Nothing is a Substitute
rhyming quatrains in 8/6/8/6163 total reviews
Comment from Rondeno
You just keep doing it. One simple photo of Sawyer in the sandbox - and look what emerges! Arguably, the test of a poet is what (s)he produces extempore. By that test, you're the best.
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2014
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You just keep doing it. One simple photo of Sawyer in the sandbox - and look what emerges! Arguably, the test of a poet is what (s)he produces extempore. By that test, you're the best.
Comment Written 27-Jan-2014
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Well, Michael, you've just made me day. Thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Titanx9
I know this poem was written for one of the loves of your life, but it would make an awesome read for a Valentine's Day card. It's a lovely read, and the enjambment gives it the perfect flow. I like seeing Sawyer experiencing and reacting to the wonders of nature.
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I know this poem was written for one of the loves of your life, but it would make an awesome read for a Valentine's Day card. It's a lovely read, and the enjambment gives it the perfect flow. I like seeing Sawyer experiencing and reacting to the wonders of nature.
Comment Written 27-Jan-2014
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Titan, thanks so much. I always intend my "Sawyer" poems to have wider applications :-) Brooke
Comment from Patrick G Cox
Hi Brooke,
Now there's a nice sentiment to take with you on life's journey. There is always an antidote or an alternative to the routes we cannot take and to life's little pitfalls.
Patrick
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2014
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Hi Brooke,
Now there's a nice sentiment to take with you on life's journey. There is always an antidote or an alternative to the routes we cannot take and to life's little pitfalls.
Patrick
Comment Written 27-Jan-2014
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Patrick, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Just2Write
This is a gentle poem, that would have done well in the Valentine's Day contest. It reminds us of the simple joys that we often fail to appreciate.
Another charmer, Brooke.
rose.
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This is a gentle poem, that would have done well in the Valentine's Day contest. It reminds us of the simple joys that we often fail to appreciate.
Another charmer, Brooke.
rose.
Comment Written 27-Jan-2014
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Rose, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from padumachitta
Hello. Another poem to read a loud and read again with rythm. These are so fun to read. I like sand boxes..I like sand period. Even the pciture made me happier.
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Hello. Another poem to read a loud and read again with rythm. These are so fun to read. I like sand boxes..I like sand period. Even the pciture made me happier.
Comment Written 27-Jan-2014
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Thank you so much, padumachitta, for your thoughtful review :-) Brooke
Comment from elchupakabra
This piece is perfect, Brooke :) The imagery was really powerful, and the piece definitely has a high emotional intangible thanks to the beautiful linework. Definitely exceptional to say the least, thank you for sharing.
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This piece is perfect, Brooke :) The imagery was really powerful, and the piece definitely has a high emotional intangible thanks to the beautiful linework. Definitely exceptional to say the least, thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 27-Jan-2014
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Thank you, elchupakabra, for your generous and gracious response to this poem :-) Brooke
Comment from Domino 2
Very sweet loving words in top meter and rhyme, Brooke.
Top imagery throughout.
Great fun, yet you retain that special love that's so important.
Top internal rhyme and alliteration in;
'When breezes blow my kite from sight'.
Excellent!
Best wishes, Ted
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2014
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Very sweet loving words in top meter and rhyme, Brooke.
Top imagery throughout.
Great fun, yet you retain that special love that's so important.
Top internal rhyme and alliteration in;
'When breezes blow my kite from sight'.
Excellent!
Best wishes, Ted
Comment Written 27-Jan-2014
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Ted, thank you, my friend :-) Brooke
Comment from Dustybones
Very touching to see the love of nature, butterflies, hummingbirds,beach wind, and how all this related back to a person's love.
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Very touching to see the love of nature, butterflies, hummingbirds,beach wind, and how all this related back to a person's love.
Comment Written 27-Jan-2014
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Dusty, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from TAB_that's me
I'm waiting for May, hummingbirds and butterflies too. I really enjoyed reading this Brooke. Great rhymes and proximate rhymes.
~Teresa`
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I'm waiting for May, hummingbirds and butterflies too. I really enjoyed reading this Brooke. Great rhymes and proximate rhymes.
~Teresa`
Comment Written 27-Jan-2014
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Teresa, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
There seems to be an antidote
for all that makes me blue,
but nothing is a substitute
when I'm apart from you.
Ah, how lovely is this!! This last verse says it all.
loved it.
Margaret
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2014
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There seems to be an antidote
for all that makes me blue,
but nothing is a substitute
when I'm apart from you.
Ah, how lovely is this!! This last verse says it all.
loved it.
Margaret
Comment Written 27-Jan-2014
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Margaret, thanks so much :-) Brooke
