Comment from RPSaxena

Excellent

Hello Brooke,
Lovely piece of Children Poetry fulfilling all the desired norms and beautifully depicting sweet exchange of views between son and his Dad!
Wording is simple and impressive.
Spontaneous flow from top to bottom.
Nice rhyming scheme with lively imagery and pictorial quality.
Excellent!

 Comment Written 03-Feb-2014

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reply by the author on 03-Feb-2014

RP, thank you so very much :-) Brooke

Comment from Carolyn 'Deaton' Stephens

Excellent

Miranda is becoming quite the photographer. This poem and the picture of Sawyer and Daddy is delightful. I keep reading carefully to find an 'edit' for you and never do. LOL Well done Brooke, have a great week, :-) Carolyn

 Comment Written 03-Feb-2014

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reply by the author on 03-Feb-2014

Carolyn, thank you so much :-) Brooke

Comment from ravenblack

Excellent

My dad is an ice cream fiend. If I ever got between him and a spoonful of Neapolitan, I would probably lose a limb. Sometimes, sharing just does not work. Hilarious photo of your son-in-law.

 Comment Written 03-Feb-2014

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reply by the author on 03-Feb-2014

ravenblack, thank you for the laugh and for the review :-) Brooke

Comment from Carole Rosa

Excellent

Brooke, Miranda is a wonderful photographer. Sawyer has just a darling look of surprise. His daddy's expression is worth a thousand words. Very cute. Oh, and your poem is cute too! Sawyer is so lucky to have such a wonderful family.
Carole

 Comment Written 03-Feb-2014

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reply by the author on 03-Feb-2014

Carole, thank you so much, and yes, I'm so proud of her photography :-) Brooke

Comment from CR Delport

Excellent

Haha, this so so funny. That look says it all :) But the Cute Little One is so daring :) Not even daddy's stare will stop him. Thanks for sharing another gem.

 Comment Written 02-Feb-2014

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reply by the author on 03-Feb-2014

CR, thank you so much :-) Brooke

Comment from playinaround

Excellent

This is so cute!! Love the theme and the humor. So well written with difficult guidelines. The picture is priceless. Nice write!!

 Comment Written 02-Feb-2014

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reply by the author on 03-Feb-2014

playinaround, thank you so much :-) Brooke

Comment from Bayberry

Excellent

This little poem is a real sweetie...sure matches the picture, too. It's always a delight to see a father and son together having such a good time. Your poetic Sawyer Saga continues to bring big smiles. :) Janet

 Comment Written 02-Feb-2014

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reply by the author on 03-Feb-2014

Janet, thank you so very much :-) Brooke

Comment from rama devi

Excellent

Adorable picture and poem to match it. It's a well penned minute poem--musical and well rhymed. Flawless meter. Bouncy beat. Good consonance of S and c-k sounds. Especially liked skim and him--a very fresh rhyme pair!

Love,
rd

 Comment Written 02-Feb-2014

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reply by the author on 03-Feb-2014

rama devi, thank you so very much for your thoughtful comments :-) Brooke

Comment from Tonulak

Excellent

DEar Brooke,
This was a very enjoyable minute poem. I thought it was very cute having Sawyer stealing a lick off the sweet treat. I wrote a song lyric once:
"You know my eyes are wicked
They want everything they see
I'd steal a lick of your ice cream cone
Sitting under a shady tree"
I guess some kids never grow up:)
Great job--Ted

 Comment Written 02-Feb-2014

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reply by the author on 03-Feb-2014

Thanks so much, Ted - love your song excerpt :-) Brooke

Comment from Just Pete

Excellent

Another of your very entertaining poems. The form of poetry is unusual, but you seem to have mastered it. I'm a little surprised that you didn't enter it in the 'minute' contest. It's a worthy entry.

 Comment Written 02-Feb-2014

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reply by the author on 02-Feb-2014

Thanks so much, Pete. I don't believe in blind contests, so I don't enter them. Back in the old days before the daily prompts were blind, I entered them all the time :-) Brooke