By Whose Design?
An American Sentence56 total reviews
Comment from Acquired Taste
One never gets over losing your first figure of love and to have to let her go so early robbed you of years of closeness, guidance and friendship.
It is a hollow in your soul that remains regardless of how you attempt to fill it.
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reply by the author on 02-Feb-2014
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One never gets over losing your first figure of love and to have to let her go so early robbed you of years of closeness, guidance and friendship.
It is a hollow in your soul that remains regardless of how you attempt to fill it.
AT=/
Comment Written 02-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2014
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I'm touched by your insights and wisdom, AT. You have said it all in this wonderful review. Blessings, Bev
Comment from JW
How sad. I am sorry to hear that you lost your mother at such a young age. I can imagine how devastating that must have been.
I'm sure she would be honored with your poem.
Thanks for sharing this. JW
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2014
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How sad. I am sorry to hear that you lost your mother at such a young age. I can imagine how devastating that must have been.
I'm sure she would be honored with your poem.
Thanks for sharing this. JW
Comment Written 02-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2014
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Jonathon, thank you so very much. Your kind words really touched my heart. Bev
Comment from Norbanus
Forever has no days attached,
Those paths continue on,
far past the boundaries of this world
into eternal dawn.
Fear not that you are left alone,
to stumble in the night.
Though you must face those dreams unknown,
Your heart displays it right.
If trust escapes while on your climb
fade not your love serene.
You'll walk on past the bounds of time,
beyond Earth's grief stained scene.
So let time send us what it may
To heal the wounds there's naught to say.
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2014
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Forever has no days attached,
Those paths continue on,
far past the boundaries of this world
into eternal dawn.
Fear not that you are left alone,
to stumble in the night.
Though you must face those dreams unknown,
Your heart displays it right.
If trust escapes while on your climb
fade not your love serene.
You'll walk on past the bounds of time,
beyond Earth's grief stained scene.
So let time send us what it may
To heal the wounds there's naught to say.
Comment Written 02-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2014
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What a beautiful and loving response, Norbanus. The adult part of me has gone on - I'm 60 now. But the child... well that is another matter. Sometimes what tortures the most is what you don't know but can imagine.
Thanks so much for this superb review.
Bev
Comment from jadapenn
It's shocking to lose a mother, but 7 is a very young age and terrible scars are left. I was just saying today, how I miss my dad who left when I was 18. At least I was able to care for myself at this age. But 7. Your words are very strong, Bev. She was very young. Well penned, friend. luv jada
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2014
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It's shocking to lose a mother, but 7 is a very young age and terrible scars are left. I was just saying today, how I miss my dad who left when I was 18. At least I was able to care for myself at this age. But 7. Your words are very strong, Bev. She was very young. Well penned, friend. luv jada
Comment Written 02-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2014
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She was a very special lady, Jada. A farm girl and the youngest of twelve children. Her death was a terrific blow to all who loved and knew her. All because of a doctor who considered a date with his lover more important than my mother's life. Thank you so much for your understanding, my dear friend. Hugs, Bev
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Oh, no. I'm sorry, friend. You be my sister, although my mom is probably chatting to yours. :) luv jada
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What a lovely thought, Jada. That makes me smile. You rock, girlfriend. XXX Bev
Comment from Cumbrianlass
Ah, my dearest Bev, so young to lose a mother, and so young to lose a life! How sad indeed. This is a strong sentence. Of course, a child needs the security of a mother or a mother figure. Worse, a seven year old is on the cusp of reason.
How devastating it must have been. I'm so sorry. I'm certain she's been with you all along anyway. And it occurs to me that your infinity with the Holy mother is perhaps part of that.
Love you!
Av
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reply by the author on 02-Feb-2014
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Ah, my dearest Bev, so young to lose a mother, and so young to lose a life! How sad indeed. This is a strong sentence. Of course, a child needs the security of a mother or a mother figure. Worse, a seven year old is on the cusp of reason.
How devastating it must have been. I'm so sorry. I'm certain she's been with you all along anyway. And it occurs to me that your infinity with the Holy mother is perhaps part of that.
Love you!
