Thoughts
a rhyming Whitney159 total reviews
Comment from Adri7enne
Makes one wonder what it is aminals might think. Lovely photo. Artistic people in your family, Brooke! Lovely little ponder. I just saw the movie, "Her". It ponders the nature of consciousness. Seems to be a trend right now. I really enjoyed your poem.
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2014
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Makes one wonder what it is aminals might think. Lovely photo. Artistic people in your family, Brooke! Lovely little ponder. I just saw the movie, "Her". It ponders the nature of consciousness. Seems to be a trend right now. I really enjoyed your poem.
Comment Written 18-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2014
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Thanks so much, Adrienne :-) Brooke
Comment from Mastery
"Better when
they're wonderous,
our nagging frets excluding."
Hi, Brooke. So well said, indeed.
Negativity attempts to ruin productivity for sure. Bob
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"Better when
they're wonderous,
our nagging frets excluding."
Hi, Brooke. So well said, indeed.
Negativity attempts to ruin productivity for sure. Bob
Comment Written 18-Jan-2014
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thanks so much, Bob :-) Brooke
Comment from Merriweather
This is really a clever poem rhyming ponderous and wonderous and reversing the thought process from a negative to a positive. With 83 views do you also get 83 reviews? Excellent photograph, so clear. Well done adewpearl.
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This is really a clever poem rhyming ponderous and wonderous and reversing the thought process from a negative to a positive. With 83 views do you also get 83 reviews? Excellent photograph, so clear. Well done adewpearl.
Comment Written 18-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2014
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Merriweather, thank you so much :-) I get about 1 review for every 2 views. Brooke
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That must be fun!!! Getting all that mail.
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It is fun, but also time consuming in replying to reviews and reciprocating reviews :-)
Comment from Righteous Riter
This piece meets the criteria of the Whitney poem as the syllable count is correct and the piece has the correct number of lines. Good alliteration with when/weighted...when/wonderous. Good complimentary photo followed by a clear message.
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This piece meets the criteria of the Whitney poem as the syllable count is correct and the piece has the correct number of lines. Good alliteration with when/weighted...when/wonderous. Good complimentary photo followed by a clear message.
Comment Written 18-Jan-2014
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Thank you, Righteous Riter, for your thoughtful review. Brooke
Comment from Rondeno
How true! Once again, your simple but elegant turn of phrase weaves its magic, Brooke. Such a delightful idea for a poem, executed with understated poise.
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How true! Once again, your simple but elegant turn of phrase weaves its magic, Brooke. Such a delightful idea for a poem, executed with understated poise.
Comment Written 18-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2014
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Thank you so much, Michael :-) Brooke
Comment from GWinterwin
Good poem with very true words and a great picture to make it all complete. Our brooding can kill the sweetness of every day thoughts.
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Good poem with very true words and a great picture to make it all complete. Our brooding can kill the sweetness of every day thoughts.
Comment Written 18-Jan-2014
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GWinterwin, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from in777wr#
This was a wonderfully written poem. Good rhyming in this Whitney poem. It's good to have thoughts that is free of doubts or frets. Your message is clear. Nicely written.
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This was a wonderfully written poem. Good rhyming in this Whitney poem. It's good to have thoughts that is free of doubts or frets. Your message is clear. Nicely written.
Comment Written 18-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2014
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Thank you so much, Arthur :-) Brooke
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You're welcome, and have a blessed weekend.
Comment from words
Another Gem, Brooke.
I do agree ....brooding is seriously overrated.
You never see a baby or a dog brood .... that should tell us something. LOL
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Another Gem, Brooke.
I do agree ....brooding is seriously overrated.
You never see a baby or a dog brood .... that should tell us something. LOL
Comment Written 18-Jan-2014
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Thanks so much, Diane - I wonder what age they are when they first join us in our silly, useless brooding. :-) Brooke
Comment from rod007
Brooding thoughts are the worse as they are negative and create a sense of loss and forlorn hopes. Let us always exclude our silly nagging frets. Great message in this poem. Well done.
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Brooding thoughts are the worse as they are negative and create a sense of loss and forlorn hopes. Let us always exclude our silly nagging frets. Great message in this poem. Well done.
Comment Written 18-Jan-2014
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Thank you so much, Rod :-) Brooke
Comment from Donya Quijote
Stopping by again. The early Jan cold and snow has left my normally busy plate and bit empty so I'm a little bored and find myself dropping in on FS from time to time to see what's cluttering up my inbox. What a gem I found tonight! An excellent pairing of picture and poem. The poor kitty does look like she has a lot on her mind. Looks to me that she took a bit the burden from Atlas's shoulders that day. Cat do often look like that. Whenever I see it I can't help but wonder what it is they are thinking about. I even wish they could tell if they so chose to. Word choice is great for creating a heavy thinking feeling. Nice pairing of labial sound in ponderous and brooding. Nice rhyming with ponderous and wondrous. Nice proximate rhyme with brooding and excluding (I think it's a proximate rhyme). Love how the last line feels when said aloud. It rolls off the tongue nicely. I think we all have moments like this every now and again. Worthy of a six but alas I am only permitted to give you a five. Nevertheless, an outstanding poem, a whitney. I will have to investigate that form further. If it requires rhyme it's a form I can butcher until I get it right or until it drives me insane. Always a pleasure to read your poetry... By the way, who is Pixie? I don't think we've met until this night...
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Stopping by again. The early Jan cold and snow has left my normally busy plate and bit empty so I'm a little bored and find myself dropping in on FS from time to time to see what's cluttering up my inbox. What a gem I found tonight! An excellent pairing of picture and poem. The poor kitty does look like she has a lot on her mind. Looks to me that she took a bit the burden from Atlas's shoulders that day. Cat do often look like that. Whenever I see it I can't help but wonder what it is they are thinking about. I even wish they could tell if they so chose to. Word choice is great for creating a heavy thinking feeling. Nice pairing of labial sound in ponderous and brooding. Nice rhyming with ponderous and wondrous. Nice proximate rhyme with brooding and excluding (I think it's a proximate rhyme). Love how the last line feels when said aloud. It rolls off the tongue nicely. I think we all have moments like this every now and again. Worthy of a six but alas I am only permitted to give you a five. Nevertheless, an outstanding poem, a whitney. I will have to investigate that form further. If it requires rhyme it's a form I can butcher until I get it right or until it drives me insane. Always a pleasure to read your poetry... By the way, who is Pixie? I don't think we've met until this night...
Comment Written 18-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2014
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Thank you so much, Donya. Pixie is the shy introvert while Potato is the outgoing one who hangs out with Sawyer all the time, so yes, I do wonder what is making her look so pensive. :-) It is always great to hear from you :-) Brooke
