The Wind
rhyming quatrains169 total reviews
Comment from Ridley Williams
Hello Brooke,
The fox and the hair aren't the only ones that hope the raging wind will still, lol. I worked in ski areas, as a lift mechanic, for thirty years. I have a unique perspective on the attitude of winds and their effects, and your well expressed poem brings a truthful ring to the theme, with its wonderful enjambments and alliterations...a pleasure to read, well done. Have a great day, Bill
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2014
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Hello Brooke,
The fox and the hair aren't the only ones that hope the raging wind will still, lol. I worked in ski areas, as a lift mechanic, for thirty years. I have a unique perspective on the attitude of winds and their effects, and your well expressed poem brings a truthful ring to the theme, with its wonderful enjambments and alliterations...a pleasure to read, well done. Have a great day, Bill
Comment Written 20-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2014
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Bill, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Just Pete
Another very cute poem in perfect rhyme. Once again you have captured the thoughts of a small boy and his interpretation of what he sees and thinks. Another great addition to your wonderful collection.
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2014
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Another very cute poem in perfect rhyme. Once again you have captured the thoughts of a small boy and his interpretation of what he sees and thinks. Another great addition to your wonderful collection.
Comment Written 20-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2014
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Pete, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from beautyseeker
I really liked this a lot with a fine rythmic 8 syllable flow, everything was perfection, i just stumbled over the line:
of boisterous and blustr'y sound.
I know you have much expertise, so may not consider my view and I am thinking you are reading bois- ter- ous as 3 syllabes but in a rythmic flow it naturally reads bois-trous and thats where i stumbled.
If it was kept at bois-trous, you could have perhaps then put blustery( also ok in dictionary) for the 3 syllables which reads naturally. Anyway, they insist to explain reasons, that was that , also as adorable as the foto is, a comparison to fans would have been cool. ( no pun intended) not just countryside. Love, love and inspired by your work though! :)
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2014
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I really liked this a lot with a fine rythmic 8 syllable flow, everything was perfection, i just stumbled over the line:
of boisterous and blustr'y sound.
I know you have much expertise, so may not consider my view and I am thinking you are reading bois- ter- ous as 3 syllabes but in a rythmic flow it naturally reads bois-trous and thats where i stumbled.
If it was kept at bois-trous, you could have perhaps then put blustery( also ok in dictionary) for the 3 syllables which reads naturally. Anyway, they insist to explain reasons, that was that , also as adorable as the foto is, a comparison to fans would have been cool. ( no pun intended) not just countryside. Love, love and inspired by your work though! :)
Comment Written 20-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2014
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Thank you so so much, Beautyseeker, for your detailed feedback. I do indeed pronounce boisterous in three syllables. :-) Brooke
Comment from Allblockout
It is amazing how animals survive the winter,I have rabbits that hang around my house every winter in Canada and I don't know how they do it cause it is very cold up there,Great poem
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2014
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It is amazing how animals survive the winter,I have rabbits that hang around my house every winter in Canada and I don't know how they do it cause it is very cold up there,Great poem
Comment Written 20-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2014
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Allblockout, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
The three good stanzas in rhyming couplets have used good personification of the Wind. Good alliteration in 'boisterous and blust'ry' - 'Wind is whooshing' - a good poem inspired by Sawyer's love of ceiling fans in the supermarket - a good read - Regards Dorothy
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2014
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The three good stanzas in rhyming couplets have used good personification of the Wind. Good alliteration in 'boisterous and blust'ry' - 'Wind is whooshing' - a good poem inspired by Sawyer's love of ceiling fans in the supermarket - a good read - Regards Dorothy
Comment Written 20-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2014
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Dorothy, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from InterestingRon
Hi Brooke,
A striking poem - with a cute explanation.
When we lived in Africa, my little daughter could not say crocodile. She would point and say cup-of-tea! It must have confused a lot of people. LOL
Ron x
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2014
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Hi Brooke,
A striking poem - with a cute explanation.
When we lived in Africa, my little daughter could not say crocodile. She would point and say cup-of-tea! It must have confused a lot of people. LOL
Ron x
Comment Written 20-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2014
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Ron, what a cute story. Thank you :-) Brooke
Comment from ragamuffin
Wonderfully adorable accompanying photo. Truly enjoyable poem and I particularly like the description of the second stanza. Fits well wit this wicked winter.
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2014
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Wonderfully adorable accompanying photo. Truly enjoyable poem and I particularly like the description of the second stanza. Fits well wit this wicked winter.
Comment Written 20-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2014
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ragamuffin, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from allborn66
This is a delightful poem. You communicate the theme well. The word choice paints a vivid picture. The rhyming scheme enhances the piece.
Barbara
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2014
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This is a delightful poem. You communicate the theme well. The word choice paints a vivid picture. The rhyming scheme enhances the piece.
Barbara
Comment Written 20-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2014
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Barbara, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from kiwisteveh
Whereas my two boys when they were young seemed content with the explanation that they were helicopter which had crashed upside down through the roof!
I liked the continuing rhyme on 'hills' in the first two lines of each stanza.
Strangely, I am sitting here this morning waiting for the forecast remains of a tropical cyclone to bear down on us. NZ never gets actual cyclones (unlike where we were previously in NE Australia) but occasionally we are in the path of a dying one - this one promises to bring a great deal of WIND, but all calm so far - just a few rumbles of thunder and a burst of rain.
Steve
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2014
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Whereas my two boys when they were young seemed content with the explanation that they were helicopter which had crashed upside down through the roof!
I liked the continuing rhyme on 'hills' in the first two lines of each stanza.
Strangely, I am sitting here this morning waiting for the forecast remains of a tropical cyclone to bear down on us. NZ never gets actual cyclones (unlike where we were previously in NE Australia) but occasionally we are in the path of a dying one - this one promises to bring a great deal of WIND, but all calm so far - just a few rumbles of thunder and a burst of rain.
Steve
Comment Written 20-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2014
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LOL - amazing what we will tell children. LOL Thanks so much, and stay out of the wind! Brooke :-)
Comment from Preston McWhorter
Hi,Brooke :-)
You are number "uno" poet in my book. "The Wind" is an exceptionally beautiful poem, with great meter,and rhyme with a quatrain structure, an abcc rhyme scheme followed consistently. The figurative language and imagery is excellent.(frigid cold 'mongst vales and hills)
Preston
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2014
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Hi,Brooke :-)
You are number "uno" poet in my book. "The Wind" is an exceptionally beautiful poem, with great meter,and rhyme with a quatrain structure, an abcc rhyme scheme followed consistently. The figurative language and imagery is excellent.(frigid cold 'mongst vales and hills)
Preston
Comment Written 20-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2014
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Preston, thank you so much for your generous and gracious response to this poem :-) Brooke
