A Valentine Duet
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Comment from in777wr#
This was a wonderfully written poem. His song always requires two to sing along. The poem reads, and flows well. The poem has a cheery mood to it. Enjoyed reading this poem.
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2014
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This was a wonderfully written poem. His song always requires two to sing along. The poem reads, and flows well. The poem has a cheery mood to it. Enjoyed reading this poem.
Comment Written 23-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2014
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Arthur, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Well this has to be the best Valentine message I've read so far. And, of course, the perfect picture. You should have put their music on CD and posted - Maybe not! LOL. A lovely poem and Good Luck in the contest - Regards Dorothy
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Well this has to be the best Valentine message I've read so far. And, of course, the perfect picture. You should have put their music on CD and posted - Maybe not! LOL. A lovely poem and Good Luck in the contest - Regards Dorothy
Comment Written 23-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2014
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Dorothy, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from honeytree
I love the art work so much here for this poem.
Valentines day is a special day for those who are in love.
Love is also very special when we know it will never waver.
honey tree.
I have no sixes left.
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2014
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I love the art work so much here for this poem.
Valentines day is a special day for those who are in love.
Love is also very special when we know it will never waver.
honey tree.
I have no sixes left.
Comment Written 23-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2014
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Annie, thank you so very much :-) Brooke
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I liked what you wrote very much.
honeytree
Comment from The Death
This is so cute!!
It is so true that 'love songs' need two, not just one.
I like this verse the most:
The song I hold within my heart
has never been a solo,
for words of love when sung alone
create a sound that's hollow.
Excellent use of abcb rhyming scheme here.
It is simple but so true and lovely. :)
I enjoyed reading it. :)
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2014
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This is so cute!!
It is so true that 'love songs' need two, not just one.
I like this verse the most:
The song I hold within my heart
has never been a solo,
for words of love when sung alone
create a sound that's hollow.
Excellent use of abcb rhyming scheme here.
It is simple but so true and lovely. :)
I enjoyed reading it. :)
Comment Written 23-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2014
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Anumpam, thank you so much :-) Brooke
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Do you mean 'Anupam' ? :)
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sorry
Comment from kiwigirl2821
Fabulous fabulous write. I love the rhymes and the way the piece plays itself in my mind and I always love the continuing saga of Sawyer...huggs xoxo d
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2014
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Fabulous fabulous write. I love the rhymes and the way the piece plays itself in my mind and I always love the continuing saga of Sawyer...huggs xoxo d
Comment Written 23-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2014
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Deb, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Patrick G Cox
Hi Brooke,
Sawyer starting out young to charm the ladies I see. Nice little poem to go with the rather fun theme suggested.
Patrick
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2014
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Hi Brooke,
Sawyer starting out young to charm the ladies I see. Nice little poem to go with the rather fun theme suggested.
Patrick
Comment Written 23-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2014
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Patrick, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from JM daSilva
A long song made by two loving hearts in unison. This is great. As I said, I'll come here once a day to review someone so I won't be completely absent. You poems are great.
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2014
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A long song made by two loving hearts in unison. This is great. As I said, I'll come here once a day to review someone so I won't be completely absent. You poems are great.
Comment Written 23-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2014
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Thank you, JM - it is nice to know you won't totally disappear :-) Brooke
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I won't. Thanks.
Comment from BLACKDYKE
And I find it soooo easy to join you
in song Brook. A lyrical work if ever
there was one. I love this for it's simplicity and continuity. Plus a live
picture to boot. Eric
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And I find it soooo easy to join you
in song Brook. A lyrical work if ever
there was one. I love this for it's simplicity and continuity. Plus a live
picture to boot. Eric
Comment Written 23-Jan-2014
Comment from Zue65
Your poem is definitely inspiring, all of those I have reviewed are excellently written. You work deserved a status in the Hall of Fame. I hope FanStory can create new sector where experts and masters can post their work and the amateurs too, can post their creations on another sector. If it is possible, the posted poems may be divided into two categories. Thanks again for sharing my friend, God bless.
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2014
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Your poem is definitely inspiring, all of those I have reviewed are excellently written. You work deserved a status in the Hall of Fame. I hope FanStory can create new sector where experts and masters can post their work and the amateurs too, can post their creations on another sector. If it is possible, the posted poems may be divided into two categories. Thanks again for sharing my friend, God bless.
Comment Written 23-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2014
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Thank you, nassus, for your thoughtful review and interesting idea :-) Brooke
Comment from Domino 2
Hi, Brooke.
I often see 'realize' included as THREE syllables to make the meter, but I pronounce as TWO - 'rea-IZE'. I always think, 'understand' means the same thing and is a DEFINATE three syllable word in anyone's language.
Anyway, that minor nit-pick aside, this is another excellent write from your cute pen.
Top multi-syllable rhymes for extra flow.
Nice one!
Cheers, Ted
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2014
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Hi, Brooke.
I often see 'realize' included as THREE syllables to make the meter, but I pronounce as TWO - 'rea-IZE'. I always think, 'understand' means the same thing and is a DEFINATE three syllable word in anyone's language.
Anyway, that minor nit-pick aside, this is another excellent write from your cute pen.
Top multi-syllable rhymes for extra flow.
Nice one!
Cheers, Ted
Comment Written 23-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2014
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I actually do say re/a/lize with the middle syllable a soft syllable, so I am not writing it that way to make if fit the meter - I am writing that way because it fits the meter, at least in my accent
and probably in many people's accent, which would explain why you often see it that way :-) and for some reason, it is a much prettier word to me than understand...
Thank you, Teddy, for your thoughtful response to this poem
Brooke :-) Brooke
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With respect, Brooke, I think it's often best to consider how the reader reads and pronounces words, rather than just how we do.
When I think there may be some dispute, I either change the word's meaning completely, or I go for what would be more widely accepted. 'Comprehend' is another alternative which has a better ring than understand, perhaps.
Cheers, Ted x
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If I thought I were one of a tiny number of people pronouncing realize that way, I might agree. I obviously don't want a poem that will sound off to most people, but I don't think that is the case with this word, so I prefer to go with the word that is most pleasing to my ear. Perhaps I am just a more selfish writer than you, dear friend :-)
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LOL at your last sentence, Brooke, and I never argue with a lady - well, at least not for long. :-) x
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Anyway, let's face it - what percentage of reviewers on here either understand or appreciate meter, let alone are capable of writing in it? A small minority IMO. :-) x
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:-)
