Comment from Righteous Riter

Excellent

Good use of the aabb rhyme scheme. Good end rhyming. Good perfect rhyming with wood/good...tight/light. Good description and alliteration. Good storytelling. Good complimentary photo followed by a clear message.

 Comment Written 24-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 25-Jan-2014

Thanks for the kind words.

Steve

Comment from G.B. Smith

Excellent

Hey there Steve
I love this sweet little poem. I have 17 grandchildren & 1 great grandchild, and with your permission would like to read it to the 4 younger ones. It is delightful. We are all about elves and fairies
Bear

 Comment Written 24-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 25-Jan-2014

Thanks, Glen - of course you can read it to them - the more enjoyment the merrier - dunno how you're going to fit four names into that last stanza....

Steve

Comment from rjuselius

Excellent

i so love fairies, pixies, goblins, gargoyles, elves and perhaps hobits! such a fun piece of poetry!
thank you for sharing!

rebekka x

 Comment Written 24-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 25-Jan-2014

Thanks, Rebekka

I did think of using hobbits instead of goblins and, of course, New Zealand is almost the home of the hobbit.....

Steve

Comment from LorraineK

Excellent

What a delightful children's poem. I would love to read it to my grandchildren. It was very well written. The rhyming would make it fun for adults and children alike to listen to. Great job. LorraineK

 Comment Written 24-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 25-Jan-2014

Thanks, Lorraine

Steve

Comment from boxergirl

Excellent

Wow! Awesome poem/lullaby for your granddaughter. Great rhythm, great rhyming, great alliterations, gosh darn it, it's just GREAT. Wish I had a six left for you. 8-)

 Comment Written 23-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 25-Jan-2014

Thanks, BG, for the great review and the virtual sixer.

Steve

Comment from Jackarrie

Excellent

When Keilah's tucked up in her bed nice and tight
And Mummy has kissed her and turned out the light,
These magical folk will make sure she's alright,
So when Keilah's tucked up ,then it's time for Good Night!

This is a magical poem that all children will love, it is written so well and easy for children to understand. The image is just fab.

Well done. mary

 Comment Written 23-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 25-Jan-2014

Thanks, Mary - glad you enjoyed.

Steve

Comment from livelylinda

Excellent

Steve: such a delightful poem, just perfect to read to a little one at bedtime. They love the rhymes and it tells a story which includes her. I bet she giggled at that! Great job, grandpa, or g-pa as my 17 year old grandson would call you. livelylinda

 Comment Written 23-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 25-Jan-2014

Thanks, Linda

Grampy Steve

Comment from Gloria ....

Excellent

Fabulous children's poem in pristine rhythm and rhyme. I bet you Keilah absolutely adores it when grandfather reads this out loud to her. Nice that others can use the poem too.

Exceptional steve.

Gloria

 Comment Written 23-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 25-Jan-2014

Thanks, Gloria

Steve

Comment from w.j.debi

Excellent

Now what child could resist a tale about the elves and fairies that are watching over them while they sleep. This has such a happy cadence too. The repeating lines to start and end each stanza round things out very well.

 Comment Written 23-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 25-Jan-2014

Thanks for the kind words.

Steve

Comment from Darkhorse555

Excellent

from the pictured angel When the wee woodland folk wear their coats all of green,so sweetly penned really a very beautifully crafted excellent piece

 Comment Written 23-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 25-Jan-2014

Thank you.

Steve