Nothing is a Substitute
rhyming quatrains in 8/6/8/6163 total reviews
Comment from Righteous Riter
Good use of the abcb rhyme scheme. Good end rhyming. Good alliteration with when/winters...breezes/blow...bubbles/burst/blow...an/antidote...makes/me. Nice rhythm and flow. I see nothing that I would add or take out of this piece. Good work.
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Good use of the abcb rhyme scheme. Good end rhyming. Good alliteration with when/winters...breezes/blow...bubbles/burst/blow...an/antidote...makes/me. Nice rhythm and flow. I see nothing that I would add or take out of this piece. Good work.
Comment Written 27-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2014
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Righteous Riter, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Helvi2
Hi Brooke,
I LOVE the poems you're writing in "Sawyer" mode! There is SO much joy and love within them. I think YOU're becoming a child again. THese are magical,light and a joy to read. You wrote this im my favorite meter of 8/6/8/6. I also like the rhyme scheme of abcb. Very Cute image of Sawyer too!
Nicely Done My Friend!
:o) Helvi
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2014
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Hi Brooke,
I LOVE the poems you're writing in "Sawyer" mode! There is SO much joy and love within them. I think YOU're becoming a child again. THese are magical,light and a joy to read. You wrote this im my favorite meter of 8/6/8/6. I also like the rhyme scheme of abcb. Very Cute image of Sawyer too!
Nicely Done My Friend!
:o) Helvi
Comment Written 27-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2014
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Thank you so very much, Helvi :-) Brooke
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On these cold days it's so nice to find a smile somewhere. YOU have a way of making that happen Brooke. "Thank you", for adding something special to my day! :o) Helvi
Comment from gazzagodbod
i had to test this one out went straight out to the sand pit as we call themand yes your right even though its dark and raining lol xxgazzagodbodxx
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i had to test this one out went straight out to the sand pit as we call themand yes your right even though its dark and raining lol xxgazzagodbodxx
Comment Written 27-Jan-2014
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Gazza, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from allborn66
This is a very sweet poem. The form and rhyme enhance the piece. The word choice is quiet vivid. You communicate the theme well.
Barbara
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This is a very sweet poem. The form and rhyme enhance the piece. The word choice is quiet vivid. You communicate the theme well.
Barbara
Comment Written 27-Jan-2014
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Barbara, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from barbara.wilkey
This poem should be a philosophy for life. It explains every eloquently how we should look at life. I really enjoyed reading your poem.
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This poem should be a philosophy for life. It explains every eloquently how we should look at life. I really enjoyed reading your poem.
Comment Written 27-Jan-2014
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Barbara, thanks so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Patti R.
Not only is the cadence delightfully fun, but the photo and the words are also uplifting and light. What a cute boy! And it is obvious that there is a happy toddler in your life! I can tell simply by looking at your vocabulary or word choices. It wasn't that long ago that my three were that age so this poem was a quick skip down memory lane for me. Thanks for that.
Patti
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Not only is the cadence delightfully fun, but the photo and the words are also uplifting and light. What a cute boy! And it is obvious that there is a happy toddler in your life! I can tell simply by looking at your vocabulary or word choices. It wasn't that long ago that my three were that age so this poem was a quick skip down memory lane for me. Thanks for that.
Patti
Comment Written 27-Jan-2014
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Patti, thank you so very much :-) I'm so glad you have your own kids so that you can relate to this. I appreciate your generous sixth star :-) Brooke
Comment from AprilShower
This poem sounds like a Grandmother who misses her grandchild. Children grow up so fast. It is good that you get to visit him, Brooke.
There is a nice rhyme and flow in this poem.
April
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This poem sounds like a Grandmother who misses her grandchild. Children grow up so fast. It is good that you get to visit him, Brooke.
There is a nice rhyme and flow in this poem.
April
Comment Written 27-Jan-2014
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April, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from IndianaIrish
Just back from a cruise and trying to get caught up with posts. Your poem is a delight of optimism and hope. There's always good in everything, and sometimes we don't even have to look hard to find them.
Smiles,
Karyn : )
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Just back from a cruise and trying to get caught up with posts. Your poem is a delight of optimism and hope. There's always good in everything, and sometimes we don't even have to look hard to find them.
Smiles,
Karyn : )
Comment Written 27-Jan-2014
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Karyn, a cruise - boy, am I green with envy :-) Thanks so much! Brooke
Comment from Petriesan
this one I really liked. Maybe it is because that since I am a grampa now, it is hard not to fall for kiddos ( the nickname I use for my grandaughter - her mother's was "kid," so, no originality in me.
sorry to ramble and get personal, the fault is in your poem
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2014
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this one I really liked. Maybe it is because that since I am a grampa now, it is hard not to fall for kiddos ( the nickname I use for my grandaughter - her mother's was "kid," so, no originality in me.
sorry to ramble and get personal, the fault is in your poem
Comment Written 27-Jan-2014
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Petriesan, thanks so much :-) Isn't being a grandfather the greatest thing? I very much appreciate your generous sixth star :-) Brooke
Comment from prodigal
Brooke this is just beautiful in it's message. of course the rhyme meter and yadda yadda yadda are perfect as everyone expects when they read one of your poems but I love the story here. No hummingbirds, fine where are the butterflies... No beach we'll find a sandbox. I understand quite well the idea of having no substitute. Yesterday was the first day I saw my son in a week and I felt the same way. Love it - sam
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2014
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Brooke this is just beautiful in it's message. of course the rhyme meter and yadda yadda yadda are perfect as everyone expects when they read one of your poems but I love the story here. No hummingbirds, fine where are the butterflies... No beach we'll find a sandbox. I understand quite well the idea of having no substitute. Yesterday was the first day I saw my son in a week and I felt the same way. Love it - sam
Comment Written 27-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2014
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sam, thank you so much for your insightful reading of this poem :-) Brooke
