Comment from rama devi

Excellent

Good p on lune-loon and fun satire with true t form lune making fun of itself. Your joke in the notes made me chuckle too. LOL Fun presentation. Good luck in the contest.

Chuckling,
rd

 Comment Written 23-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 23-Jan-2014

Thanks, Rama.

I really believe this form is too brief to make a genuine judgement on quality of the piece, so I thought I might as well have some fun.

Steve

reply by rama devi on 23-Jan-2014

I agree to some extent, but it is possible to write a powerful piece in a few words---very rare, but possible. Brevity is a powerful tool but it takes a special kind of talent to use it well.

Comment from goompa

Excellent

Great play on words in this loony lune. I like it a lot mostly because I've done my share of baying and know the feeling quite well

 Comment Written 22-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 22-Jan-2014

Thanks, haven't we all!?

Steve

Comment from evrenios

Excellent

Well - "Sometimes I feel like a nut - sometimes I don't." (Smile) Your delightful sense of humor show here - very cute and true. Who doesn't bay at the moon now and then???? Its the crazies of this world who make the poets. I salute your craziness Kiwi - keep it up!

This is a delightful work that is sparking me to either bay at the moon or write poetry. Hmmmmm Which shall I do first?

 Comment Written 22-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 22-Jan-2014

Alternatively you could moon at the bay..... see, complete nutcase!

Thanks for stopping by.

Steve

reply by evrenios on 22-Jan-2014

You got me!

Comment from L.A.Matthies

Excellent

I absolutely love your sense of humor ...well done! Great play on words and nice use of rhyme make for an entertaining lune :)

 Comment Written 22-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 22-Jan-2014

Thank you so much.

Steve

Comment from Keturah Martin

Excellent

This short writing is priceless in its vivid imagery and highly descriptive picture which is so complimentary to the few short words. It gives a huge picture which is packaged in a small parcel. Very well done my friend!

 Comment Written 22-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 22-Jan-2014

Thank you, keturah.

Steve

Comment from kiwijenny

Excellent

Lune-atic.......Steve you are a crazy kid. Well done....
I LOVE this....well done. I love me some good lunes......lake lunes....any kind of lunes.
Well done
God bless

 Comment Written 22-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 22-Jan-2014

Doubloons would be nice, balloons, George C-loon-ey, pantaloons.....

Steve the Loon

reply by kiwijenny on 23-Jan-2014

Ha ha ha doubloon...you've got another winner with that

Comment from rhymelord

Excellent

Dear Steve,
With my limited knowledge of Lunes (I know I wrote one but hadn't a clue really) this is good. At least it is amusing, but then, beware of humour! 'tis the pathos wins the prizes.
Reg

 Comment Written 22-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 22-Jan-2014

Oh, I can be pathetic to win a contest....

Thanks for reviewing.

Steve

Comment from krys123

Excellent

I love how you made a play on words and added lunacy with the moon being called out to from a poet. Who interned turned out to be crazy and I could really see that. Ha ha! Thank you so much for sharing this with others including myself.
Alex/AK
PS: Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 21-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 22-Jan-2014

Thanks, Alex

Steve

reply by krys123 on 23-Jan-2014

welcome Steve

Comment from allborn66

Excellent

This is a very cute poem. I like how self-aware it is. The word choice paints a vivid picture. I like the humor in the tone.
Barbara

 Comment Written 21-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 22-Jan-2014

Yes, sometimes an inward looking poem wins a prize - let's see....

Steve

Comment from G.B. Smith

Excellent

Hey there Steve
11 words say so much and for the Lune Poetry Contest I think this entry will do well. Best wishes in it. Have a splendid week
Bear

 Comment Written 21-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 22-Jan-2014

Thanks, Bear

The contest is wide open so I bought me a ticket in the lottery.

Steve