Nothing is a Substitute
rhyming quatrains in 8/6/8/6163 total reviews
Comment from krys123
Such a beautifully written poem Brooke, with such great rhythm and tempo and meter that it flows so well that it makes it very easy for me to read and understand your poem correctly and easily. Your rhyming also was done very well and neither of your rhymes were forced, labored or strained.
Such a poem like this surely could be written for a Valentine's Day card or any card for that matter.
Thank you so much for sharing this with others including myself. May you have a good one and God bless.
Alex
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2014
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Such a beautifully written poem Brooke, with such great rhythm and tempo and meter that it flows so well that it makes it very easy for me to read and understand your poem correctly and easily. Your rhyming also was done very well and neither of your rhymes were forced, labored or strained.
Such a poem like this surely could be written for a Valentine's Day card or any card for that matter.
Thank you so much for sharing this with others including myself. May you have a good one and God bless.
Alex
Comment Written 26-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2014
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Alex, thank you so very much :-) Brooke
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You are so sincerely welcome Brooke
Comment from debskatz
Hi Brooke,
Awwwwwwww.... See, you need to move close to your daughter so you can be around Sawyer more.
Again, perfect iambic meter. Your rhyme scheme changed from abab to abcb which threw me off a little, but still a beautiful poem.
It's great you now have a lovely grandson to focus your attention on. As always, thanks for sharing!
smiles,
deb
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2014
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Hi Brooke,
Awwwwwwww.... See, you need to move close to your daughter so you can be around Sawyer more.
Again, perfect iambic meter. Your rhyme scheme changed from abab to abcb which threw me off a little, but still a beautiful poem.
It's great you now have a lovely grandson to focus your attention on. As always, thanks for sharing!
smiles,
deb
Comment Written 26-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2014
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Thanks so much, Deb - the second I win the lottery I will commence packing :-) Brooke
Comment from boxergirl
This is a nice quatrain with ABAB rhyme scheme. I like the first line "When ocean views are miles away, a sandbox has to do" - I used to get the plastic pool and lawn chair and pretend. 8-)
Lots of substitutes but none can suffice when you are apart from someone you love.
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2014
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This is a nice quatrain with ABAB rhyme scheme. I like the first line "When ocean views are miles away, a sandbox has to do" - I used to get the plastic pool and lawn chair and pretend. 8-)
Lots of substitutes but none can suffice when you are apart from someone you love.
Comment Written 26-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2014
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boxergirl, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from livelylinda
So continues the always delightful words of Brooke, complete with an adorable picture of Sawyer. Both were enjoyed and put a simile on my face this evening. Linda
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2014
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So continues the always delightful words of Brooke, complete with an adorable picture of Sawyer. Both were enjoyed and put a simile on my face this evening. Linda
Comment Written 26-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2014
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Linda, thank you so very much :-) Brooke
Comment from RYME4U
This is great. I like the way all the "substitute" things are listed. The rhyme and rhythm are butter smooth and themessage is great! Love it!
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2014
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This is great. I like the way all the "substitute" things are listed. The rhyme and rhythm are butter smooth and themessage is great! Love it!
Comment Written 26-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2014
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Thank you so very much, RYME4U :-) Brooke
Comment from l.raven
OH Brooke, so sad...I know how it feels...I miss mine up north...The sand box reminds me of when my granddaughter was little...maybe three or four...it was her birthday...her aunt bought some blue sand to put in it...what a mess that was...but funny...I love your poem...and the picture is precious...Luff Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2014
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OH Brooke, so sad...I know how it feels...I miss mine up north...The sand box reminds me of when my granddaughter was little...maybe three or four...it was her birthday...her aunt bought some blue sand to put in it...what a mess that was...but funny...I love your poem...and the picture is precious...Luff Linda xxoo
Comment Written 26-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2014
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Thank you so much, Linda. On Friday he asked for Grandma/phone so many times that Miranda indulged the two of us in three phone calls. :-) Brooke
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That is so sweet...I am going to check into mine when I get back home...I'm jealous!!! LOL...
Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep
I love the action shot with the sand falling, Brooke. Once again these are delightful quatrains, perfect to recite to a child. Sawyer will never grow up camera shy! Giddy
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2014
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I love the action shot with the sand falling, Brooke. Once again these are delightful quatrains, perfect to recite to a child. Sawyer will never grow up camera shy! Giddy
Comment Written 26-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2014
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Giddy, I love the shot too :-) Thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from nomi338
This is another fine example of your wonderful writing prowess. I am in constant awe of your artistry. I really love the way you construct a poem and display it in such fine fashion. You keep teaching and I hope that I can learn enough to keep up.
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2014
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This is another fine example of your wonderful writing prowess. I am in constant awe of your artistry. I really love the way you construct a poem and display it in such fine fashion. You keep teaching and I hope that I can learn enough to keep up.
Comment Written 26-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2014
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nomi,thank you so very much :-) Brooke
Comment from Pili Pubul
How very true, nothing like the joy of playing with sand. Love all the
wonderful images you describe in this excellent and fun poem.
I love very much the expression of Sawyer, totally fascinated. Great Miranda! . Pili
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2014
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How very true, nothing like the joy of playing with sand. Love all the
wonderful images you describe in this excellent and fun poem.
I love very much the expression of Sawyer, totally fascinated. Great Miranda! . Pili
Comment Written 26-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2014
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Pili, thank you so much :-) Brooke
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You are very welcome. Pili
Comment from Irish Rain
Loved this sweet poem, a longing for spring and summer, but really, just happy to be with the one you love, beautiful! Thank you for sharing, blessings tonight!
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2014
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Loved this sweet poem, a longing for spring and summer, but really, just happy to be with the one you love, beautiful! Thank you for sharing, blessings tonight!
Comment Written 26-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2014
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justjo, thank you so much :-) Brooke
