The Wind
rhyming quatrains169 total reviews
Comment from michaelcahill
I love the action in this piece. It is in constant motion. The wind is in pursuit and everything is on the run. I have one little suggestion to earn my keep for the year probably. How about "biting" instead of "bitter" in the last line? Not bad, one word in six months of reviewing. Hahaha. Not my fault you are that good!! mikey
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2014
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I love the action in this piece. It is in constant motion. The wind is in pursuit and everything is on the run. I have one little suggestion to earn my keep for the year probably. How about "biting" instead of "bitter" in the last line? Not bad, one word in six months of reviewing. Hahaha. Not my fault you are that good!! mikey
Comment Written 22-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2014
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Mikey, thank you so much for your feedback. Perhaps it is because we've been suffering through so much snow and cold this winter, but I just naturally think of it as bitter cold. LOL :-) Brooke
Comment from Kingsland
You're such a damn good poet. I so enjoy these uplifting poems that you write. This poem about the wind is brilliant and just great poetic verve. This is a six star piece of poetic art all the way. Keep on writing and I'll keep on reading... john
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2014
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You're such a damn good poet. I so enjoy these uplifting poems that you write. This poem about the wind is brilliant and just great poetic verve. This is a six star piece of poetic art all the way. Keep on writing and I'll keep on reading... john
Comment Written 22-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2014
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Thank you so much, John - I truly appreciate the supportive comments and generous sixth star :-) Brooke
Comment from CowboyToo
Good rhyming and meter. You tell a compelling story in short succinct lines. The use of old English -"E're" etc. might not work in some other places, but they seem natural here.
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2014
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Good rhyming and meter. You tell a compelling story in short succinct lines. The use of old English -"E're" etc. might not work in some other places, but they seem natural here.
Comment Written 22-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2014
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Cowboy Too, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from l.raven
OH Brooke, this is a wonderful children's poem...and Sawyer is so happy looking at all these fans...wow!!!what a great picture...I love this...Luff Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2014
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OH Brooke, this is a wonderful children's poem...and Sawyer is so happy looking at all these fans...wow!!!what a great picture...I love this...Luff Linda xxoo
Comment Written 22-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2014
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Linda, thanks so much :-) Brooke
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you are so welcome Brooke,,,xxoo
Comment from livelylinda
Brooke: it is such a delight to watch our little ones express their excitement over what we find as common phenomenon. They are so excited. . .makes me wish that I could be so simply entertained! Great rhyming poem here. Linda
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2014
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Brooke: it is such a delight to watch our little ones express their excitement over what we find as common phenomenon. They are so excited. . .makes me wish that I could be so simply entertained! Great rhyming poem here. Linda
Comment Written 22-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2014
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Linda, thank you so very much for your gracious comments and generous sixth star :-) Brooke
Comment from nancyjam
Great personification of wind.
Nice use of alliteration "wind/whooshing"
and "boisterous/blust'ry"
Wonderful descriptive images
excellent use of enjambment for smooth
flow.
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2014
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Great personification of wind.
Nice use of alliteration "wind/whooshing"
and "boisterous/blust'ry"
Wonderful descriptive images
excellent use of enjambment for smooth
flow.
Comment Written 21-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2014
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Nancy, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Maria C.
Isn't it wonderful to see a child notice the little things we take for granted. I like the personification of wind and noticed the alliteration of wind/whoooshing, boisterous/blust'ry,& words/will/wind. Good use of consonance throughout. Also nice enjambment.
Hope that fox and hare find a nice warm spot.
Hugs,
Maria C. :)
PS. Thank you for sharing your pictures with us. Sawyer is really growing fast.
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2014
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Isn't it wonderful to see a child notice the little things we take for granted. I like the personification of wind and noticed the alliteration of wind/whoooshing, boisterous/blust'ry,& words/will/wind. Good use of consonance throughout. Also nice enjambment.
Hope that fox and hare find a nice warm spot.
Hugs,
Maria C. :)
PS. Thank you for sharing your pictures with us. Sawyer is really growing fast.
Comment Written 21-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2014
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Maria, thanks so much. Yes, he is growing so fast it makes my head spin :-) Brooke
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It is hard to believe my oldest grandchild is 14. Seems he should only be 8 or 9. It has been a fast 14 years. Hold on tight to these years.
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I sure know what you mean. My children are both over 30 and I swear I was still changing their diapers and tying their shoes a few weeks ago. LOL
Comment from Jumbo J
Hi Brooke,
a very lyrical melody blows this poem right on course to another wonderfully rhymed poem ... to read your poems out loud brings the true value of its meaning alive ... I guess I'm the turtle; doesn't matter what weather hits me, I just retreat into my shell.
Love that we all get so much joy out of this special little fellow (Sawyer)... classic.
With our thoughts we create,
a reason to the rhyme,
James xx
you know you're always on an exceptional level, and so do we; sorry I don't show that enough.
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2014
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Hi Brooke,
a very lyrical melody blows this poem right on course to another wonderfully rhymed poem ... to read your poems out loud brings the true value of its meaning alive ... I guess I'm the turtle; doesn't matter what weather hits me, I just retreat into my shell.
Love that we all get so much joy out of this special little fellow (Sawyer)... classic.
With our thoughts we create,
a reason to the rhyme,
James xx
you know you're always on an exceptional level, and so do we; sorry I don't show that enough.
Comment Written 21-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2014
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Thank you so much, James :-) Brooke
Comment from in777wr#
This was a well written poem. Yes, today the wind here was pretty boisterous. LOL. I loved the personification of wind in this poem. It looks like Sawyer was having a good time. Nicely written poem.
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2014
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This was a well written poem. Yes, today the wind here was pretty boisterous. LOL. I loved the personification of wind in this poem. It looks like Sawyer was having a good time. Nicely written poem.
Comment Written 21-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2014
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Arthur, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Spitfire
The wind chill factor--as weathermen say. It does lower the thermometer and spirits as well. Great personification of wind puffing its chest. boisterous and blust'ry, frigid cold, bitter air. That's when to stay inside and curl up with a good book and hot chocolate. :-)
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2014
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The wind chill factor--as weathermen say. It does lower the thermometer and spirits as well. Great personification of wind puffing its chest. boisterous and blust'ry, frigid cold, bitter air. That's when to stay inside and curl up with a good book and hot chocolate. :-)
Comment Written 21-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2014
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Spitfire, thank you so much :-) Brooke
