Phoenix Down
The Cycle of the Phoenix37 total reviews
Comment from Kenneth Schaal
I've heard the tale of the Phoenix countless times and ways, but it never sounded so good before. A dramatic read if it said nothing. Kenny
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2014
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I've heard the tale of the Phoenix countless times and ways, but it never sounded so good before. A dramatic read if it said nothing. Kenny
Comment Written 18-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2014
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Thanks so much, Kenny. I appreciate it. Yes, the tale has been told many times before, as has the application to a life, but it's still fun to do.
Comment from adewpearl
solid use of abcb rhyming with internal rhyme in the a and c lines
I have always liked the strong cadence produced by internal rhyme, and it definitely works here
nice alliteration in fall/fiery
vivid and compelling descriptive detail of the Phoenix
You capture the spirit of the Phoenix's resilience extremely well in excellent poetic form :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2014
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solid use of abcb rhyming with internal rhyme in the a and c lines
I have always liked the strong cadence produced by internal rhyme, and it definitely works here
nice alliteration in fall/fiery
vivid and compelling descriptive detail of the Phoenix
You capture the spirit of the Phoenix's resilience extremely well in excellent poetic form :-) Brooke
Comment Written 18-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2014
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Thanks so much, Brooke, for the great review. I appreciate you stopping by! :)
David
Comment from Bryana
What an amazing poem you've written,
I'm not surprised, of course, I have
yet to reasd a poem of yours I didn't
like. Please don't shred the wings of
crows, I really like them, they are
incredibly smart.
Have a wonderful weekend my friend.
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2014
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What an amazing poem you've written,
I'm not surprised, of course, I have
yet to reasd a poem of yours I didn't
like. Please don't shred the wings of
crows, I really like them, they are
incredibly smart.
Have a wonderful weekend my friend.
Comment Written 18-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2014
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Oh, Ana, thanks so much, my dear. I appreciate the sixer, and your kind words. I'll leave the crows alone, just for you.
Comment from vencedor
Beautiful thought.
iron will
unwavering hope
A very inspired writing.
congratulations
This is a great poem.
vencedor
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2014
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Beautiful thought.
iron will
unwavering hope
A very inspired writing.
congratulations
This is a great poem.
vencedor
Comment Written 18-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2014
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Thank you very much, vencedor!
Comment from Dawn Munro
This is simply breath-taking. The rhyme, internal, cadence, all of it, is spot-on. And what fabulous imagery! Oh, I can't imagine how this could ever be improved! (And I haven't a six!)
This is positively inspired writing, in my opinion, and inspirational!
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2014
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This is simply breath-taking. The rhyme, internal, cadence, all of it, is spot-on. And what fabulous imagery! Oh, I can't imagine how this could ever be improved! (And I haven't a six!)
This is positively inspired writing, in my opinion, and inspirational!
Comment Written 17-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2014
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Dawn, thank you so much, my friend. I really appreciate your very kind words and virtual sixer (which means the same to me). :)
Comment from Kingsland
The dawning of a Phoenix in the mind of thoughts
Morning arrives with fire in the sky of all who've wrought
Time goes by at a measured glancing blow
We stand back and contemplate what we think we know
For all is just a fantasy in the minds of some
Other find reality is the only way to run
We will build and we will destroy
The things that we've employed
We can only hope that life returns
In love that never falls or burns
The Phoenix of life is just our strife
Just keep your mind as sharp as a knife...
Just a few thoughts on your outstanding piece of poetic art.
this was a great work of art to have read and responded to... John
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2014
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The dawning of a Phoenix in the mind of thoughts
Morning arrives with fire in the sky of all who've wrought
Time goes by at a measured glancing blow
We stand back and contemplate what we think we know
For all is just a fantasy in the minds of some
Other find reality is the only way to run
We will build and we will destroy
The things that we've employed
We can only hope that life returns
In love that never falls or burns
The Phoenix of life is just our strife
Just keep your mind as sharp as a knife...
Just a few thoughts on your outstanding piece of poetic art.
this was a great work of art to have read and responded to... John
Comment Written 17-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2014
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John, that is a very unique and impressive review, and a pleasant surprise. Thank you for it, and especially the sixer.
Comment from kiwijenny
I crash and burn yet live to learn.....me too I can empathize .......
What if the Phoenix is arising from the ashes to be a published bird...working from home and loving it....I hope that for you and me too.
God bless
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2014
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I crash and burn yet live to learn.....me too I can empathize .......
What if the Phoenix is arising from the ashes to be a published bird...working from home and loving it....I hope that for you and me too.
God bless
Comment Written 17-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2014
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Jenny, that would be about the best reason to rise from the ashes that I can think of. Thank you for the great review AND image.
David
Comment from Mastery
Wow! Heeeeeee's back! LOL. Powerful and well written poetry, Marillion. \
"With eagle screams and armored dreams,
My re-ascent deprives my foes.
My living cause, with razor claws,
Will shred the wings of circling crows."
Using strong verbs always works, too. Bravo! Bob
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2014
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Wow! Heeeeeee's back! LOL. Powerful and well written poetry, Marillion. \
"With eagle screams and armored dreams,
My re-ascent deprives my foes.
My living cause, with razor claws,
Will shred the wings of circling crows."
Using strong verbs always works, too. Bravo! Bob
Comment Written 17-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2014
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Bob, as always, I appreciate it, my friend.
Comment from paulah60
Yet another brilliant piece of writing, not just for the perfect rhyme and meter, but the content: inasmuch as one can define the indefinable, you've captured the process of eternal renewal with such precision (it's certainly one that I can relate to). But our transcendental, skyward-looking brand of spirituality wants to deny the Phoenix experience, and too often, tries to depict what is essentially an important recurring process, as an event! No wonder the masses get discouraged.
What absolute soul food, this poem! I suspect you are going to be exhausting my sixes, David!
Cheers
Paula
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2014
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Yet another brilliant piece of writing, not just for the perfect rhyme and meter, but the content: inasmuch as one can define the indefinable, you've captured the process of eternal renewal with such precision (it's certainly one that I can relate to). But our transcendental, skyward-looking brand of spirituality wants to deny the Phoenix experience, and too often, tries to depict what is essentially an important recurring process, as an event! No wonder the masses get discouraged.
What absolute soul food, this poem! I suspect you are going to be exhausting my sixes, David!
Cheers
Paula
Comment Written 17-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2014
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Many thanks, Paula, for the investment of the sixer. I'll do my best to make sure it pays dividends, too! :) I really appreciate your exceedingly kind words, review, and confidence in me.
Comment from lancellot
This a is a great and well crafted poem. Your internal rhymes flow perfectly with concise meaning and signs of being forced. I also love the story of the Phoenix. Well done
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2014
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This a is a great and well crafted poem. Your internal rhymes flow perfectly with concise meaning and signs of being forced. I also love the story of the Phoenix. Well done
Comment Written 17-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2014
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Lancellot, I really appreciate your kind review.
