I Contemplate
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Comment from Just Pete
Once again you have captured the imagination of a small boy in perfect rhyme. Repetition re-enforces the expectations of a small mind and the scope of young imagination. You are without doubt a store of fine poetry - always a pleasure to read.
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2014
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Once again you have captured the imagination of a small boy in perfect rhyme. Repetition re-enforces the expectations of a small mind and the scope of young imagination. You are without doubt a store of fine poetry - always a pleasure to read.
Comment Written 24-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2014
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Pete, thanks so much for your thoughtful comments and generous six stars :-) Brooke
Comment from Mastery
Ah, the wondrous world ahead for Sawyer, eh, Brooke. I liked how you put little asides throughout like (or travel with a hippo herd
(some say they're fun).
Very nice. Bob
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2014
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Ah, the wondrous world ahead for Sawyer, eh, Brooke. I liked how you put little asides throughout like (or travel with a hippo herd
(some say they're fun).
Very nice. Bob
Comment Written 24-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2014
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Thank you so much, Bob :-) Brooke
Comment from Sasha
You have done it again! Your view through Sawyer's eyes and heart are astounding. What a marvelous and delightful poem about life and what awaits him. I really, really, really (okay just a bit redundant) enjoyed this one. Marvelous photo of the little guy too.
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2014
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You have done it again! Your view through Sawyer's eyes and heart are astounding. What a marvelous and delightful poem about life and what awaits him. I really, really, really (okay just a bit redundant) enjoyed this one. Marvelous photo of the little guy too.
Comment Written 24-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2014
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Thank you, Valerie, so pleased this meets with your approval, my friend :-) Brooke
Comment from JM daSilva
It's great to have a future ahead of you. A whole life waiting to be built.
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2014
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It's great to have a future ahead of you. A whole life waiting to be built.
Comment Written 24-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2014
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Thank you so much, JM :-) Brooke
Comment from Aussie
A delightful Sawyer poem. If only we could turn the clock back and be the little adventurer that he is - I have in my portfolio - life is an adventure to be lived. Every day a different adventure. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2014
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A delightful Sawyer poem. If only we could turn the clock back and be the little adventurer that he is - I have in my portfolio - life is an adventure to be lived. Every day a different adventure. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 24-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2014
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Thank you, Kay - the poor tyke has a bad cold right now, his first one. But he'll be peppy again soon enough :-) Brooke
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Maybe nana gave it to him by air mail. LOL.
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I think this particular cold is traced from Nora's school where she picked it up to Miranda, whom she gave it to, to Sawyer, who got it from mommy - I think I'm in the clear LOL :-)
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We have a measles epidemic running around the CBD. I'm glad I don't live in Brisbane. Lea has been very, very sick with a chest infection - after three weeks on penicillin, she is starting to pick up and then it's Toby's turn for his leg operation! I had a new cast made on Friday for a new leg :-{
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Well, that is just too much for one household at one time! I'm sending you all bunches of hugs. :-)
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Thank you my friend - don't go to bed yet, I'm posting a poem now! :-)
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It isn't even 7, so I'll be up for a while :-)
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I do get confused - must be the heatwave! I'm happy with the poem, hard to write a story and keep it as a poem.
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I just read it - you did a fantastic job
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Tanka you, I put my heart into whatever I write and now I am going to write the next chapter of Aboriginal Dreaming - how is your weather?
Comment from Curly Girly
This is a good image to go with your poem about a child's contemplation of life. Yes, those little minds are abuzz with wonderings about our big world.
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2014
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This is a good image to go with your poem about a child's contemplation of life. Yes, those little minds are abuzz with wonderings about our big world.
Comment Written 24-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2014
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CG, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Preston McWhorter
Hi, Brooke :-)
"I Contemplate" is beautifully excellent free verse poetry.
Its rhythm and rhyme are excellent. Its figurative language and imagery are breath taking. Its structure is good and unconventional.
Preston
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2014
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Hi, Brooke :-)
"I Contemplate" is beautifully excellent free verse poetry.
Its rhythm and rhyme are excellent. Its figurative language and imagery are breath taking. Its structure is good and unconventional.
Preston
Comment Written 24-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2014
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Preston, thank you so much, my friend :-) Brooke
Comment from Pili Pubul
Truly an amazing picture of Sawyer by Miranda capturing his truly contemplative expression , you created a magnificent and to me very moving poem about how new he is I the world and all the things that "are yet to come" ... Beautiful. Pili
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2014
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Truly an amazing picture of Sawyer by Miranda capturing his truly contemplative expression , you created a magnificent and to me very moving poem about how new he is I the world and all the things that "are yet to come" ... Beautiful. Pili
Comment Written 24-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2014
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Pili, thank you so much :-) Brooke
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You are very welcome. Pili
Comment from G.B. Smith
? should this be races (the race that waits for me to run
are yet to come.) The poem is grand; however this cut me off
Bear
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2014
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? should this be races (the race that waits for me to run
are yet to come.) The poem is grand; however this cut me off
Bear
Comment Written 24-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2014
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Bear, thanks so much - I'll reread that section :-) Brooke
Comment from ravenblack
Oh, to have that perspective of a child that makes everything seem fresh and new...but waitaminute, we are poets...we do have it. Just don't want to hear the cuckoo bird early in the morning.
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Oh, to have that perspective of a child that makes everything seem fresh and new...but waitaminute, we are poets...we do have it. Just don't want to hear the cuckoo bird early in the morning.
Comment Written 24-Jan-2014
