I Contemplate
modified octogram206 total reviews
Comment from judiverse
This is so lovely. The world is wide-open for a little tyke like Sawyer. I like all the sights and sounds you mention. Castles, hippos, cuckoo birds are all out there. Great sound with the tuba's oompah. The rhyme and flow are perfect, and fit the mood of the poem. An upbeat thought about all the adventures that await for those ready to explore. judi
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2014
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This is so lovely. The world is wide-open for a little tyke like Sawyer. I like all the sights and sounds you mention. Castles, hippos, cuckoo birds are all out there. Great sound with the tuba's oompah. The rhyme and flow are perfect, and fit the mood of the poem. An upbeat thought about all the adventures that await for those ready to explore. judi
Comment Written 25-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2014
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Thank you so much, Judi :-) Brooke
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You're so welcome. That was a beautiful photo of Sawyer. judi
Comment from allborn66
This is a wonderful poem. I love the child-like voice that communicate your theme. The rhyming enhances the piece. That handsome lad looks deep in thought. :)
Barbara
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2014
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This is a wonderful poem. I love the child-like voice that communicate your theme. The rhyming enhances the piece. That handsome lad looks deep in thought. :)
Barbara
Comment Written 25-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2014
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Barbara, thanks so much :-) Brooke
Comment from victor 66
Your poetry always seems so personal and gives readers a glimpse of your life. I thought the poem had good rhythm and flowed smoothly. It seemed very clearly expressed. I enjoyed it. Thank you.
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2014
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Your poetry always seems so personal and gives readers a glimpse of your life. I thought the poem had good rhythm and flowed smoothly. It seemed very clearly expressed. I enjoyed it. Thank you.
Comment Written 25-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2014
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Victor, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
The possibilities abound,
adventures that might roll around --
so many things beneath the sun
are yet to come.
Contemplate - is a lovely poem - I can just see Sawyer there, contemplating all the wonderful things in life to come - you've captured his look so well, Brooke.
Margaret
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2014
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The possibilities abound,
adventures that might roll around --
so many things beneath the sun
are yet to come.
Contemplate - is a lovely poem - I can just see Sawyer there, contemplating all the wonderful things in life to come - you've captured his look so well, Brooke.
Margaret
Comment Written 25-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2014
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thank you so much, Margaret :-) Brooke
Comment from RodG
We are introduced to a young person "contemplating" the world around him, wishing new adventures could begin.
Excellent use of refrain to emphasize your theme.
Some amusing wishes only a child would ponder like meeting a cuckoo bird and traveling with a hippo herd.
Good rhymes throughout.
Rod
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2014
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We are introduced to a young person "contemplating" the world around him, wishing new adventures could begin.
Excellent use of refrain to emphasize your theme.
Some amusing wishes only a child would ponder like meeting a cuckoo bird and traveling with a hippo herd.
Good rhymes throughout.
Rod
Comment Written 25-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2014
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Rod, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Just2Write
So many things to discover in one's lifetime. A lovely Octogram - although, I'm not sure where you modified it. The flow was very smooth.
The poem is light and airy, and makes this reader think of all the things that Sawyer will discover as he grows up. There is such a lot of marvellous things.
Rose.
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2014
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So many things to discover in one's lifetime. A lovely Octogram - although, I'm not sure where you modified it. The flow was very smooth.
The poem is light and airy, and makes this reader think of all the things that Sawyer will discover as he grows up. There is such a lot of marvellous things.
Rose.
Comment Written 25-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2014
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Rose, thanks so much, my friend :-) Brooke
Comment from AprilShower
Oh, the wonderful innocence of childhood, if only it could last. Time takes it away from us, though. Good poem and a nice picture of Sawyer, Brooke. I enjoyed reading it and seeing the picture. I have no suggestions.
April
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2014
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Oh, the wonderful innocence of childhood, if only it could last. Time takes it away from us, though. Good poem and a nice picture of Sawyer, Brooke. I enjoyed reading it and seeing the picture. I have no suggestions.
April
Comment Written 25-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2014
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April, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Glasstruth
I feel so jealous of Sawyer. His life is filled with new adventures for him to discover. I just wonder when he gets older what will he think of these poems? A wonderful octogram. Thanks for sharing. Les
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2014
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I feel so jealous of Sawyer. His life is filled with new adventures for him to discover. I just wonder when he gets older what will he think of these poems? A wonderful octogram. Thanks for sharing. Les
Comment Written 25-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2014
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Les, I'm sure hoping he likes the poems :-) Thanks so much. Brooke
Comment from Cajungirl
WOW, another sensational poem you have here, Brooke. The picture of Sawyer does look as though he is contemplating. Beautiful job you have done here. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2014
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WOW, another sensational poem you have here, Brooke. The picture of Sawyer does look as though he is contemplating. Beautiful job you have done here. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 25-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2014
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Cajungirl, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Ridley Williams
Hello Brooke,
Ahhh, the anticipation of life to come...the to's and fro's, and the highs and lows of a life unfolding. Wow! Where did the time go...? Of course, experience has taught me to give "Cuckoo Birds" a wide path, lol. I appreciated the thoughts of the beginning of the adventure, (wish I knew then...sigh). Nice thought and delivery in this well metered write, best wishes, Bill
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2014
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Hello Brooke,
Ahhh, the anticipation of life to come...the to's and fro's, and the highs and lows of a life unfolding. Wow! Where did the time go...? Of course, experience has taught me to give "Cuckoo Birds" a wide path, lol. I appreciated the thoughts of the beginning of the adventure, (wish I knew then...sigh). Nice thought and delivery in this well metered write, best wishes, Bill
Comment Written 25-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2014
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Bill, thank you so much :-) Brooke
