Leaving the Nest
A sonnet - entry for the Faith contest93 total reviews
Comment from Selina Stambi
but spirit feels the tug of ancient dreams .. love the line
My wings unfurl - and, oh, the thrill of flight .. and this
Beautiful, Steve ... a different take on faith - but faith nonetheless.
No sixes left - darn - here's a pretend one ...xxxxxx (6)
I hope this wins. It's quite spectacular - I've read a lot about eagles - they're fascinating creatures.
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2014
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but spirit feels the tug of ancient dreams .. love the line
My wings unfurl - and, oh, the thrill of flight .. and this
Beautiful, Steve ... a different take on faith - but faith nonetheless.
No sixes left - darn - here's a pretend one ...xxxxxx (6)
I hope this wins. It's quite spectacular - I've read a lot about eagles - they're fascinating creatures.
Comment Written 16-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2014
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Sonali, thanks for the virtual six and the kind words - I suspect not a winner this time but fingers crossed anyway.
Steve
PS Good to read about your trip to Hawaii in Sharyn's piece - sounds like you enjoyed yourselves.
Comment from Mastery
Love the entire poem, Steve.:
"A sudden joy I drink
and fear is answered with a leap of faith
that gives me strength to claim what's mine by right.
My wings unfurl - and, oh, the thrill of flight"
Bravo, Bob
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2014
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Love the entire poem, Steve.:
"A sudden joy I drink
and fear is answered with a leap of faith
that gives me strength to claim what's mine by right.
My wings unfurl - and, oh, the thrill of flight"
Bravo, Bob
Comment Written 16-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2014
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Thanks, Bob
Steve
Comment from Tonulak
Bravo! This was a beautiful sonnet of aspiration and attainment and the transition which is passed to achieve it. Well done--Ted
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Bravo! This was a beautiful sonnet of aspiration and attainment and the transition which is passed to achieve it. Well done--Ted
Comment Written 16-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2014
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Thank you, Ted - glad you enjoyed.
Steve
Comment from tfawcus
Amazing poem! Where have all the sixes gone? I was sideswiped by lines like "still to swell / with knowledge of the destiny they bear", "the tug of ancient dreams" and "Doubt that cloaked me like a wraith". Magnificent! You have made so much more of this than just a poem about eagles leaving the nest. The universality of your message is clear and wonderfully expressed. You have expressed the challenge, the fear, the doubt and then you finish with the cry of joy unleashed after that great leap of faith. Bravo!
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2014
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Amazing poem! Where have all the sixes gone? I was sideswiped by lines like "still to swell / with knowledge of the destiny they bear", "the tug of ancient dreams" and "Doubt that cloaked me like a wraith". Magnificent! You have made so much more of this than just a poem about eagles leaving the nest. The universality of your message is clear and wonderfully expressed. You have expressed the challenge, the fear, the doubt and then you finish with the cry of joy unleashed after that great leap of faith. Bravo!
Comment Written 16-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2014
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Thanks again, Tony.
I sometimes wonder if the universality of the message is clear - a fair few reviewers don't seem to see past the feathers.
Steve
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
'Leaving the Nest' is an extremely well-written and delightfully descriptive piece. Ready for my first flight, I'd feel close to heaven. It was a pleasure to review a work of this standard.
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2014
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'Leaving the Nest' is an extremely well-written and delightfully descriptive piece. Ready for my first flight, I'd feel close to heaven. It was a pleasure to review a work of this standard.
Comment Written 16-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2014
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Thank you - glad you enjoyed.
Steve
Steve, I certainly enjoyed it.
Best wishes, the Duchess
Comment from amahra
Oh, Shakespeare's sonnet. I should have known, because I could sense the steady rhythm as I read aloud. I love eagles and the art work you've chosen showing the eagle in flight instead of perched on a mountain top, is awesome.
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2014
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Oh, Shakespeare's sonnet. I should have known, because I could sense the steady rhythm as I read aloud. I love eagles and the art work you've chosen showing the eagle in flight instead of perched on a mountain top, is awesome.
Comment Written 16-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2014
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Thank you - glad you enjoyed.
Steve
Comment from Eternal Muse
Oh, that was a beautiful composition, Steve, and the sonnet form executed to perfection with your masterful pen. A gorgeous picture to accentuate your words. A very original entry into the faith contest, with lots of versatility.
Favorite lines:
Released at last from tyranny of shell,
I thrust into life's harsh, confusing glare.
My wings hang damp and useless, still to swell
with knowledge of the destiny they bear.
Good luck in the contest, blessings, Y.
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2014
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Oh, that was a beautiful composition, Steve, and the sonnet form executed to perfection with your masterful pen. A gorgeous picture to accentuate your words. A very original entry into the faith contest, with lots of versatility.
Favorite lines:
Released at last from tyranny of shell,
I thrust into life's harsh, confusing glare.
My wings hang damp and useless, still to swell
with knowledge of the destiny they bear.
Good luck in the contest, blessings, Y.
Comment Written 16-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2014
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Thanks, Yelena.
I appreciate the kind words and the six shiny stars. Yes I wanted to put out something a little different from most....
Steve
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Steve, what I like most about this is the double meaning I find. It can be taken literally, as a bird leaving its shell, growing, and learning to fly... or a human leaving the earthly body to fly free as a spirit.
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Steve, what I like most about this is the double meaning I find. It can be taken literally, as a bird leaving its shell, growing, and learning to fly... or a human leaving the earthly body to fly free as a spirit.
Comment Written 16-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2014
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Thanks, Phyllis
... or perhaps on a simpler level, a young person leaving home for the first time. I guess that is why poetry is popular - everybody can take their own meaning from it.
Steve
Comment from Tomes Johnston
There is striking imagery, both in the words and the picture of this beautiful poem. We all have top leave the nest at some stage or another.
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2014
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There is striking imagery, both in the words and the picture of this beautiful poem. We all have top leave the nest at some stage or another.
Comment Written 16-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2014
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Thank you - glad you enjoyed.
Steve
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I did indeed.
Comment from Winslow
Dear kiwisteveh,
A uplifting poem that soars like your great metaphor. For if we take flight and set our souls free, then live will become wonderful and fulfilling indeed.
Good luck in the contest. A very fine entry into the Faith Poetry contest.
Warm regards,
Winslow
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2014
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Dear kiwisteveh,
A uplifting poem that soars like your great metaphor. For if we take flight and set our souls free, then live will become wonderful and fulfilling indeed.
Good luck in the contest. A very fine entry into the Faith Poetry contest.
Warm regards,
Winslow
Comment Written 16-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2014
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Winslow, thanks for the kind words and the six shiny stars - much appreciated.
Steve
