A Valentine Duet
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Comment from jackpeg
Hi, Brook. Been off the site for several months. Married now and Alyce (my new Honey) writes pretty good verse herself. This little Valentine piece conforms to your usual high standards: impeccable rhyme, tight meter, and wonderfully crafted sentiment. What is the "Are you human? 2+2=" box all about? I'm afraid to fill in the too obvious 4 lest it's a trick question and I look like a fool.--Jack
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Hi, Brook. Been off the site for several months. Married now and Alyce (my new Honey) writes pretty good verse herself. This little Valentine piece conforms to your usual high standards: impeccable rhyme, tight meter, and wonderfully crafted sentiment. What is the "Are you human? 2+2=" box all about? I'm afraid to fill in the too obvious 4 lest it's a trick question and I look like a fool.--Jack
Comment Written 24-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2014
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Jack, thanks so much, and congratulations on your new marriage!
They've had the are you human box over at fan art for a while. I hadn't seen it here yet. Anyway, you always seemed human to me :-) Brooke
Comment from barbara.wilkey
When we find true love our song is complete. I see the joy in Sawyer's eyes and I can't help but smile. I am enjoying watching this young man grow up almost as much as you are.
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When we find true love our song is complete. I see the joy in Sawyer's eyes and I can't help but smile. I am enjoying watching this young man grow up almost as much as you are.
Comment Written 24-Jan-2014
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Barbara, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Connie C
Awww . . . what a sweet Valentines poem, Brooke; and of course, the picture is just as sweet. I like the idea of two participating in the making of a song, which I see as a metaphor for a loving relationship.
My best to you in the contest.
Connie
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Awww . . . what a sweet Valentines poem, Brooke; and of course, the picture is just as sweet. I like the idea of two participating in the making of a song, which I see as a metaphor for a loving relationship.
My best to you in the contest.
Connie
Comment Written 24-Jan-2014
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Connie, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from James Dooney
Once again you have aced this there Brooke. You hit the emotional nerve of the reader here. Your vocab and structures are strong. This is gooood.
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Once again you have aced this there Brooke. You hit the emotional nerve of the reader here. Your vocab and structures are strong. This is gooood.
Comment Written 24-Jan-2014
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James, thank you so very much for your gracious and generous response to this poem :-) Brooke
Comment from Caressa_08
How very sweet, this Valentine Duet and Sawyer seems so happy, enjoying every note that he & Nora play...A heartfelt message for not just the young at heart, little ones & those older that have a love they cherish & can share so much together..C.
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How very sweet, this Valentine Duet and Sawyer seems so happy, enjoying every note that he & Nora play...A heartfelt message for not just the young at heart, little ones & those older that have a love they cherish & can share so much together..C.
Comment Written 24-Jan-2014
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Caressa, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Righteous Riter
Good use of the abcb rhyme scheme. Good end rhyming. Good description that creates a clear image in my mind. Good alliteration. Good rhythm and flow. Good complimentary photo followed by a clear message.
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Good use of the abcb rhyme scheme. Good end rhyming. Good description that creates a clear image in my mind. Good alliteration. Good rhythm and flow. Good complimentary photo followed by a clear message.
Comment Written 24-Jan-2014
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Righteous Riter, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from lakeport
A Valentine duet,indeed that's lovely,that's a good age to get them to learn the piano.that's a beautiful Valentines poem,it has a lyrical touch, I enjoyed reading it,God bless you, Hugs!Lakeport.
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A Valentine duet,indeed that's lovely,that's a good age to get them to learn the piano.that's a beautiful Valentines poem,it has a lyrical touch, I enjoyed reading it,God bless you, Hugs!Lakeport.
Comment Written 24-Jan-2014
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Thank you, Lakeport. Nora, at five, has been taking actual piano lessons for a few months. Sawyer, at 20 months, is just doing his own thing at this point. LOL :-) Brooke
Comment from sweetthanesue
Nice duet verse...great rhyming scheme...I love the delightful picture....nothing better than a duet on the piano...all smiles..aw..will be popular...sue
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Nice duet verse...great rhyming scheme...I love the delightful picture....nothing better than a duet on the piano...all smiles..aw..will be popular...sue
Comment Written 24-Jan-2014
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Sue, thank you so much for your gracious and generous response to this poem :-) Brooke
Comment from G.B. Smith
Hello Brooke
I love the way you string your words together in rhyme and formation. This is a clever little poem and a superb entry into the contest
Bear
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Hello Brooke
I love the way you string your words together in rhyme and formation. This is a clever little poem and a superb entry into the contest
Bear
Comment Written 24-Jan-2014
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Bear, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Rondeno
Beautiful poem, Brooke. The whole point about the Valentine thing is the "twoness". And that photo is a work of genius: black and white is exactly right, and little Sawyer's face has been caught at just the perfect millisecond!
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Beautiful poem, Brooke. The whole point about the Valentine thing is the "twoness". And that photo is a work of genius: black and white is exactly right, and little Sawyer's face has been caught at just the perfect millisecond!
Comment Written 24-Jan-2014
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Michael, thank you so much :-) Brooke
