some alliteration
Superb pairing of picture of Sawyer and poem
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Perfect syllable count 8/4/4/4 8/4/4/4 8/4/4/4 in iambic meter
Rhyme scheme aabb ccdd eeff.
Excellent use of enjambment and some alliteration
Superb pairing of picture of Sawyer and poem
Comment Written 04-Feb-2014
