The Heart of Poetry
Viewing comments for Chapter 12 "The heart of love"'Tis not the Bard, but pretty good poetry anyway
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Comment from DALLAS01
This is a very impressive poem. You have used some wonderful similes and brought to the for front,all of the things in life that really count. My only suggestion might me to condense it a little bit. The length, and so much covered, makes it seem just a bit redundant.
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2014
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This is a very impressive poem. You have used some wonderful similes and brought to the for front,all of the things in life that really count. My only suggestion might me to condense it a little bit. The length, and so much covered, makes it seem just a bit redundant.
Comment Written 27-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2014
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It is lengthy for sure, I had thought about it as an essay, then when I started writing turned it into free verse. I appreciate your candor and great review. Thank you, :-) Carolyn
Comment from bichonfrisegirl
Hi Carolyn,
This is a very different type of an entry for the Valentine's poetry contest. You have thought outside of the box on this one, and have come up with an endearing write that reminds us that love is all encompassing and that there are indeed many forms of love; not just physical love.
Wonderful, vivid imagery created for your reader. My fave line is "the heart of love is the center of that meaning, the warmth and stick-to-a-tive-ness that makes a marriage last for a liftetime". I almost cried when I read that line (I was married for 36 years & then it fell apart ... I really thought we would go the distance. So that line really resonated with me.)
Well written. Thanks for sharing, Carolyn, and best wishes for the contest!
Connie :)
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2014
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Hi Carolyn,
This is a very different type of an entry for the Valentine's poetry contest. You have thought outside of the box on this one, and have come up with an endearing write that reminds us that love is all encompassing and that there are indeed many forms of love; not just physical love.
Wonderful, vivid imagery created for your reader. My fave line is "the heart of love is the center of that meaning, the warmth and stick-to-a-tive-ness that makes a marriage last for a liftetime". I almost cried when I read that line (I was married for 36 years & then it fell apart ... I really thought we would go the distance. So that line really resonated with me.)
Well written. Thanks for sharing, Carolyn, and best wishes for the contest!
Connie :)
Comment Written 27-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2014
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Thank you Connie for this wonderful and touching review. I appreciate all you have said. :-) Carolyn
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You're most welcome, Carolyn!
Have a nice evening!
Connie :)
Comment from donaldcolson
Very good poem that exhumes more optimism and sweetness than I can bare. So much for folks like myself who stay within the bounds of reality, as I see it anyway. None-the-less a charming poem. don
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2014
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Very good poem that exhumes more optimism and sweetness than I can bare. So much for folks like myself who stay within the bounds of reality, as I see it anyway. None-the-less a charming poem. don
Comment Written 27-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2014
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That's me, the eternal optimist LOL. Thank you for reading and the great rating Don. :-) Carolyn
Comment from Selina Stambi
A love that brings hope springing eternal as if a bulb bursting forth
in vibrant resurrection after the frigid grip of Winter's bonds .... beautifully expressed
The heart of love is the heart that dares to be spiritual, dares to give credence to a God (who) is love,- oh, yes, I agree - amen! :)
Hello, Carolyn,
Bravo for a very different Valentine's poem. Lots of food for thought!
Have a lovely week! My best wishes in the contest.
xxx
Sonali :)
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2014
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A love that brings hope springing eternal as if a bulb bursting forth
in vibrant resurrection after the frigid grip of Winter's bonds .... beautifully expressed
The heart of love is the heart that dares to be spiritual, dares to give credence to a God (who) is love,- oh, yes, I agree - amen! :)
Hello, Carolyn,
Bravo for a very different Valentine's poem. Lots of food for thought!
Have a lovely week! My best wishes in the contest.
xxx
Sonali :)
Comment Written 27-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2014
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Thanks Sonali for this great review, I am happy you enjoyed The heart of love... :-) Carolyn
Comment from rouskin
I love it all but especially this part:The heart of love is the heart that dares to be spiritual, dares to give credence to a God that is love. Best of luck and have a great week
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2014
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I love it all but especially this part:The heart of love is the heart that dares to be spiritual, dares to give credence to a God that is love. Best of luck and have a great week
Comment Written 27-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2014
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Thank you so much for this awesome review, I am delighted you liked The heart of love. :-) Carolyn
Comment from Petriesan
There is one verse you did not begin with "the heart of love. . ." I think it would have been tighter had it. . .
but this is a good read nonetheless
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2014
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There is one verse you did not begin with "the heart of love. . ." I think it would have been tighter had it. . .
but this is a good read nonetheless
Comment Written 27-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2014
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I appreciate the comments and I will take a look at 'tightening up'. :-) Carolyn
Comment from nivedh
Within the heart of man there lies the ability to love
Not always in an erotic sense, Where passion burns and desires run wild
waiting to be tamed by gentle caress and kisses without abandon
But in a myriad of emotions which can bring one's soul to its knees
The power of nature at its best, a raging storm of happiness
nice lines
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2014
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Within the heart of man there lies the ability to love
Not always in an erotic sense, Where passion burns and desires run wild
waiting to be tamed by gentle caress and kisses without abandon
But in a myriad of emotions which can bring one's soul to its knees
The power of nature at its best, a raging storm of happiness
nice lines
Comment Written 27-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2014
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Thank you for this review and rating, Much appreciated. :-) Carolyn
Comment from Spitfire
A wealth of original details that define the heart of love. I did find the format distracting, however. It looked very crowded. I suspect it would work better as an essay. Or a halibun, perhaps. For me, the line breaks didn't work effectively. I wrote some material about this in my FS book Hits and Near Misses, if you care to take a look.
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reply by the author on 26-Jan-2014
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A wealth of original details that define the heart of love. I did find the format distracting, however. It looked very crowded. I suspect it would work better as an essay. Or a halibun, perhaps. For me, the line breaks didn't work effectively. I wrote some material about this in my FS book Hits and Near Misses, if you care to take a look.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 26-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2014
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Thanks for the information, Shari, sorry the format was distracting, but glad you found there were some defining features. My appreciation as always, :-)Carolyn
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
This is a lovely and thought provoking piece. You gave certainly fulfilled the contest requirements along with putting a whole new spin on the execution of a Valentine's Day message. I wish you all the best in the voting and thank you so much for sharing this with me.
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2014
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This is a lovely and thought provoking piece. You gave certainly fulfilled the contest requirements along with putting a whole new spin on the execution of a Valentine's Day message. I wish you all the best in the voting and thank you so much for sharing this with me.
Comment Written 25-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2014
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Thank you for this wonderful and encouraging review. I appreciate your support and am happy you liked The heart of love. :-) Carolyn
Comment from AprilShower
Wonderful message, Carolyn. If I had any extra stars left, I'd give six just for the message. This took much thought to write. Thank you for sharing it. I agree with this totally.
April :o)
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2014
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Wonderful message, Carolyn. If I had any extra stars left, I'd give six just for the message. This took much thought to write. Thank you for sharing it. I agree with this totally.
April :o)
Comment Written 25-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2014
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April, thank you for this great review, I am glad you enjoyed the write. :-) Carolyn
