Nothing is a Substitute
rhyming quatrains in 8/6/8/6163 total reviews
Comment from Gungalo
There seems to be an antidote
for all that makes me blue,
but nothing is a substitute
when I'm apart from you.
Great quatrains Brooke with an exceptional finale. This is truly wonderful for their is not substitute for you. Sigh.
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2014
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There seems to be an antidote
for all that makes me blue,
but nothing is a substitute
when I'm apart from you.
Great quatrains Brooke with an exceptional finale. This is truly wonderful for their is not substitute for you. Sigh.
Comment Written 26-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2014
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Gungalo, thank you so much :-) Brooke
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Smiling at you Brooke.
Comment from nancy_e_davis
Oh, what a sweet poem. There is no substitute for the one you love. I bet you do miss that little tyke Brooke. I Think it is great that Miranda is so good about pictures and skype visits. You are a lucky Grandmother! LOL Nancy
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2014
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Oh, what a sweet poem. There is no substitute for the one you love. I bet you do miss that little tyke Brooke. I Think it is great that Miranda is so good about pictures and skype visits. You are a lucky Grandmother! LOL Nancy
Comment Written 26-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2014
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Nancy, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from GWHARGIS
How sweet. I am away from my grandchildren as well. There is no substitute for being able to hold them and touch them. I liked the way the narrator was okay with everything but the last part. Nice imagery and the rhythm was great. Nicely done.
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2014
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How sweet. I am away from my grandchildren as well. There is no substitute for being able to hold them and touch them. I liked the way the narrator was okay with everything but the last part. Nice imagery and the rhythm was great. Nicely done.
Comment Written 26-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2014
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Gretchen, thank you so very much :-) I so appreciate your comments and generous rating. Brooke
Comment from seaglass
his is a delightful poem. The pure playful, rhyming make is a pleasure to read. The first few verses reminded me of looking through the eyes of a child but the last lines apply to every one.
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2014
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his is a delightful poem. The pure playful, rhyming make is a pleasure to read. The first few verses reminded me of looking through the eyes of a child but the last lines apply to every one.
Comment Written 26-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2014
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seaglass, thank you so much :-) Brooke
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Most welcome
Comment from Preston McWhorter
Hi, Brooke,
This is a truly excellent verse with high quality rhyme, meter. figurative language and imagery (there seems to be an antidote for all that makes me blue) It follows a good rhyme scheme with consistency.
Preston
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2014
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Hi, Brooke,
This is a truly excellent verse with high quality rhyme, meter. figurative language and imagery (there seems to be an antidote for all that makes me blue) It follows a good rhyme scheme with consistency.
Preston
Comment Written 26-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2014
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Preston, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Aussie
Super sand storm. I enjoyed your rhyming quatrains. Nope, nothing can fill the place of a missing loved one. I think Sawyer will end up with an Almanac the way you are pushing these poems out! LOL.
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2014
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Super sand storm. I enjoyed your rhyming quatrains. Nope, nothing can fill the place of a missing loved one. I think Sawyer will end up with an Almanac the way you are pushing these poems out! LOL.
Comment Written 26-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2014
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Kay, thank you so much for your generous and gracious response to this poem :-) On Friday he made Miranda call me three times because he kept asking for Grandma on the phone. :-) Brooke
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Nice to be needed, eh?
Comment from Cajungirl
Bravo Brooke, you've nailed another one. I am so glad it is Sunday, because I have six stars to give. :} Thanks for sharing. Have a great week.
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2014
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Bravo Brooke, you've nailed another one. I am so glad it is Sunday, because I have six stars to give. :} Thanks for sharing. Have a great week.
Comment Written 26-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2014
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Cajungirl, thank you so much for your gracious and generous response to this poem :-) Brooke
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You are welcome
Comment from Janie King
You must have thousands of poems by now and they're all lovely. How can one person think of so many different things, must be God. This is a delightful poem and of course Sawyer is a peach as always. God loves you and I do too.
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2014
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You must have thousands of poems by now and they're all lovely. How can one person think of so many different things, must be God. This is a delightful poem and of course Sawyer is a peach as always. God loves you and I do too.
Comment Written 26-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2014
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Thank you so very much, Janie. Brooke
Comment from LorraineK
Again, another wonderful poem of yours. The poem gave positive replacements for things we wanted. Children are great about making so much out of so little, like a cardboard box. When life gives you a lemon, make lemonade. LorraineK
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2014
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Again, another wonderful poem of yours. The poem gave positive replacements for things we wanted. Children are great about making so much out of so little, like a cardboard box. When life gives you a lemon, make lemonade. LorraineK
Comment Written 26-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2014
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Lorraine, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from RodG
This poem is a very sweet love poem while also describing how a child (or adult) will make-do in certain situations.
Excellent quatrains with flawless ABAB rhymes.
Nice B-alliteration with bubbles, burst, blow.
Very nice, Brooke.
Rod
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2014
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This poem is a very sweet love poem while also describing how a child (or adult) will make-do in certain situations.
Excellent quatrains with flawless ABAB rhymes.
Nice B-alliteration with bubbles, burst, blow.
Very nice, Brooke.
Rod
Comment Written 26-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2014
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Rod, thank you so much :-) Brooke
