Comment from victor 66

Excellent

A great Halloween poem! That was really a fun read. It was simple, flowed well and told a perfectly classic horror story. Congratulations on your win.

 Comment Written 27-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 27-Jan-2014

Thanks for the review and the stars!

Comment from rouskin

Excellent

This really deserves to be a winner. Congratulations!
Outstanding write superbly presented with this complimentary
picture.Have a great weekend

 Comment Written 24-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 24-Jan-2014

Thanks so much for the review and the stars! Hope you have a great weekend too!

Comment from BeasPeas

Excellent

Very well done. Poem flows, rhyming is good. Easy to understand and fun to read. Two-line stanzas work well with your playful story.

 Comment Written 22-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 22-Jan-2014

Thanks for the review and the stars!

Comment from Soulester

Excellent

Good one! I especially like the rhyming couplets that give this "for a campfire" story poem that element of a persona walking into something really, really terrible. I really, really like it! Many good choices of vocabulary and clever phrases such as: ...the last guy broke and ran.... Great job! Mary

 Comment Written 22-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 22-Jan-2014

Thanks, Mary. I appreciate the review and the stars.

Comment from nelliesellie

Excellent

I love the poem. Didn't your mother tell you about taking dares? You were a man alright but you were a dead one. But at least you had company. Your friends came with you. Great work. Good luck with the contest.

 Comment Written 22-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 22-Jan-2014

Thanks for the review and the stars!!!

Comment from evrenios

Excellent

I like this poem - one of my favorites in the contest. You tell the story with ease and your work has a flow and delight that I identify with. The rhyme is easy and unforced.

There is one minor question - and it is only one of interpretation. I am hoping that you will answer me about it. Your buddies who are bloodied and who twist and prance (Does that mean they are strung up on a rope, hanging, that they are in on the joke and are playing "zombie" or that they are the real zombies.) It is a great ending - the ambiguity of it is actually delicious - but please, won't you help this reader know what you meant so that I can sleep? Thanks!

 Comment Written 21-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 21-Jan-2014

Thanks for the review and stars! To answer your question, I envisioned it as a fraternity initiation prank. Had there been the option for more than 100 words, the ending would have had the buddies being in on it...but not before scaring the wits out of the poor guy.

Comment from Erik McGinley

Excellent

Very nice meter and rhyme and that last line is classic in the context of the rest of it.

It also has a touch of humour all the way through that suddenly turns around there.

Nice poem here :)

 Comment Written 21-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 21-Jan-2014

Thanks! I appreciate the review and the stars.