The Wind
rhyming quatrains169 total reviews
Comment from min_flowetry
i like this poem fairly well. i also love this picture attached. it was short and sweet and to the point. great poem.
to me it has great comparisons
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reply by the author on 21-Jan-2014
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i like this poem fairly well. i also love this picture attached. it was short and sweet and to the point. great poem.
to me it has great comparisons
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Comment Written 20-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2014
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min flowetry,thank you for your review. Since you say you like it "fairly" well and have given it a 4, can I ask which parts you would like to see improved? Brooke
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Where I'm from our lingo fairly well means I liked it alot I apologize for confusing you
Comment from RodG
This poem is fun to read aloud. It is almost a fable with its animal characters, but more Native American in its personification of Wind.
Good alliteration "boisterous" and "blustery."
I like the serious message, too, that one cannot evade bitter cold and wind in the winter. Nicely done, Brooke.
Rod
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2014
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This poem is fun to read aloud. It is almost a fable with its animal characters, but more Native American in its personification of Wind.
Good alliteration "boisterous" and "blustery."
I like the serious message, too, that one cannot evade bitter cold and wind in the winter. Nicely done, Brooke.
Rod
Comment Written 20-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2014
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Rod, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Maureen's Pen
Dear Brooke, Lovely work to read with such a light hearted message I enjoyed it. Cutie Pie looks to be having a blast at Home Depot. Great skillful work as always.
Thanks for sharing it.
Maureen
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Dear Brooke, Lovely work to read with such a light hearted message I enjoyed it. Cutie Pie looks to be having a blast at Home Depot. Great skillful work as always.
Thanks for sharing it.
Maureen
Comment Written 20-Jan-2014
Comment from PoeticXscape
This is good but the two sentences with huddle in one after the other were too similar. Half the poem you give wind a capital W as if it were a character. It is a natural element. The child will soon enough get bored of fans and find a new delight in another mundane object.
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2014
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This is good but the two sentences with huddle in one after the other were too similar. Half the poem you give wind a capital W as if it were a character. It is a natural element. The child will soon enough get bored of fans and find a new delight in another mundane object.
Comment Written 20-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2014
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PoeticXscape, thank you for your feedback. I am actually aware that wind is a natural element, but this is poetry. LOL
As always, I cannot reciprocate by reviewing something of yours because you have still not removed your muting of me. Brooke
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the mute option is available still and you replied to the review didn't you?
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I consider replying to reviews the polite thing to do :-)
Comment from mountainwriter49
Good Morning, Brooke
What a wonderful poem! I love the flow of it and admire your skillful use of enjambment within each of the stanzas. This adds to the upbeat flow of the read, much as the wind is unencumbered as it blows across the land. The last stanza rings oh, so true with this next Clipper/Vortex heading our way. We're already getting the wind here in the Valley and tonight and tomorrow, well, I'm going to pull a 'Brooke' and stay inside where it's warm and dry. Maybe I'll write about snow angels braving the wind rather than going out to make one.
A fun write and I wish I had a six. Please accept this virtual one: * * * * * *
Well done, my friend
Ray
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Good Morning, Brooke
What a wonderful poem! I love the flow of it and admire your skillful use of enjambment within each of the stanzas. This adds to the upbeat flow of the read, much as the wind is unencumbered as it blows across the land. The last stanza rings oh, so true with this next Clipper/Vortex heading our way. We're already getting the wind here in the Valley and tonight and tomorrow, well, I'm going to pull a 'Brooke' and stay inside where it's warm and dry. Maybe I'll write about snow angels braving the wind rather than going out to make one.
A fun write and I wish I had a six. Please accept this virtual one: * * * * * *
Well done, my friend
Ray
Comment Written 20-Jan-2014
Comment from CR Delport
Well, the Cute Little One is right. They do make wind :) Here where I stay, we have some terrible wind storms. Thank you for sharing another gem.
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2014
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Well, the Cute Little One is right. They do make wind :) Here where I stay, we have some terrible wind storms. Thank you for sharing another gem.
Comment Written 20-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2014
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CR, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Gungalo
The world will cower as Wind spills
its frigid cold 'mongst vales and hills,
for neither fox nor fleetest hare
will e'er outrun its bitter air.
Beautiful quatrains Brooke and quite a story of the Wind. I love your rhymes and the way they play amongst the words. Super photo too.
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2014
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The world will cower as Wind spills
its frigid cold 'mongst vales and hills,
for neither fox nor fleetest hare
will e'er outrun its bitter air.
Beautiful quatrains Brooke and quite a story of the Wind. I love your rhymes and the way they play amongst the words. Super photo too.
Comment Written 20-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2014
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Gungalo, thank you so much :-) Brooke
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Smile Brooke.
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Is there ever a moment when Sawyer ISN'T being adorable? :)
Another fun poem... love the thought of outrunning the wind, and the personification of wind puffing its chest.
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2014
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Is there ever a moment when Sawyer ISN'T being adorable? :)
Another fun poem... love the thought of outrunning the wind, and the personification of wind puffing its chest.
Comment Written 20-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2014
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Thank you so much, Phyllis. Miranda assures me he has his moments when he is a naughty nugget, but I think even then he is pretty darned adorable. LOL :-) Brooke
Comment from barbara.wilkey
What a beautiful poem about wind. I completely understand how and why it was inspired by this lovely little boy. I enjoyed reading your poem.
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2014
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What a beautiful poem about wind. I completely understand how and why it was inspired by this lovely little boy. I enjoyed reading your poem.
Comment Written 20-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2014
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Thank you so much, Barbara :-) Brooke
Comment from boxergirl
This is a nice rhyming poem about the wind.
Alliteration of wind, whooshing and boisterous and blust'ry and fox, fleetest. I also like the personification of the wind when it spills its frigid cold...
Good job. 8-)
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2014
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This is a nice rhyming poem about the wind.
Alliteration of wind, whooshing and boisterous and blust'ry and fox, fleetest. I also like the personification of the wind when it spills its frigid cold...
Good job. 8-)
Comment Written 20-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2014
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boxergirl, thank you so much :-) Brooke
