The Project
a poem15 total reviews
Comment from in777wr#
This was a very sobering poem. The poem flows, and reads well. Sometimes people are quick to pass judgement on us, but don't realize others could point the finger at them. Nicely written.
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2014
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This was a very sobering poem. The poem flows, and reads well. Sometimes people are quick to pass judgement on us, but don't realize others could point the finger at them. Nicely written.
Comment Written 23-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2014
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Hi again,
thank you for dropping in to check out some more of my thoughts. You have gotten great understanding from my words so I thank you for the effort.
cheers
grant
Comment from galivan
oh to read between the lines. Maybe it's because the content resonates with me so much that I love this poem. It's difficult to judge it or offer a critique. It's just a real gem. Keep writing, good work and thank you.
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reply by the author on 23-Jan-2014
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oh to read between the lines. Maybe it's because the content resonates with me so much that I love this poem. It's difficult to judge it or offer a critique. It's just a real gem. Keep writing, good work and thank you.
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Comment Written 23-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2014
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Hi galivan,
thanks for the cool review, I appreciate it.
Was there anything I could do to improve it?
cheers
grant
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I'd have to really reach for that. How about " I owe you not that debt" ? Also " In my way if I can." Might flow better if it read "in any way I can" but that would change the meaning in a big way. In this case I'd sacrifice flow for meaning.
Comment from emrpoems
You should face the mirror.
This bird must leave its cage.
Check your own reflection,
take ownership of rage. --Loved this last stanza
Quatrains with abcb rhymes
Great use of enjambment and some alliteration throughout
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2014
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You should face the mirror.
This bird must leave its cage.
Check your own reflection,
take ownership of rage. --Loved this last stanza
Quatrains with abcb rhymes
Great use of enjambment and some alliteration throughout
Comment Written 23-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2014
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Hi there emrpoems,
thanks for the cool review! I appreciate it.
cheers
grant
Comment from James Dooney
gday there cob ! Looks like you have done a good job here. I like your structure and your rhyming. I fee they are well done. Good work !
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2014
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gday there cob ! Looks like you have done a good job here. I like your structure and your rhyming. I fee they are well done. Good work !
Comment Written 23-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2014
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Hi James,
I appreciate the thoughts.
cheers
grant
Comment from robina1978
A catching title that complements your poem. You listen to the voice in your head, that is your conscience. I think your love left you, not sure. Good rhyme and flow all the way through.
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reply by the author on 23-Jan-2014
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A catching title that complements your poem. You listen to the voice in your head, that is your conscience. I think your love left you, not sure. Good rhyme and flow all the way through.
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Comment Written 23-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2014
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Hello robina1978,
Thank you for a thoughtful review, I appreciate the effort.
cheers
grant
