The Project
a poem15 total reviews
Comment from beautyseeker
Very good abcb... Rhyme, an interesting read...i especially enjoyed..." What does doing do" and ... " help us be forever" story of a breakup i take it but it could go deeper...
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2014
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Very good abcb... Rhyme, an interesting read...i especially enjoyed..." What does doing do" and ... " help us be forever" story of a breakup i take it but it could go deeper...
Comment Written 26-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2014
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Hi Beautyseeker,
thanks for the cool thoughts and time spent in review.
cheers
Grant
Comment from GWHARGIS
I won't cry, but I will applaud this. It was a great self realization poem. The rhythm and the flow were great. Nice imagery. I like the last two lines. Putting the ball back in the other court. nicely done.
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2014
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I won't cry, but I will applaud this. It was a great self realization poem. The rhythm and the flow were great. Nice imagery. I like the last two lines. Putting the ball back in the other court. nicely done.
Comment Written 25-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2014
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Hi there GWHARGIS,
I appreciate the great thoughts and review and thank you for stopping by for a read, i have many more hidden away in my portfolio.
cheers
Grant
Comment from Acquired Taste
Your words infer you are not upset about, what I view, as unreasonable demands from someone that had no right to ask for those answers. You seemed to do what you thought was right.
Crying helps - realizing the truth makes healing faster.
Liked this very much.
AT=/
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2014
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Your words infer you are not upset about, what I view, as unreasonable demands from someone that had no right to ask for those answers. You seemed to do what you thought was right.
Crying helps - realizing the truth makes healing faster.
Liked this very much.
AT=/
Comment Written 25-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2014
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Hello there AT,
I'm glad you enjoyed it and thank you for the fantastic thoughts. I appreciate it.
cheers
Grant
Comment from Righteous Riter
Good use of the abcb rhyme scheme. Good end rhyming. Good perfect rhyming with man/can...cage/rage...some/say...does/doing/do...don't/debt. Good rhythm and flow. Good clear message that holds my attention from start to finish.
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2014
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Good use of the abcb rhyme scheme. Good end rhyming. Good perfect rhyming with man/can...cage/rage...some/say...does/doing/do...don't/debt. Good rhythm and flow. Good clear message that holds my attention from start to finish.
Comment Written 24-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2014
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Hey there,
thanks for the astute review. I appreciate the time and effort spent.
cheers
grant
Comment from Nosha17
Difficulties in a relationship when people are strong-minded. Your rhyme works well and you have made good use of language. Maybe, an illustration would be good to make it more attractive to the reader, hope you don't mind me suggesting it. Faye
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2014
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Difficulties in a relationship when people are strong-minded. Your rhyme works well and you have made good use of language. Maybe, an illustration would be good to make it more attractive to the reader, hope you don't mind me suggesting it. Faye
Comment Written 23-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2014
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Hi Faye,
I don't mind suggestions at all.
Personally I don't usually use pictures as I prefer not to influence a readers imagery.
Thanks for the review, it's appreciated.
cheers
grant
Comment from livelylinda
mrgrunty: I called Argentina. . .they never heard of you and have heavier matters to cry about. . .I'm not sure if this is a relationship which ended. . .or what? It read emotionless, non-caring. Perhaps it just wasn't a realistic relationship so deep feelings never had transpired. Hmmmmmmm. . .livelylinda
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2014
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mrgrunty: I called Argentina. . .they never heard of you and have heavier matters to cry about. . .I'm not sure if this is a relationship which ended. . .or what? It read emotionless, non-caring. Perhaps it just wasn't a realistic relationship so deep feelings never had transpired. Hmmmmmmm. . .livelylinda
Comment Written 23-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2014
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hi livelylinda,
thanks for your thoughts,
cheers
grant
Comment from allborn66
This is a very powerful poem. You communicate theme clearly. The tone is appropriate to the subject matter. The rhyming scheme enhances the piece.
Barbara
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2014
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This is a very powerful poem. You communicate theme clearly. The tone is appropriate to the subject matter. The rhyming scheme enhances the piece.
Barbara
Comment Written 23-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2014
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thank you Barbara for the great thoughts and review.
cheers
grant
Comment from Dawn of Tomorrow
No, no, no tears. I like this one but it doesn't have the emotional pack like so many of yours do. I do so love this stanza though
Tell you that I'm sorry,
for things before we'd met.
Not your place to judge me,
I don't owe you that debt.
That's wonderful, my friend. Nice job and so good to read you.
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2014
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No, no, no tears. I like this one but it doesn't have the emotional pack like so many of yours do. I do so love this stanza though
Tell you that I'm sorry,
for things before we'd met.
Not your place to judge me,
I don't owe you that debt.
That's wonderful, my friend. Nice job and so good to read you.
Comment Written 23-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2014
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hey sweets,
I tried to remain a bit aloof from it so as not to get too carried away myself.
Glad you dropped in my dear!
hugs
g
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Well I hope she reads this poem. Not the most romantic perhaps but you have made a brave effort to get her, or rather talk her round to take you as you are. That's all she is going to get - one cannot give more than that. Your final stanza tells me you are aware of her displeasure. So smarten up - or else. A good read - five stanzas in good abcb rhyme.
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2014
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Well I hope she reads this poem. Not the most romantic perhaps but you have made a brave effort to get her, or rather talk her round to take you as you are. That's all she is going to get - one cannot give more than that. Your final stanza tells me you are aware of her displeasure. So smarten up - or else. A good read - five stanzas in good abcb rhyme.
Comment Written 23-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2014
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Hi Dorothy,
thanks for the great review and thoughts. It has since ended several months ago so this is kind of a retrospective I suppose.
Again, thanks
cheers
grant
Comment from Woman~Loved
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reply by the author on 23-Jan-2014
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Comment Written 23-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2014
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Hello there again!
It's a two way street where there is blame to share but sometimes one partner (male or female) is blind to their own shortcomings but recognises them falsely in someone else.
I believe the single reason for relationship failure is the lack of HONEST OPEN COMMUNICATION. False communication is almost worse than none.
Thanks hon for the great response!
x
grant
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I think something really weird happened to your initial review my friend??
