The Wind
rhyming quatrains169 total reviews
Comment from MissMerri
I'm sure there are a lot of people across the country wishing along with the Fox and Hare for some of the bitter winds to cease. This is incredibly well done, with perfect meter and rhymes and so many in the 'ill family. That was impressive! (I was also impressed that Sawyer is already talking, but considering who his grandmother is, I shouldn't be surprised he has a way with words. Hopefully, he will join FanStory soon and we can enjoy his poetry as well.) I do get sidetracked, but Sawyer is already world famous and such a captivating subject to observe. I'm so glad you've shared him with us as he's growing up. Your poetry is enriched by his adorable photos.
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2014
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I'm sure there are a lot of people across the country wishing along with the Fox and Hare for some of the bitter winds to cease. This is incredibly well done, with perfect meter and rhymes and so many in the 'ill family. That was impressive! (I was also impressed that Sawyer is already talking, but considering who his grandmother is, I shouldn't be surprised he has a way with words. Hopefully, he will join FanStory soon and we can enjoy his poetry as well.) I do get sidetracked, but Sawyer is already world famous and such a captivating subject to observe. I'm so glad you've shared him with us as he's growing up. Your poetry is enriched by his adorable photos.
Comment Written 21-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2014
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Thanks so much, Adonna :-) At twenty months he should know a dozen or so words according to the pediatricians. He has a vocabulary of 400 or so words, including phrases. His father is a dawdler. When they are going out and Dada is taking too long he will say - Come on, hurry up. LOL The other day when the dog next door was barking he pointed to their yard and said Puppy annoying :-) So yes, he is as smart as he is cute :-) Brooke
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Wow! He really is an amazing little boy. He is not even two and is speaking in sentences. "Annoying!!!" Oh my! he is beyond precocious. I can't wait for that first poem... probably next year if not sooner. :p
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Today he had music class with three other little ones. At the end of class he said goodbye to each one by name. LOL It's nice he's using his vocabulary to be polite :-)
Comment from goompa
Very enjoyable as usual Brooke. The wind chill here is currently about 15 below zero. When it happens, I'm drawn to the couch a;bout 4 feet from a roaring fireplace. Keep Sawyer warm!
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2014
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Very enjoyable as usual Brooke. The wind chill here is currently about 15 below zero. When it happens, I'm drawn to the couch a;bout 4 feet from a roaring fireplace. Keep Sawyer warm!
Comment Written 21-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2014
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goompa, thank you so much :-) I'm watching the snow fall down and thanking my lucky stars for central heating :-) Brooke
Comment from Bina1
I'll bet he was delighted with all the motion and air flowing! Is it just the words you chose or is it the pattern of the lines that makes this poem seem so distinct? Is it a certian kind? It is very nice!
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2014
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I'll bet he was delighted with all the motion and air flowing! Is it just the words you chose or is it the pattern of the lines that makes this poem seem so distinct? Is it a certian kind? It is very nice!
Comment Written 21-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2014
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This poem is just rhyming quatrains, not a particular form. Thanks so much, Bina :-) Brooke
Comment from ravenblack
Just hope old man wind believes in breath mints. There is no use in fighting wind as none can outrun it. Someday Sawyer will fight the wind with a kite.
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2014
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Just hope old man wind believes in breath mints. There is no use in fighting wind as none can outrun it. Someday Sawyer will fight the wind with a kite.
Comment Written 21-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2014
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ravenblack, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from jaded831
Excellent rhyme and a timely message, since it's winter up here in the northeast. I count the days till spring, I can relate with your theme. I can visualize the poor animals, and I sympathize.
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2014
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Excellent rhyme and a timely message, since it's winter up here in the northeast. I count the days till spring, I can relate with your theme. I can visualize the poor animals, and I sympathize.
Comment Written 21-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2014
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Jaded, thank you so much :-) Yes, as I watch the snow falling and falling, I dream of spring too :-) Brooke
Comment from Jeanie Mercer
I like the personification of "Wind" here, and notice you capitalized it when you used it that way. Those careful details add pleasure to a reading experience. Mark, our oldest son, used to love windmills when he was a baby and just went wild pointing them out to us when we drove in the country. Sawyer knows how to be happy over little things. Love, Jeanie
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2014
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I like the personification of "Wind" here, and notice you capitalized it when you used it that way. Those careful details add pleasure to a reading experience. Mark, our oldest son, used to love windmills when he was a baby and just went wild pointing them out to us when we drove in the country. Sawyer knows how to be happy over little things. Love, Jeanie
Comment Written 21-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2014
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Jeanie, isn't it great when kids get that enthused? Sawyer goes crazy every time they go driving because he loves pointing out every bus he sees. LOL How long has it been since you got excited about seeing a bus pass by? ;-) Thanks so much :-) Brooke
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A big part of the fun of watching a child grow up is seeing him enjoy those simple experiences.
Comment from 3boysrule
Brooke, I like how you personified the wind. I really can never say anything critical on your poems - they are ALWAYS awesome. I do think the pics of Sawyer are wonderful. Miranda Signore, takes the perfect pictures of him! They inspire me, too!
Dee
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2014
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Brooke, I like how you personified the wind. I really can never say anything critical on your poems - they are ALWAYS awesome. I do think the pics of Sawyer are wonderful. Miranda Signore, takes the perfect pictures of him! They inspire me, too!
Dee
Comment Written 21-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2014
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Thanks so much, Dee. I am so proud of my daughter's photography :-) Brooke
Comment from robina1978
Now I understand how your poem connects with Sawyer. When I first read it I thought it was about you and the cold winds, I think, you still have.
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2014
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Now I understand how your poem connects with Sawyer. When I first read it I thought it was about you and the cold winds, I think, you still have.
Comment Written 21-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2014
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The poem is about the cold winds - the photo just inspired it. :-) Thanks so much, Ine. Brooke
Comment from onkughosh19
Full of vivid imagery this ia a lovely poem.His poem begins well " The wind is whooshing through the hills..........and shiver as its raging grows" Love the lines "But wind just puffs its chest ........of boisterous and blust'ry sound".THe last para is written very well too.
THe title is great and the photo endearing.
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2014
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Full of vivid imagery this ia a lovely poem.His poem begins well " The wind is whooshing through the hills..........and shiver as its raging grows" Love the lines "But wind just puffs its chest ........of boisterous and blust'ry sound".THe last para is written very well too.
THe title is great and the photo endearing.
Comment Written 21-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2014
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onkughosh, thank you so very much :-) Brooke
Comment from heyjude
Brooke, living in Oklahoma I can say the poor animals
and people do suffer from the bitter wind when it
blows. Well done as always. You are always thinking
of something different. That Sawyer is quite an
inspiration!!!
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2014
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Brooke, living in Oklahoma I can say the poor animals
and people do suffer from the bitter wind when it
blows. Well done as always. You are always thinking
of something different. That Sawyer is quite an
inspiration!!!
Comment Written 21-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2014
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Judy, thanks so much :-) Brooke
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You're welcome!!! Judy
