Comment from billscott

Excellent

This collection of lines are particularly intriguing.

Your anger dies and still your ebb and flow,
Unbroken for a thousand thousand moons,
A vast and gentle breathing, deep and slow,
Connects us to those soulful inner tunes
That play whenever waves may lap on stone

I can envision this perfectly.

It's such a cool vision.

Great work!

 Comment Written 02-Feb-2014

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reply by the author on 04-Feb-2014

Thanks, Bill

Not sure where that came from - must have been reading some real poetry or something!

Steve

Comment from Bicpen

Excellent

MOST MAGNIFICENT:

This is mastered genius as the stanza has a good solid basis with a current to carry and wash the words alight with the gleam of sanguide sacrifice and develops the poem into a great masterpiece of paternal love which is the sea with the sailor.

This is a worthy winner and should take no less as it is endearing to the senses enjoyable to read a woven mystery which beguiles and lulls to a safe harmony of enchantment and earthly praise.

 Comment Written 02-Feb-2014

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reply by the author on 04-Feb-2014

Thank you so much for the great review.

Steve

reply by Bicpen on 04-Feb-2014

Anytime ... !

Comment from amahra

Excellent

Oh, great choice. I love Keats and his Ode on a Grecian Urn is my favorite. Loved the poem for its awesome rhyming and rhythm. Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 02-Feb-2014

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reply by the author on 04-Feb-2014

Thanks for the kind words.

Steve

Comment from GregoryCody

Exceptional

WHOA. Wow wow. This is impressive. I am truly amazed. Beautiful words. Fantastic form. I love your layout as well. THIS is quite an ode.
But now you grow to anger, foam and rage
And hurl your green battalions 'gainst the shore
In elemental battle that you wage
Through time, Hark, how the breakers' thund'rous roar
Resounds to Heaven's door and wakes the storm

That is so powerful. Nice slant rhyme, and amazing fluidity. The words roll with each other. Very nicely done. Good luck! I'm stingy with my sixes. You get my first this week! :)

 Comment Written 02-Feb-2014

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reply by the author on 04-Feb-2014

Thanks, Greg.

I appreciate the warm review and the six stars - especially since they are obviously hard to come by!

Have a good week.

Steve

Comment from Petriesan

Excellent

good luck in the contest

the poem reads well, even though I generally cannot stand Keats. . .

very smooth to read and no real stops. I like how tyou modified things.

Then the topic itself is pure majesty.

Nice work

 Comment Written 02-Feb-2014

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reply by the author on 04-Feb-2014

Thank you.

Yep, Keats doesn't do it for everybody.

Steve

Comment from fdgsr

Exceptional

Outstanding! This brought the crawling skin under my scalp that signals a truly good write. The moist eyes and the overflowing eye fluids did the rest. You reached deep into my psyche and played a tune on my heart strings. Thanks.

 Comment Written 02-Feb-2014

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reply by the author on 04-Feb-2014

Thanks for the warm review and the six stars.

The finest compliment is that this evoked a physical response, so thank you most of all for that.

Steve

Comment from ExperiencingLiphe

Excellent

The sea can be a strong powerful thing at times and then the most soothing and relaxing thing to just sit and listen to at times. You did a great job with this

 Comment Written 02-Feb-2014

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reply by the author on 04-Feb-2014

Thanks for the kind words.

Steve

Comment from GWHARGIS

Excellent

What a beautiful ode. I like the rhythm and the variances through out. You have captured the changes in the ocean and presented them in a very colorful and exciting way. nice imagery. The rhythm and meter were wonderful. nicely done.

 Comment Written 02-Feb-2014

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reply by the author on 04-Feb-2014

Thanks for the great review.

Steve

Comment from 24chas

Excellent

This was very well written, kiwisteveh. I felt like I was reading one of those poems from English class. It was well formed and perfectly executed. Nice.

 Comment Written 02-Feb-2014

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reply by the author on 04-Feb-2014

Ha! We know everybody hated poetry in English class.... :o)

Thanks for the kind words.

Steve

Comment from Hawaiian Mermaid

Excellent

Aloha kiwisteveh,
What a great description of the sea with it's many moods. Thank you for sharing this beautiful poem.
Aloha,
Ginger
Hawaiian Mermaid

 Comment Written 02-Feb-2014

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reply by the author on 04-Feb-2014

Thanks, Ginger

With a monicker like yours, you should certainly appreciate the sentiment of the poem.

Steve