Comment from McMurry903

Excellent

This is such a sweet and heartfelt poem. Beautiful flow and rhyme throughout. It's always hard to be apart from the ones you most want to see everyday. Great photo of Sawyer at play. Well done!
Brian

 Comment Written 28-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 28-Jan-2014

Brian, thank you so much :-) Brooke

Comment from Lighthouse Keeper

Excellent

Again, a work with a light heart and a smile. I stumble a bit on the second half of the second stanza but it doesn't detract from the flow to an real degree. Well done as always.

 Comment Written 28-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 28-Jan-2014

Thanks so much, Lighthouse Keeper :-) Brooke

Comment from TonyD

Excellent

The heart of the eternal optimist comes through in this poem with words like:
"When ocean views are miles away,
a sandbox has to do."
But, optimism is subdued when the writer is away the one he/she loves.
TonyD

 Comment Written 28-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 28-Jan-2014

Tony, thank you so much :-) Brooke

Comment from ExperiencingLiphe

Excellent

I hope you are able to do these things. Sadly, I'm waiting for spring to do some of these things, at least play in the sand box. Great job

 Comment Written 28-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 28-Jan-2014

ExperiencingLiphe, thank you so much :-) Brooke

Comment from 3boysrule

Excellent

I really enjoyed this poem. I really like the rhyming scheme, it worked great for this poem. I tend to pick that type of scheme. Love the picture too!
Dee

 Comment Written 28-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 28-Jan-2014

Dee, thanks so much :-) Brooke

Comment from rod007

Excellent

Love can never be substituted. It is everlasting and as you say,
"There seems to be an antidote
for all that makes me blue,
but nothing is a substitute
when I'm apart from you."
This last stanza captures the spirit of your poem. Well done.

 Comment Written 28-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 28-Jan-2014

Thank you, rod, for your thoughtful review :-) Brooke

Comment from Ridley Williams

Exceptional

Hi Brooke,
I really enjoyed the simple thought and the wonderful delivery you presented in this piece. When dealing with what life gives, one must look for that bright spots, for they do exist. I loved the comparisons you made in the last two lines of each quatrain, great creativity. Well done with this theme, an enjoyable read. Best wishes, Bill

 Comment Written 28-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 28-Jan-2014

Bill, thank you so much for your encouragement and generosity :-) Brooke

Comment from Angel Debbie

Exceptional

With all the love you put into these writes of Sawyer I hope you put them into a book for Him when he is old enough to read them and appreciate them. This would be a memory of a life time of Grandma to him.!

 Comment Written 28-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 28-Jan-2014

Thank you, Angel Debbie, for your generous and gracious response to this poem :-) Brooke

Comment from Lulube

Exceptional

A Hallmark card for sure Brooke. Sure hope you sell to them you could save for Sawyers college fund.
My favorite lines are
if no hummingbirds come round I'll look for butterflies

I so would do that.
great imagery that I love seeing

lulube

 Comment Written 28-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 28-Jan-2014

Lulube, thank you so very much for your thoughtful and generous review :-) Brooke

reply by Lulube on 29-Jan-2014

welcome Brooke

lulube

Comment from Debra White

Excellent

Hi Brooke :) This is a lovely poem, one that I could easily visualise inside of an 'I miss you' greetings card. I particularly enjoyed the sing-song rhythm. Nice alliteration in stanza 3.
What is it with kids and sand?! Great pic of Sawyer letting the sand trickle through his fingers :)
Kindest regards as always, Debra

 Comment Written 28-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 28-Jan-2014

Debra, I don't know, but sand just has that appeal - some of my fondest memories of my own early childhood are of my sandbox thanks so much :-) Brooke