Heart Collector
Another one for the collection.43 total reviews
Comment from honeytree
Yes the art work is excellent for this poem and words.
A rejection here would be hard to take
The cruel way of torture would be intolerable.
honey tree
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2014
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Yes the art work is excellent for this poem and words.
A rejection here would be hard to take
The cruel way of torture would be intolerable.
honey tree
Comment Written 21-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2014
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Thank you very much, Nancy.
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Glad you liked the review.
Annie
Comment from michaelcahill
This is so good it's ridiculous. Wow. When I think of what a headache it is for me to try and write a regular sonnet and then I see this amazing piece I am just stunned. I love the content of this. I get the idea that you knew the outcome beforehand and hung around for morbid curiosity, which is something I would do! Okay, adding this form to my list of things today. No one said I wasn't foolish. mikey
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2014
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This is so good it's ridiculous. Wow. When I think of what a headache it is for me to try and write a regular sonnet and then I see this amazing piece I am just stunned. I love the content of this. I get the idea that you knew the outcome beforehand and hung around for morbid curiosity, which is something I would do! Okay, adding this form to my list of things today. No one said I wasn't foolish. mikey
Comment Written 20-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2014
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Mikey, as always, I'm grateful for the review, and especially grateful for the sixer and your kind words. Yes, you're right in that I knew the ending, but wanted to read the rest first. :)
Comment from allborn66
This is a wonderful poem. The rhyming scheme enhance the piece. The word choice paints a vivid picture. You communicate your theme well.
Barbara
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2014
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This is a wonderful poem. The rhyming scheme enhance the piece. The word choice paints a vivid picture. You communicate your theme well.
Barbara
Comment Written 20-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2014
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Thank you so much, Barbara. I appreciate it very much!
Comment from Selina Stambi
I'll end up stuffed and mounted, just another listed name
engraved and smugly counted on her crowded wall of shame .. a fabulous final couplet. Particularly appreciated 'wall of shame'.
I liked your sonnet, Marillion. The internal rhyme is well done and most effective.
The tone is almost casual, but bares the heart of the writer with all its intense anguish.
I don't think I've bumped into you before. Nice to meet you. :)
Sonali
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2014
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I'll end up stuffed and mounted, just another listed name
engraved and smugly counted on her crowded wall of shame .. a fabulous final couplet. Particularly appreciated 'wall of shame'.
I liked your sonnet, Marillion. The internal rhyme is well done and most effective.
The tone is almost casual, but bares the heart of the writer with all its intense anguish.
I don't think I've bumped into you before. Nice to meet you. :)
Sonali
Comment Written 20-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2014
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Thank you so much, Sonali. After a many-year respite from the site, I just came back about two weeks ago. Nice to meet you, too, and I appreciate the great review.
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Welcome back! Look forward to reading more. :)
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Thank you! Glad to be back!
Comment from PoeticXscape
The picture is nice but I quickly realised it was distracting. The poem has great potential. There is a lot of great wording used.
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2014
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The picture is nice but I quickly realised it was distracting. The poem has great potential. There is a lot of great wording used.
Comment Written 20-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2014
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Thank you very much, Xscape.
Comment from MM lives on :)
Hello poet...this indeed was a beaten heart as I see each line builds upon the subject matter...
Iambic Heptameter in the form of a sonnet, with internal rhyme in each line. - interesting format here..I am a musician by nature so I play my poetry by ear...free style I coin it...rhymes, metaphors, inner rhyme but number one thing is the cadence and if you can read aloud...well done
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2014
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Hello poet...this indeed was a beaten heart as I see each line builds upon the subject matter...
Iambic Heptameter in the form of a sonnet, with internal rhyme in each line. - interesting format here..I am a musician by nature so I play my poetry by ear...free style I coin it...rhymes, metaphors, inner rhyme but number one thing is the cadence and if you can read aloud...well done
Comment Written 20-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2014
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Thank you very much, Christopher. I've done some work as a lyricist, and love the process of merging the music with the words. Thank you for the great review.
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yes indeed it is a process my friend...first I start with my acoustic guitar then I listen to music without words..with piano..all built upon an original emotional feeling..than hope it still has a cadence or beat...check out my poem Irrevocable if you can..poetry it pays 98 cents and more :)
Comment from The Death
Hi David,
You are a master of these metrical forms. I enjoy reading sonnets very much.
Well, girls are like this only..heh-heh. Many of them treat their lovers as toys and 'love' is just a word for them.
These lines are so realistic:
but she intently teased me with a dangling shred of hope.
She said, "I'm just enjoying all the steps of knowing you."
You have just nailed down their trickery here(Is it biographical?) and is easy to connect with.
I haven't written a good sonnet yet, but reading yours will surely help me.
I enjoyed reading this one.
Anupam
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2014
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Hi David,
You are a master of these metrical forms. I enjoy reading sonnets very much.
Well, girls are like this only..heh-heh. Many of them treat their lovers as toys and 'love' is just a word for them.
These lines are so realistic:
but she intently teased me with a dangling shred of hope.
She said, "I'm just enjoying all the steps of knowing you."
You have just nailed down their trickery here(Is it biographical?) and is easy to connect with.
I haven't written a good sonnet yet, but reading yours will surely help me.
I enjoyed reading this one.
Anupam
Comment Written 20-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2014
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Thank you very much, my friend. It has some truth to it, but I'm much older and wiser now, so this isn't really the problem it used to be. I appreciate the review.
Comment from GWHARGIS
Though this poem was dark, I really think the picture took it to a whole other level. The way the narrator sounded tortured and seemed to accept this emotional death was sad. Nice imagery and the description of the "stabbing" was killer (no pun intended). Nicely done.
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2014
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Though this poem was dark, I really think the picture took it to a whole other level. The way the narrator sounded tortured and seemed to accept this emotional death was sad. Nice imagery and the description of the "stabbing" was killer (no pun intended). Nicely done.
Comment Written 20-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2014
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Thank you very much, GWHARGIS. I appreciate it.
Comment from Bryana
Hi my friend, are you still collecting girls?
I remember how you complained how mean girls
were with you, I was sorry I didn't have a daughter.
On the serious side I love your poem, as always
a master piece.
Have a wonderful week.
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2014
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Hi my friend, are you still collecting girls?
I remember how you complained how mean girls
were with you, I was sorry I didn't have a daughter.
On the serious side I love your poem, as always
a master piece.
Have a wonderful week.
Comment Written 20-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2014
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Hi, Bryana! Ah, no problems currently, but I always appreciate your wish for a daughter for me. Thank you, my friend!
Comment from Dawn Munro
Wow. I bow to the master. The sonnet is my favorite form (still, after many years), and you are obviously very skilled with the form.
This is dramatic, tense and perfectly penned as far as I see. I adored it! OUTSTANDING!
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2014
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Wow. I bow to the master. The sonnet is my favorite form (still, after many years), and you are obviously very skilled with the form.
This is dramatic, tense and perfectly penned as far as I see. I adored it! OUTSTANDING!
Comment Written 20-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2014
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Thank you so much, Dawn, for the sixer and for the very kind words. The sonnet is still my favorite, too. :)
