The Wind
rhyming quatrains169 total reviews
Comment from words
Love your lyrical write on the wind, Brooke.
Charming personification of nature.
I can relate to the hare and the fox ... have tried to outrun the wind a few times myself. LOL
I am with Sawyer, I love ceiling fans too.
Hugs,d
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2014
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Love your lyrical write on the wind, Brooke.
Charming personification of nature.
I can relate to the hare and the fox ... have tried to outrun the wind a few times myself. LOL
I am with Sawyer, I love ceiling fans too.
Hugs,d
Comment Written 20-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2014
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Thank you so much, Diane :-) He loves fans almost as much as elevator buttons - where do you stand on that one? LOL Brooke
Comment from kiwijenny
I love and look forward to your posts Brooke because you always say something worth saying in a fun way. And the pictures you post are so precious..............
Well done
God bless
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2014
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I love and look forward to your posts Brooke because you always say something worth saying in a fun way. And the pictures you post are so precious..............
Well done
God bless
Comment Written 20-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2014
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kiwijenny, thanks so much :-) Brooke
Comment from hobopoet
I cringed a little at the two contracted words here, but I think they work here because the overall tone of this poem reads like an old nursery rhyme, and the guys who wrote the old nursery rhymes were big softies when it came to contracted words.
So...the more I read this, the more I liked it. Good stuff. :)
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2014
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I cringed a little at the two contracted words here, but I think they work here because the overall tone of this poem reads like an old nursery rhyme, and the guys who wrote the old nursery rhymes were big softies when it came to contracted words.
So...the more I read this, the more I liked it. Good stuff. :)
Comment Written 20-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2014
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thank you for your thoughtful feedback, hobopoet :-) Brooke
Comment from angelface2
As ever, perfect rhyming and rhythm. I can see Sawyer almost blowing to make the fans move. The chill winds are still here in Mi. LOL Don't like them one bit! Miss Sally
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2014
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As ever, perfect rhyming and rhythm. I can see Sawyer almost blowing to make the fans move. The chill winds are still here in Mi. LOL Don't like them one bit! Miss Sally
Comment Written 20-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2014
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Miss Sally, thank you so much :-) As the snow is falling, I could not agree with you more! Brooke
Comment from paulah60
As always, perfect rhyme and rhythm. You have my vote for engaging one of my favourite tools: personifying.
'But Wind just puffs its chest and fills
its lungs to blow another round' (even though you haven't assigned the wind a gender).
I love that a small child will make that association (which is so obvious and so simple), when we adults would probably just think of the fan as blowing air around!
Nice work, Brooke.
Cheers
Paula
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2014
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As always, perfect rhyme and rhythm. You have my vote for engaging one of my favourite tools: personifying.
'But Wind just puffs its chest and fills
its lungs to blow another round' (even though you haven't assigned the wind a gender).
I love that a small child will make that association (which is so obvious and so simple), when we adults would probably just think of the fan as blowing air around!
Nice work, Brooke.
Cheers
Paula
Comment Written 20-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2014
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Paula, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Janie King
This child has such an awesome little mind and they learn so much at this age and his momma and daddy stimulate all of those moments of discovery. i could see the ceiling fan and knew what was intriguing him. The poem is great too. he will learn about hot and cold wind too. God loves you and so do i.
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2014
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This child has such an awesome little mind and they learn so much at this age and his momma and daddy stimulate all of those moments of discovery. i could see the ceiling fan and knew what was intriguing him. The poem is great too. he will learn about hot and cold wind too. God loves you and so do i.
Comment Written 20-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2014
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Janie, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Patrick G Cox
Hi Brooke,
From the weather weather reports I'me seeing here, it looks as if the cold will continue yet a while for your neck of the woods - ours may not start for a while longer ...
Nice poetic description of the icy blast bringing it to you though.
Patrick
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2014
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Hi Brooke,
From the weather weather reports I'me seeing here, it looks as if the cold will continue yet a while for your neck of the woods - ours may not start for a while longer ...
Nice poetic description of the icy blast bringing it to you though.
Patrick
Comment Written 20-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2014
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Patrick, thank you, my friend :-) Brooke
Comment from shortwerks
Another winner.
I felt this poem came into its own most strikingly in the last stanza.
So nice to read you again. Look forward to more.
Peace.
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2014
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Another winner.
I felt this poem came into its own most strikingly in the last stanza.
So nice to read you again. Look forward to more.
Peace.
Comment Written 20-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2014
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shortwerks, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Peter@Poole
Your joy at this darling boy's antics is palpable, Brooke, and Jinny would empathise. Beside neat rhyming, there's the insistent assonance of 'i' in so many words which gives one the shivers. My fav example of alliteration is Wind and whooshing, while there's an old-fashioned feel to your last two lines. I always approach your next offering with, "What will she be up to this time?" :-) Peter
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2014
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Your joy at this darling boy's antics is palpable, Brooke, and Jinny would empathise. Beside neat rhyming, there's the insistent assonance of 'i' in so many words which gives one the shivers. My fav example of alliteration is Wind and whooshing, while there's an old-fashioned feel to your last two lines. I always approach your next offering with, "What will she be up to this time?" :-) Peter
Comment Written 20-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2014
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Peter, thank you so very much, my friend. I have no idea what I'll be up to next as I am waiting for Sawyer's mom to post new pictures. LOL I appreciate your lovely sixth star. Brooke :-)
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But you get so many stars, sweetie!
Comment from Pearl Edwards
This is a good description of the wind blowing through, picking up speed and power as it continues through - 'mongst vales and hills -
Good rhyme and easy flow through the verses and cute picture to go with.
valda
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2014
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This is a good description of the wind blowing through, picking up speed and power as it continues through - 'mongst vales and hills -
Good rhyme and easy flow through the verses and cute picture to go with.
valda
Comment Written 20-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2014
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thank you, valda, for your thoughtful review :-) Brooke
