Ode to the Sea
Ode Contest Entry83 total reviews
Comment from krys123
In excellent poem/prose which is written so well as the rhythm, rhyming and tremendous imagery creates such a beautiful piece. Your strong and vibrant adjectives and adverbs brought so much strength and imagery to your poem.
Your rhyming was done so well that neither of your rhymes was forced, labored or strained. Your rhythm float so well being that it is iambic pentameter. Thank you so much for sharing such a great poem with all of us including myself and may you have a good one and God bless.
Alex
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2014
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In excellent poem/prose which is written so well as the rhythm, rhyming and tremendous imagery creates such a beautiful piece. Your strong and vibrant adjectives and adverbs brought so much strength and imagery to your poem.
Your rhyming was done so well that neither of your rhymes was forced, labored or strained. Your rhythm float so well being that it is iambic pentameter. Thank you so much for sharing such a great poem with all of us including myself and may you have a good one and God bless.
Alex
Comment Written 01-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2014
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Alex, thanks for the warm review - I appreciate your kind words.
Steve
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You are so sincerely welcome Steve
Comment from emrpoems
This is an awesome poem.
You have succeeded in creating fantastic imagery with your descriptive language
Good use of assonance , alliteration, , enjambment,metaphor
Thoroughly enjoyed it. Best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2014
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This is an awesome poem.
You have succeeded in creating fantastic imagery with your descriptive language
Good use of assonance , alliteration, , enjambment,metaphor
Thoroughly enjoyed it. Best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 01-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2014
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Thank you, EMR
So glad you enjoyed my tilt at a lofty ode.
Steve
Comment from xotic flotsam
A well orchestrated incipience deferential to creation sweeps smoothly into the calm before the storm. Land and sea, interlocked lovers and bitter enemies. The oceans ebb and flow, breathing deep and slow, but telling land where to go. Brilliant rhyme scheme. I have to offer you a virtual six, for I have none left. Well done steve. Best wishes for the contest.
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2014
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A well orchestrated incipience deferential to creation sweeps smoothly into the calm before the storm. Land and sea, interlocked lovers and bitter enemies. The oceans ebb and flow, breathing deep and slow, but telling land where to go. Brilliant rhyme scheme. I have to offer you a virtual six, for I have none left. Well done steve. Best wishes for the contest.
Comment Written 01-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2014
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Thank you for the warm review and the virtual six. It is my fate to post in the weekend when many people have run out.
Steve
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I applaud you posting when the time feels right, rather than whether sixers are still about. You're a talented artist, not a points hunter.
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That would be noble - not one of my known characteristics - I believe I posted in time for the contest deadline!
I felt all warm and fuzzy there for a moment when I read your reply.
Steve
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Cling to the warm and fuzzy. Nobility lives within your words.
x
Comment from l.raven
OMG Steve, this is a brilliant poem...and story told...you have expressed all that sea feels...I sooooo love this...I am so sorry I have no sixes...It's beautiful...and the picture is stunning...so very well written...Luff Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2014
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OMG Steve, this is a brilliant poem...and story told...you have expressed all that sea feels...I sooooo love this...I am so sorry I have no sixes...It's beautiful...and the picture is stunning...so very well written...Luff Linda xxoo
Comment Written 01-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2014
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Linda, thanks a lot for the warm review and the virtual six - your enthusiasm for the poem more than makes up for the lack of a sixth star.
Steve
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you are so very welcome...xxoo
Comment from nancyjam
Bravo Steve! This is a stunning
piece of writing. Your lines take on the
rhythm of the sea. Your descriptive images
are mesmerizing.
Your use of metaphor, alliteration, assonance, enjambment
etc. demonstrate your remarkable poetic talent.
a beautiful Ode and should definitely win.
I thoroughly enjoyed it. Best of luck in the contest. Nancy
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2014
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Bravo Steve! This is a stunning
piece of writing. Your lines take on the
rhythm of the sea. Your descriptive images
are mesmerizing.
