Ode to the Sea
Ode Contest Entry83 total reviews
Comment from Kenneth Schaal
Mr. Steve, you might just have another winner here. It reads good, and you did right by occasionally altering the meter and changing the rhythms and emotions of the verse. Classic imagery and metaphor, though often used, is used judicially and with good form--and you choose a classic subject to ode. Good stuff. Kenny
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2014
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Mr. Steve, you might just have another winner here. It reads good, and you did right by occasionally altering the meter and changing the rhythms and emotions of the verse. Classic imagery and metaphor, though often used, is used judicially and with good form--and you choose a classic subject to ode. Good stuff. Kenny
Comment Written 01-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2014
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Thanks, Kenny.
I do feel the ode demands serious, rather classical style - let's hope the judges agree with me.
Steve
Comment from dmt1967
This is a well written poem my friend a bit melodramatic for me but very well done all the same good luck in the contest and thank you for sharing
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2014
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This is a well written poem my friend a bit melodramatic for me but very well done all the same good luck in the contest and thank you for sharing
Comment Written 01-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2014
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Too much like English classes, huh? I can understand that - I just feel the ode deserves something serious and formal - plenty of the other ort in my portfolio too.
Steve
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Four superb stanzas in your Ode to the sea. Beautifully written. Your rhyme scheme is very good - flows well and needs time to study the style. You have done every well with the first 4 lines in each stanza in abab rhyme, 5th line in each stanza - no rhyme and thereafter every stanza in abcba. Very will constructed and the content of your Ode is very good. I enjoyed every line of this poem. Good Luck in the contest. Regards Dorothy - it deserves more than a 6 but I not even a 6 - I gladly give a virtual.
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2014
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Four superb stanzas in your Ode to the sea. Beautifully written. Your rhyme scheme is very good - flows well and needs time to study the style. You have done every well with the first 4 lines in each stanza in abab rhyme, 5th line in each stanza - no rhyme and thereafter every stanza in abcba. Very will constructed and the content of your Ode is very good. I enjoyed every line of this poem. Good Luck in the contest. Regards Dorothy - it deserves more than a 6 but I not even a 6 - I gladly give a virtual.
Comment Written 01-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2014
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Dorothy, thanks for the kind words and the virtual six, as well as taking the time to read this so carefully. I appreciate it.
Steve
Comment from sweetthanesue
good imagary and I like the effet of the rhyming scheme...
"With boundless beauty makes the poet swoon.And artist seeks to capture you in vain"....you havee done an excellent job..all the best in the comp....sue
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2014
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good imagary and I like the effet of the rhyming scheme...
"With boundless beauty makes the poet swoon.And artist seeks to capture you in vain"....you havee done an excellent job..all the best in the comp....sue
Comment Written 01-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2014
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Thanks, Sue.
Steve
Comment from Irish Rain
Just beautiful, I wish I had Six stars for you, it deserves more, everything I love, and feel about the ocean, you have written...blessings today!
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2014
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Just beautiful, I wish I had Six stars for you, it deserves more, everything I love, and feel about the ocean, you have written...blessings today!
Comment Written 01-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2014
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Jo, thanks for the kind words and the virtual six.
Steve
Comment from caromel
This is beautiful. Your choice to vary the meter gave this striking effect. The subject matter is one I am very close to myself. Every single word you have chosen flows into the next - fluid like the sea itself. And I love Keats.
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This is beautiful. Your choice to vary the meter gave this striking effect. The subject matter is one I am very close to myself. Every single word you have chosen flows into the next - fluid like the sea itself. And I love Keats.
Comment Written 01-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2014
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Thank you so much for the warm review and the six shiny stars - appreciated.
Steve
Comment from RGstar
Yes, I saw the resemblance.
A great ode, almost hymn-like. Good usage of the language to accumulate the ambiance needed for the period of speech.
Good consistency with flow and great execution.
Good write,
RGstar
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2014
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Yes, I saw the resemblance.
A great ode, almost hymn-like. Good usage of the language to accumulate the ambiance needed for the period of speech.
Good consistency with flow and great execution.
Good write,
RGstar
Comment Written 01-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2014
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Thank you - I do feel the ode deserves some formality and lofty language - let's see if the judges agree.
Steve
Comment from RPSaxena
Hello Kiwisteveh,
Thought provoking nice piece of poetry in the form of an 'Ode to the Sea' meeting all the self-suggested parameters!
It beautifully depicts the glory of the sea.
Wording is simple, impressive and perfectly matching the theme.
Smooth and pleasant flow with nice rhyming scheme and lively imagery.
These lines are particularly noteworthy:
"O mother of the earth, your fertile womb
Gave birth in ancient time to seeds of life.
We flourished on your shores and grew to bloom
In glory. Mankind's triumph, joy and strife
Are mirrored in your ever-changing mood."
Marvelous! Best of Luck!!
[It deserves to be honored with SIX STARS.]
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2014
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Hello Kiwisteveh,
Thought provoking nice piece of poetry in the form of an 'Ode to the Sea' meeting all the self-suggested parameters!
It beautifully depicts the glory of the sea.
Wording is simple, impressive and perfectly matching the theme.
Smooth and pleasant flow with nice rhyming scheme and lively imagery.
These lines are particularly noteworthy:
"O mother of the earth, your fertile womb
Gave birth in ancient time to seeds of life.
We flourished on your shores and grew to bloom
In glory. Mankind's triumph, joy and strife
Are mirrored in your ever-changing mood."
Marvelous! Best of Luck!!
[It deserves to be honored with SIX STARS.]
Comment Written 01-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2014
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Thank you for your lovely review and the award of a virtual six - I appreciate your taking the time to read and review my poem.
Steve
Comment from trevorletang
I like this poem a whole lot. Your structure is brilliant and I do like the way you have varied the meter it does add some dramatic effect. Excellent work on this well written poem
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2014
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I like this poem a whole lot. Your structure is brilliant and I do like the way you have varied the meter it does add some dramatic effect. Excellent work on this well written poem
Comment Written 01-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2014
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Thanks, Trevor.
Steve
Comment from robina1978
Beautiful photo of a wild sea to complement your poem. Good meter and rhyme. I liked the original idea to make an Ode to the sea. First a quiet sea, then an extremely wild one.
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2014
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Beautiful photo of a wild sea to complement your poem. Good meter and rhyme. I liked the original idea to make an Ode to the sea. First a quiet sea, then an extremely wild one.
Comment Written 01-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2014
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Thanks for the kind words.
Steve
