Leaving the Nest
A sonnet - entry for the Faith contest93 total reviews
Comment from maggieadams
Steve: this faith poem has stirred my senses as the word choices create a freeing of the soul . You use poetic devices such as alliteration and abab rhyme in describing the magnificent bald eagle. This poem is provocative and beautiful. It is a winner.
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Steve: this faith poem has stirred my senses as the word choices create a freeing of the soul . You use poetic devices such as alliteration and abab rhyme in describing the magnificent bald eagle. This poem is provocative and beautiful. It is a winner.
Comment Written 15-Jan-2014
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Maggie, thanks so much for the fine review and the six stars.
Steve
Comment from Ben Colder
I find the poem right on. The wording is good and the rhythm is good. The photo enhances and faith is present. Good luck in the contest. Blessings
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I find the poem right on. The wording is good and the rhythm is good. The photo enhances and faith is present. Good luck in the contest. Blessings
Comment Written 15-Jan-2014
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Thanks, ben.
Steve
Comment from TOMORAL
Love this form of a Shakespearean sonnet, it was like a waltz in my mind as I was reading it. The last line, the thrill of the flight gives me wings to remember that very moment when I took flight for the first time myself. Excellent!
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Love this form of a Shakespearean sonnet, it was like a waltz in my mind as I was reading it. The last line, the thrill of the flight gives me wings to remember that very moment when I took flight for the first time myself. Excellent!
Comment Written 15-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2014
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Thank you - glad you got the metaphor.
Steve
Comment from syndactl
G'day kiwisteveh,
This was truly a fantastic sonnet. You followed the form to a T, and the poem itself flowed effortlessly. The rhyme was consistent, but never felt forced. The story within the poem was inspirational and perfectly suited to the contest.
Truly fantastic job,
Syndactl
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G'day kiwisteveh,
This was truly a fantastic sonnet. You followed the form to a T, and the poem itself flowed effortlessly. The rhyme was consistent, but never felt forced. The story within the poem was inspirational and perfectly suited to the contest.
Truly fantastic job,
Syndactl
Comment Written 15-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2014
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Thank you - glad you enjoyed.
Steve
Comment from Dawn of Tomorrow
Oh so beautiful. Your picture pulled me in and then to read such a beautiful sonnet was a great pleasure. You did a great job with the theme and rhyme and meter. Good luck in the contest, very nice job
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Oh so beautiful. Your picture pulled me in and then to read such a beautiful sonnet was a great pleasure. You did a great job with the theme and rhyme and meter. Good luck in the contest, very nice job
Comment Written 15-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2014
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Thank you - glad you enjoyed.
Steve
Comment from TAB_that's me
This is a beautifully written sonnet and a great poem for the faith poetry contest. Good luck to you in the contest.
~Teresa`
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This is a beautifully written sonnet and a great poem for the faith poetry contest. Good luck to you in the contest.
~Teresa`
Comment Written 15-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2014
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Thank you - glad you enjoyed.
Steve
Comment from Marillion
Beautifully done, Steve, and an excellent use of enjambment. I also agree with your decision not to break the stanzas and couplet, as the piece carries itself as its own entity. Love the use of the word, "wraith", which of course hearkens me back to Lord of the Rings, my literary love. Well done!
David
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Beautifully done, Steve, and an excellent use of enjambment. I also agree with your decision not to break the stanzas and couplet, as the piece carries itself as its own entity. Love the use of the word, "wraith", which of course hearkens me back to Lord of the Rings, my literary love. Well done!
David
Comment Written 15-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2014
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Thanks, David - nothing scarier than those ring-wraiths!
Glad you enjoyed.
Steve
Comment from Domino 2
Though I am basically a traditionalist, I find the modern format of three separate quatrains and a couplet far easier to read than the old block format, Steve.
Anyway, the content is the main thing, and yours is tops in this sonnet.
Original and vivid descriptions of the fledgling eagle tasting freedom and thrills for the first time.
Top rhyme and iambic pentameter.
Excellent!
Cheers, Ted
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2014
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Though I am basically a traditionalist, I find the modern format of three separate quatrains and a couplet far easier to read than the old block format, Steve.
Anyway, the content is the main thing, and yours is tops in this sonnet.
Original and vivid descriptions of the fledgling eagle tasting freedom and thrills for the first time.
Top rhyme and iambic pentameter.
Excellent!
Cheers, Ted
Comment Written 15-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2014
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Thanks, Ted.
You are probably right about the format but I found this piece didn't 'break' easily...
Steve
Comment from skye
To have to leave the nest and literally fly.... what a wonderful poem, describing the thoughts, and success.
I enjoyed the rhymes, the imagery, and the joy of flying.
My wings unfurl - and, oh, the thrill of flight.
Wonderful.
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To have to leave the nest and literally fly.... what a wonderful poem, describing the thoughts, and success.
I enjoyed the rhymes, the imagery, and the joy of flying.
My wings unfurl - and, oh, the thrill of flight.
Wonderful.
Comment Written 15-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2014
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Thanks, Skye - glad you enjoyed.
Steve
Comment from Ridley Williams
Hello Steve,
Your poem speaks to me of insecurities in life that grow from our humble beginnings. I appreciate the way you expand the piece in a crescendo of thoughts and exposures that build confidence in the muse, until that fateful day...he realizes he can achieve his dreams, and flies away. Wonderful thought and delivery in this piece...best wishes, Bill
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Hello Steve,
Your poem speaks to me of insecurities in life that grow from our humble beginnings. I appreciate the way you expand the piece in a crescendo of thoughts and exposures that build confidence in the muse, until that fateful day...he realizes he can achieve his dreams, and flies away. Wonderful thought and delivery in this piece...best wishes, Bill
Comment Written 15-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2014
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Thanks, Bill - glad you enjoyed this metaphorical coming of age....
Steve