Av
xxx
Comment Written 02-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2014
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You're are so right, Av. After my mother's death, the Blessed Mother was where I went for comfort. I remain in her debt and service because of her helping me to deal with that loss. It's been hard to read Margaret's latest chapters because she describes brilliantly just what my two younger sisters and myself faced.
Thank you for your wonderfully kind words, my lovely friend.
Hugs, Bev
Comment from Green Lake Girl
Bev, from a purely technical standpoint, I must say that you've mastered conveying emotion, imagery, and meaning in an economy of words. You are very skilled at this.
I am so sorry for the loss of your mother at such an impressionable, young age. The two words, "compromise security" carries a lot of weight. At the age of seven, your sense of security was shaken to the core. When the hub of the family passes away, the ripple effect is astonishing.
Bev, your mother would be so proud of the fine woman you've become. You are kind, giving, and talented. Maxine is smiling down on you from above!
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2014
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Bev, from a purely technical standpoint, I must say that you've mastered conveying emotion, imagery, and meaning in an economy of words. You are very skilled at this.
I am so sorry for the loss of your mother at such an impressionable, young age. The two words, "compromise security" carries a lot of weight. At the age of seven, your sense of security was shaken to the core. When the hub of the family passes away, the ripple effect is astonishing.
Bev, your mother would be so proud of the fine woman you've become. You are kind, giving, and talented. Maxine is smiling down on you from above!
Comment Written 02-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2014
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Dear Marietta. Thank you for this wise and wonderfully encouraging review. Your words really touch my heart, my friend! Thank you so much for being there for me in all I do. It means more than I can say. Hugs, Bev
Comment from Dawn Munro
How very profound this poem is, Bev - and so sorrowful. I was more than ten years older than you were, and it was devastating, but for a seven-year old, I can see how it would be terrifying to lose a mother - I'm sorry.
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2014
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How very profound this poem is, Bev - and so sorrowful. I was more than ten years older than you were, and it was devastating, but for a seven-year old, I can see how it would be terrifying to lose a mother - I'm sorry.
Comment Written 02-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2014
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Dawn, it's a terrible thing losing a mother at any age. So, you have my sincere sympathy as well. Our society has a long way to go in learning how to communicate with and help heal the young ones who lose a parent through many kinds of death - including divorce and abandonment. I think maybe I've got to do something about that with some sort of write. Thanks again, my lovely friend.
Hugs, Bev
Comment from AprilShower
Hi. Bev. I am sorry. To lose a mother at that age has to be traumatic.
I read your author's notes, but one sentence I don't completely understand. Could you clarify?
The passage of time has barely dulled the sense of utter destruction of my seven-year old's world.
Should this sentence read?
The passage of time has barely dulled the sense of utter destruction of my seven-year-old world.
Could you have been old enough to have a seven-year-old child? If so, you both were very young mothers.
April
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2014
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Hi. Bev. I am sorry. To lose a mother at that age has to be traumatic.
I read your author's notes, but one sentence I don't completely understand. Could you clarify?
The passage of time has barely dulled the sense of utter destruction of my seven-year old's world.
Should this sentence read?
The passage of time has barely dulled the sense of utter destruction of my seven-year-old world.
Could you have been old enough to have a seven-year-old child? If so, you both were very young mothers.
April
Comment Written 02-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2014
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Thanks, April, for your kind words and suggestion. I think your way of putting it would make it more clear. I was the child, so the change makes sense.
Bev
Comment from CR Delport
If someone was part of your world for any length of time, their memory would remain with you forever. Thank you for sharing this heartfelt words.
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2014
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If someone was part of your world for any length of time, their memory would remain with you forever. Thank you for sharing this heartfelt words.
Comment Written 02-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2014
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I appreciate your kind words, CR. Thank you! Bev
Comment from Patrick G Cox
Hi Writingfundimesion
Very nice way to remember someone you lost such a long while back. I hope the memories you have of her are good ones.
Patrick
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2014
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Hi Writingfundimesion
Very nice way to remember someone you lost such a long while back. I hope the memories you have of her are good ones.
Patrick
Comment Written 02-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2014
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Well, that's the hard part, Patrick. I have so few memories of her - it's been fifty three years since she died. That's, in some ways, the cruelest thing to bear.
I so appreciate your kind review, my friend.
Bev
