Nothing is a Substitute
rhyming quatrains in 8/6/8/6163 total reviews
Comment from Dom G Robles
I liked this poem. With grace and elegance. Its rhyme and rhythm are excellent, very visible. The tone, imagery...are exemplary, too. Before I saw the name of actual writer, I had the feeling it was no other than Adewpearl, and I was not mistaken. Congratulations for a well written poem. Dom
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2014
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I liked this poem. With grace and elegance. Its rhyme and rhythm are excellent, very visible. The tone, imagery...are exemplary, too. Before I saw the name of actual writer, I had the feeling it was no other than Adewpearl, and I was not mistaken. Congratulations for a well written poem. Dom
Comment Written 26-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2014
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Thank you so very much, my gracious and generous friend :-) Brooke
Comment from J. P. Egry
Another very sweet poem which could easily be a lyric to a love song. It is amazing how the smallest things you observe with Sawyer inspire you to write wonderful lines. Each quatrain paints a beautiful picture for the reader to envision, and the whole makes the day brighter for all who absorb your words. The last two lines are a perfect ending.
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2014
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Another very sweet poem which could easily be a lyric to a love song. It is amazing how the smallest things you observe with Sawyer inspire you to write wonderful lines. Each quatrain paints a beautiful picture for the reader to envision, and the whole makes the day brighter for all who absorb your words. The last two lines are a perfect ending.
Comment Written 26-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2014
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J.P, thank you so much :-) Brooke
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You're welcome.
Comment from Julia.
Another fantastic poem, Brooke. I really enjoy the poems with the 4/3/4/3 metrical feet--which when coupled with iambic meter--is the classical ballad form (I'm sure you probably already knew that!) Anyway, I particularly liked "When ocean views are miles away, / a sandbox has to do" and "When bubbles burst, I blow some more / to decorate the skies". Bubbles are one good way to describe cumulous clouds. Nice job!
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Another fantastic poem, Brooke. I really enjoy the poems with the 4/3/4/3 metrical feet--which when coupled with iambic meter--is the classical ballad form (I'm sure you probably already knew that!) Anyway, I particularly liked "When ocean views are miles away, / a sandbox has to do" and "When bubbles burst, I blow some more / to decorate the skies". Bubbles are one good way to describe cumulous clouds. Nice job!
Comment Written 26-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2014
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Julia, I'm pleased you like my use of ballad meter. Thanks for your review :-) Brooke
Comment from SteveY
Boy you've got that right. Nothing is a substitute when I'm away from you. Another well crafted and written little rhyming poem with poignant expression.
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2014
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Boy you've got that right. Nothing is a substitute when I'm away from you. Another well crafted and written little rhyming poem with poignant expression.
Comment Written 26-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2014
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Thank you, Steve, for your thoughtful response to this poem :-) Brooke
Comment from Darkhorse555
from the adorable picture these word beautifully drawn picture When bubbles burst, I blow some more to decorate the skies,excellent piece
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2014
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from the adorable picture these word beautifully drawn picture When bubbles burst, I blow some more to decorate the skies,excellent piece
Comment Written 26-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2014
Darkhorse, thanks so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Shirley E Kennedy
A perfect poetic statement of truth.
There can be no substitute for all that is missing when we are separated from those we love.
Perfect rhyming quatrains in 8/6, 8/6 meter.
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A perfect poetic statement of truth.
There can be no substitute for all that is missing when we are separated from those we love.
Perfect rhyming quatrains in 8/6, 8/6 meter.
Comment Written 26-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2014
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seken, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from donnadiann
This just struck a chord, and Sawyer is so sweet. I can see how this could be about him, you must miss him when away. I miss my little grands too. My granddaughter spent the night last night, was glad to see her. Your poem has very effective imagery and descriptions of weather. Good alliterations. Lovely poem:)
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2014
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This just struck a chord, and Sawyer is so sweet. I can see how this could be about him, you must miss him when away. I miss my little grands too. My granddaughter spent the night last night, was glad to see her. Your poem has very effective imagery and descriptions of weather. Good alliterations. Lovely poem:)
Comment Written 26-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2014
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donnadiann, thank you so much for your gracious and generous review. I am so jealous of you! :-) Brooke
Comment from lancellot
Is there no form of poetry you haven't mastered? I love this and the theme is so true. There are substitutes for many things, but when there's love involved, nothing else will do.
Great work.
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2014
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Is there no form of poetry you haven't mastered? I love this and the theme is so true. There are substitutes for many things, but when there's love involved, nothing else will do.
Great work.
Comment Written 26-Jan-2014
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lancellot, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from FrannyG
A great title Brooke, and some lovely images in the first three verses; again, very creative and original, fresh and appealing. Lovely writing as always.
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2014
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A great title Brooke, and some lovely images in the first three verses; again, very creative and original, fresh and appealing. Lovely writing as always.
Comment Written 26-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2014
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Franny, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Rdfrdmom2
Oh, Brooke:
You caught me a bit offguard at the end of this
poem, although I should have seen it coming - and
you brought tears to my eyes as Alexis and I did
not spend any time together because I had a migraine
and never left the house.
thanks for sharing
love,
jan
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2014
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Oh, Brooke:
You caught me a bit offguard at the end of this
poem, although I should have seen it coming - and
you brought tears to my eyes as Alexis and I did
not spend any time together because I had a migraine
and never left the house.
thanks for sharing
love,
jan
Comment Written 26-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2014
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Thank you so very much, Jan. I always love it when a poem and reader connect on a personal level :-) Brooke
