The Wind
rhyming quatrains169 total reviews
Comment from GWinterwin
Great poem Brooke, with another great picture of that little grandson. Your words make me cold as I think of a blizzard and the cold wind howling and the temperatures drop and the snow falls.
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2014
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Great poem Brooke, with another great picture of that little grandson. Your words make me cold as I think of a blizzard and the cold wind howling and the temperatures drop and the snow falls.
Comment Written 22-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2014
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GWinterwin, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Ben Colder
Looks like our Lowes here. Well done Sawyer, yet it is wind makers in a small way. Another nice flowing poem Brooke. You and Sawyer have blessed day.
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2014
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Looks like our Lowes here. Well done Sawyer, yet it is wind makers in a small way. Another nice flowing poem Brooke. You and Sawyer have blessed day.
Comment Written 22-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2014
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Thanks so much, Ben :-) Brooke
Comment from me_tudor
I love that story about Sawyer and how his picture applies to this poem. I loved the poem too and being in the middle of a windy wintery vortex, I truly appreciate it's message.
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2014
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I love that story about Sawyer and how his picture applies to this poem. I loved the poem too and being in the middle of a windy wintery vortex, I truly appreciate it's message.
Comment Written 22-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2014
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Me Tudor, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Sueellen11
Well done I your write on the wind and the picture is so cute al the wind Chinese and you little nan enthralled with them,, I gotta say I do not like the wind,, great write,,blessings sueellen
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2014
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Well done I your write on the wind and the picture is so cute al the wind Chinese and you little nan enthralled with them,, I gotta say I do not like the wind,, great write,,blessings sueellen
Comment Written 22-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2014
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sueelen, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from rhymelord
Dear Brooke,
Perfect metre and rhyme and catchy alliteration. (When are you going to give me something to criticise).
Regards
Reg
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2014
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Dear Brooke,
Perfect metre and rhyme and catchy alliteration. (When are you going to give me something to criticise).
Regards
Reg
Comment Written 22-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2014
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Reg, thank you, my frustrated friend. LOL :-) Brooke
Comment from Zue65
I just don't know how else will I comment or review your poems, there is nothing to say because they are perfect. Your work deserve to be in a different league, for our work will definitely look too elementary when pitted side by side against a poet of your calibre. You are a cream at the top and no one can take away that slot from you. God bless.
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2014
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I just don't know how else will I comment or review your poems, there is nothing to say because they are perfect. Your work deserve to be in a different league, for our work will definitely look too elementary when pitted side by side against a poet of your calibre. You are a cream at the top and no one can take away that slot from you. God bless.
Comment Written 22-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2014
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nassus, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Paddywack
Loved it, Brooke. Great choice of words and characters to bring the image of the chill wind to life. Did you write lines two and three to deliberately emphasise chill and huddle? Is this a technique you use often in your writing?
Thanks for sharing.
Paddy.
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2014
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Loved it, Brooke. Great choice of words and characters to bring the image of the chill wind to life. Did you write lines two and three to deliberately emphasise chill and huddle? Is this a technique you use often in your writing?
Thanks for sharing.
Paddy.
Comment Written 22-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2014
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Paddy, thank you so much. And yes, that was deliberate, though I know some readers on this site hate repetition and complain every time I do it. LOL :-) Brooke
Comment from mfowler
Wind is a brilliant topic, and it only needs moving air for inspiration. Go Sawyer. I've even written one myself. It only takes three quatrains of abab in iambic tetrameter to create a great mind picture. You've used action verbs to great effect to give the poem a great sense of movement. I love the fox motif 'running' through this and your use of enjambment on selected lines works well in keeping it moving smoothly.
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2014
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Wind is a brilliant topic, and it only needs moving air for inspiration. Go Sawyer. I've even written one myself. It only takes three quatrains of abab in iambic tetrameter to create a great mind picture. You've used action verbs to great effect to give the poem a great sense of movement. I love the fox motif 'running' through this and your use of enjambment on selected lines works well in keeping it moving smoothly.
Comment Written 22-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2014
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mfowler, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Dawn Munro
Oh, how adorable! But I'm feeling rather chilled at the moment! (LOL) I absolutely LOVE - "The wind is whooshing through the hills..." I would never have thought of using a word like whooshing, yet it's so descriptive!!! You have a marvelous sense of adventure, and imagination. :)
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2014
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Oh, how adorable! But I'm feeling rather chilled at the moment! (LOL) I absolutely LOVE - "The wind is whooshing through the hills..." I would never have thought of using a word like whooshing, yet it's so descriptive!!! You have a marvelous sense of adventure, and imagination. :)
Comment Written 22-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2014
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Thanks so much, Dawn - we have wind chills below zero here this morning, so I'm a bit chilled too. LOL Brooke :-)
Comment from krys123
Your use of your imagery and metaphor with the Fox and the hare captures the essence of the fleeting characters from the wind, which seems to grow and with the personification you used like a human blowing hard. An interesting concept which I enjoyed reading very much Brooke. I see Sawyers being captivated by the fans above him. Your use of that picture to explain the wind blowing makes it a fun picture complements the poem very much in a unique way. Thank you so much for sharing this with everyone including myself.
Alex/AK
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2014
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Your use of your imagery and metaphor with the Fox and the hare captures the essence of the fleeting characters from the wind, which seems to grow and with the personification you used like a human blowing hard. An interesting concept which I enjoyed reading very much Brooke. I see Sawyers being captivated by the fans above him. Your use of that picture to explain the wind blowing makes it a fun picture complements the poem very much in a unique way. Thank you so much for sharing this with everyone including myself.
Alex/AK
Comment Written 22-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2014
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Alex, thank you so much for your thoughtful reading of this poem :-) Brooke
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You are so sincerely welcome Brooke
