Comment from kiwigirl2821

Excellent

Hello Brooke. I so look forward to reading your work. How wonderfully exciting life is for Sawyer at this age and how terrible fantastic for you to share it with him though your work. I could give ya the yada yada yada about the beauty of your work, but you already have a gazillion to tell you and you know it's whats in my heart. huggs xoxo deborah

 Comment Written 21-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 21-Jan-2014

Thanks so very much, Deb :-) Brooke

Comment from Liz Dunbee

Excellent

I loved the poem, but I did wonder why you chose the picture. Then I read your notes. Sawyer is a very cute little boy. I can see he is fascinated by the fans.

 Comment Written 21-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 21-Jan-2014

Liz, thank you :-) I figured nobody would figure out what the heck I was using that photo for unless I explained :-) Brooke

Comment from The Death

Excellent

Hi,

It is cute that he calls them 'wind'.

I like the rhyming here in aabb form.


The wind is whooshing through the hills
as creatures huddle from its chills --
they huddle as the chill wind blows
and shiver as its raging grows.

You have two 'huddle' here.

It creates vivid images too and has musicality as well.

Best wishes,
Anupam

 Comment Written 21-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 21-Jan-2014

Thanks so much, Anumpam :-) Brooke

Comment from Tomes Johnston

Excellent

Sawyer is back on centre stage. This is another beautiful poem from the author in this piece. This brings home to the reader the joy of life as seen from a child's perspective.

 Comment Written 21-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 21-Jan-2014

Tomes, thank you so much :-) Brooke

reply by Tomes Johnston on 24-Jan-2014

My pleasure.

Comment from TELLER OF TALES

Excellent

Excellent rhyming piece by the author, this one is very tender and amusing, every time this reader reads such wonderful pieces it lightens up the day, it is very well constructed, and coordinated, the writer knows how to use her words very well.....The Teller of tales...

 Comment Written 21-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 21-Jan-2014

Teller of Tales, thank you so much :-) Brooke

Comment from Connie C

Excellent

After reading your author's notes, I can sure see how you were inspired to write a poem about the wind. I love how you personify the wind and also the imagery you provide with the wind "whooshing through the hills." Lovely poem--delightful picture!
Connie

 Comment Written 21-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 21-Jan-2014

Connie, thank you so much :-) Brooke

Comment from NightWriter

Excellent

The Wind is another outstanding set of rhyming quatrains. Perfectly written and beautifully stated, how true it is. A cold wicked wind from the north it is.

 Comment Written 21-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 21-Jan-2014

Steve, thank you so much :-) Brooke

Comment from Roxanna Andrews

Excellent

Really well done as always and very cute. It is fun to hear what kids name things. Funny that he would come up with 'wind' for fans. Very clever little boy. =} Rox

 Comment Written 21-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 21-Jan-2014

Rox, thank you so much :-) Brooke

Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep

Excellent

Your poetry has an extra dimension with the personal influence of the adventures of Sawyer. It makes it take on the feeling of a diary almost. I enjoyed your quatrains about the wind. Giddy

 Comment Written 21-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 21-Jan-2014

Giddy, thanks so much :-) Brooke

Comment from Amsterdam

Exceptional

Like a storm
Wind goes round
Warm of warm
Cold some found

Youth.......

Are born
Eyes....
Look around

A world..
Unwarned

Somethings are found.
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Hardware stores..
Even a man's toy store.

Be well
Am

 Comment Written 20-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 21-Jan-2014

Am, thank you so much for your poetic response to my poem and for your generous sixth star :-) Brooke