Your use of metaphor, alliteration, assonance, enjambment
etc. demonstrate your remarkable poetic talent.
a beautiful Ode and should definitely win.
I thoroughly enjoyed it. Best of luck in the contest. Nancy
Comment Written 01-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2014
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Thanks, Nancy
I appreciate your kind words and confidence in the poem - let's hope the judges agree with you.
Steve
Comment from Just Pete
Great! This deserves six stars but I have none to give. I enjoy well constructed rhyme such as this is. The sea holds such fascination for poets and artists and you have captured its many moods. Keats, I'm sure, would have been proud to lay claim to this one.
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2014
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Great! This deserves six stars but I have none to give. I enjoy well constructed rhyme such as this is. The sea holds such fascination for poets and artists and you have captured its many moods. Keats, I'm sure, would have been proud to lay claim to this one.
Comment Written 01-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2014
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Thanks, pete - I appreciate your kind words and the virtual six.
Steve
Comment from Marillion
This is so excellent, Steve, and you capture the soul, the peace, and the anger of the ocean, as well as its absolute power.
The only critique I have is that I don't like elisions, but that being said, it's a personal opinion, and I understand the reason for their usage.
Bedazzle with their hues quick-silver bright. (I might suggest a comma after hues)
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2014
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This is so excellent, Steve, and you capture the soul, the peace, and the anger of the ocean, as well as its absolute power.
The only critique I have is that I don't like elisions, but that being said, it's a personal opinion, and I understand the reason for their usage.
Bedazzle with their hues quick-silver bright. (I might suggest a comma after hues)
Comment Written 01-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2014
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Thanks, David - I appreciate the kind words.
Elisions - are you referring to words like 'gainst and thund'rous?
I would be happy to let skilled readers interpret this themselves, but as sure as I spell out the whole thing, I'll get a bunch of reviewers telling me my meter is off.
In this piece too it may add to the slightly old-fashioned flavour.
Steve
Comment from Tonulak
To my chagrin, I can't grant this the six it so richly deserves. You have painted this portrait of thesea, not as a dispassionate observer, but an intimate of this splended entity. Gorgeous lines keep rolling like the tide, each original, yet elegant. A fantastic poem--Ted
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2014
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To my chagrin, I can't grant this the six it so richly deserves. You have painted this portrait of thesea, not as a dispassionate observer, but an intimate of this splended entity. Gorgeous lines keep rolling like the tide, each original, yet elegant. A fantastic poem--Ted
Comment Written 01-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2014
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Ted, thanks so much for the kind words and the virtual six - appreciated.
Steve
Comment from Debbie7
Steve,
I don't even know where to start. I'm no expert but I know Ode to a Grecian Urn, and but this is some serious writing. The scence you portraited with your descriptions is really outstanding. Your use of enjambment and meter is so good. I love the metaphor of the blacksmiths hammer and the way you just brought it all home, like it was all meant to be! Wow! Namaste, Debbie
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2014
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Steve,
I don't even know where to start. I'm no expert but I know Ode to a Grecian Urn, and but this is some serious writing. The scence you portraited with your descriptions is really outstanding. Your use of enjambment and meter is so good. I love the metaphor of the blacksmiths hammer and the way you just brought it all home, like it was all meant to be! Wow! Namaste, Debbie
Comment Written 01-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2014
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Debbie, thanks so much for the enthusiastic review and, of course, the six stars - I save up my best efforts for these $100 contests and the ode seems to deserve a classical approach.
Steve
Comment from Ben Colder
A very nice ode to the sea. She carries herself like a woman sometime gentle , sometimes angry with rebuke. You told this well poet. Very nicely done. Blessings to you in the contest.
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2014
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A very nice ode to the sea. She carries herself like a woman sometime gentle , sometimes angry with rebuke. You told this well poet. Very nicely done. Blessings to you in the contest.
Comment Written 01-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2014
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Thanks, Ben
Steve
