Ezekiel Had Half a Smile
quatrains in 8/6/8/6 pure whimsy163 total reviews
Comment from Caressa_08
The four syllabes name, Ezekiel, is an eye-chatcher, along with Sawyer's half smile, though seems so very content as to suggest, if you only knew, besides his eyes are smiling, though with a sleepy top, his day seems like it was a satisfying one...All this to to compliment your happy poem...He looks so blond in this picture, guess he lives in a warmer climate & his hair is sun bleached..
Caressa
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The four syllabes name, Ezekiel, is an eye-chatcher, along with Sawyer's half smile, though seems so very content as to suggest, if you only knew, besides his eyes are smiling, though with a sleepy top, his day seems like it was a satisfying one...All this to to compliment your happy poem...He looks so blond in this picture, guess he lives in a warmer climate & his hair is sun bleached..
Caressa
Comment Written 30-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2014
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Thank you, Caressa, and you're right - he has my family's dirty blond hair, which bleaches in the sun, and he lives in southern California, where he plays outside for hours each day. :-) Brooke
Comment from N.K. Wagner
If a little bit is good, more must be spectacular. As far as smiles go, that thinking holds true. A sweet, playful set of quatrains celebrating the poet's favorite expression. :) Nancy
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If a little bit is good, more must be spectacular. As far as smiles go, that thinking holds true. A sweet, playful set of quatrains celebrating the poet's favorite expression. :) Nancy
Comment Written 30-Jan-2014
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Thank you so much, Nancy :-) Brooke
Comment from MelReyn
Wow, I disappear for a month (or was it three?) and Sawyer grows into a little boy! I love his smile! As always, your poems are sweet and make me feel so good and warm and fuzzy. I don't know how, but you make writing poems look easy. :D
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Wow, I disappear for a month (or was it three?) and Sawyer grows into a little boy! I love his smile! As always, your poems are sweet and make me feel so good and warm and fuzzy. I don't know how, but you make writing poems look easy. :D
Comment Written 30-Jan-2014
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Thank you so much, Mel. I swear he looks older and acts older with every passing day. He is now talking up a storm and every day learns new words and phrases. One of his favorites right now is to declare "Oh my goodness" when he is spinning/running around and falls to the ground. LOL Brooke
Comment from Debbie7
Brooke,
This was a pleasure to read first thing this morning. Made me make a full smile too! Perfect 8/6 quatrains. I thought the first line if the second stanza might not need "all" if you simply said "just think if he had used his smile", because the next line, which I just loved says " in its entirety". Just a thought. Geez he's awfully cute. :-) Debbie
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Brooke,
This was a pleasure to read first thing this morning. Made me make a full smile too! Perfect 8/6 quatrains. I thought the first line if the second stanza might not need "all" if you simply said "just think if he had used his smile", because the next line, which I just loved says " in its entirety". Just a thought. Geez he's awfully cute. :-) Debbie
Comment Written 30-Jan-2014
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Debbie, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Darkhorse555
from the amazing beautiful picture these words said it all just half a smile had he, but when he flashed that half a smile, my heart would fill with glee very beautifully penned dear friend excellent piece
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from the amazing beautiful picture these words said it all just half a smile had he, but when he flashed that half a smile, my heart would fill with glee very beautifully penned dear friend excellent piece
Comment Written 30-Jan-2014
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Darkhorse, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Gargantuan2
I will never get enough. You write poetry like I drink water; It just comes as something we do every day. I hope you don't stop, especially with sawyer's pictures... he's so cute :)
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I will never get enough. You write poetry like I drink water; It just comes as something we do every day. I hope you don't stop, especially with sawyer's pictures... he's so cute :)
Comment Written 30-Jan-2014
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Gargantuan, how good to hear from you. Thank you so very much for your gracious and generous review :-) Brooke
Comment from mountainwriter49
Good Morning, Brooke
I hope you're surviving this frigid blast. This morning it was 7 where I live 'down South" and 18 in New York City. Go figure! lol So knowing you live in between, I know you're cold too and hope all is well.
I loved this little poem and the 'half smile' is a perfect phrase. Nothing much better than the smile of a child because it so truly reflects his personality and what's going on in his mind. It goes without saying your technique is spot-on.
What a delightful poem to read this morning!
-Ray
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2014
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Good Morning, Brooke
I hope you're surviving this frigid blast. This morning it was 7 where I live 'down South" and 18 in New York City. Go figure! lol So knowing you live in between, I know you're cold too and hope all is well.
I loved this little poem and the 'half smile' is a perfect phrase. Nothing much better than the smile of a child because it so truly reflects his personality and what's going on in his mind. It goes without saying your technique is spot-on.
What a delightful poem to read this morning!
-Ray
Comment Written 30-Jan-2014
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Ray, thank you so much, my generous friend :-) It is still very cold but with the promise of some warming all the way into the tropical 40s in days to come. LOL And much of the foot plus of snow we had is going down, allowing grass to peek through in places. Lucky Sawyer lets to live in a place where through all of our cold he has played outside in the warmth and sunshine :-) Brooke
Comment from Enrique28
but when he flashed that half a smile,
my heart would fill with glee.
Wonderfully descriptive of the emotional effect a child can have, and equally, the way a smile impacts on the soul...
Superbly poetic! Enrique
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but when he flashed that half a smile,
my heart would fill with glee.
Wonderfully descriptive of the emotional effect a child can have, and equally, the way a smile impacts on the soul...
Superbly poetic! Enrique
Comment Written 30-Jan-2014
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Enrique, thank you so very much for your encouragement and generosity :-) Brooke
Comment from Akanksha Mahajan
Awesome Poem!!!
I can compare this poem equally with 'Johnny Johnny yes papa'.
Both of them has very good rhymes and both are suitable as a children's poem. You have rhymed it very smoothly and we also get the message ' A Smile can Brighten up the world' (can make happy).
Perfect picture.
May be in future we will see 'Ezekiel Had Half a Smile' as another best poem for children.
Thank you so much for sharing!!
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2014
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Awesome Poem!!!
I can compare this poem equally with 'Johnny Johnny yes papa'.
Both of them has very good rhymes and both are suitable as a children's poem. You have rhymed it very smoothly and we also get the message ' A Smile can Brighten up the world' (can make happy).
Perfect picture.
May be in future we will see 'Ezekiel Had Half a Smile' as another best poem for children.
Thank you so much for sharing!!
Comment Written 30-Jan-2014
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Akanksha, thank you so very much :-) Brooke
Comment from Lovewritingstuff
This is a delightful photo from your grandson that goes so well along with this poem. Indeed a smile can trigger so many positive emotions and outcome.
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This is a delightful photo from your grandson that goes so well along with this poem. Indeed a smile can trigger so many positive emotions and outcome.
Comment Written 30-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2014
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Thanks so much, Lovewritingstuff :-) Brooke
