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Comment from joelh605
Gayle! All this, and now Ella's is four star gourmet besides? And what a lovely coincidence that Brad, the hidden in plain sight one-in-a-million hit man, is part of the Ellas scene.
You're so smooth at doing this, too!
-Joel
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2014
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Gayle! All this, and now Ella's is four star gourmet besides? And what a lovely coincidence that Brad, the hidden in plain sight one-in-a-million hit man, is part of the Ellas scene.
You're so smooth at doing this, too!
-Joel
Comment Written 10-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2014
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Ella's is the place to be, for sure, lol. Now Brad's in a bit of a pickle. He doesn't 'know' Ella or Terry, but in his old body, they recognized him as a regular. Now Al knows him better, since in his old incarnation, he preferred the bar to a table, but he never really became friends. Truly, it must be an eerie feeling to move among people you know but they don't recognize you.
Thanks for the read and review,
Hugs,
Gayle
Comment from TheWriteTeach
Aha! I KNEW we were going to see more of the old crew! I can't tell yet if they will have major parts (I'm thinking they will) or if they will make cameo appearances like Ella's just did. It's a nice thread that runs through your books; a solid connection. I'm starting to think that perhaps those sisters are a magnet for trouble.
Another excellent chapter. Again, dialogue is very believable, the flow is excellent, and it held my interest.
One question. Why have Julia send Edward back to the clinic to inform Dr. Parisi where she and Brad were, when they have cell phones? If it was a rouse to get rid of Edward so she could be alone with Brad, I didn't perceive it that way.
Love this chapter, especially because they are going to Ella's!
Suz
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2014
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Aha! I KNEW we were going to see more of the old crew! I can't tell yet if they will have major parts (I'm thinking they will) or if they will make cameo appearances like Ella's just did. It's a nice thread that runs through your books; a solid connection. I'm starting to think that perhaps those sisters are a magnet for trouble.
Another excellent chapter. Again, dialogue is very believable, the flow is excellent, and it held my interest.
One question. Why have Julia send Edward back to the clinic to inform Dr. Parisi where she and Brad were, when they have cell phones? If it was a rouse to get rid of Edward so she could be alone with Brad, I didn't perceive it that way.
Love this chapter, especially because they are going to Ella's!
Suz
Comment Written 09-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2014
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It's so funny, but true, all my fans love Ella's, the dogs, and even Chef, but the girls really set the tone. I'm not sure, but I think this just might gear toward heroines and use the guys for support. When I go for the final edit, I might pare down the number of peripheral characters. I need them to get started, but by the time a real story is working, I'm seeing a clear story.
Well, Julia is somewhat of a princess, and relies on Edward to take care of the small stuff for her. Plus, she wants to see Brad alone. I think she's smitten!
Hugs and big thanks,
Gayle
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Once again I enjoyed reading your post. It wasn't too confusing changing the name to Julie. I see they are going to Ella's. I think that's a good choice.
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2014
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Once again I enjoyed reading your post. It wasn't too confusing changing the name to Julie. I see they are going to Ella's. I think that's a good choice.
Comment Written 17-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2014
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Hey Barb, a couple of the readers said they thought keeping Hali might cause a problem later and so, now she's Julia.
Thanks so much for reading along and for the fine rating.
Hugs,
Gayle
Comment from Liz Dunbee
I think Julia's new home is beautiful. I love the description of the views and the gardens. They seem to be very important to her. Brad and Julia are getting along famously. The dialogue is excellent and the chapter has a natural flow.
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2014
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I think Julia's new home is beautiful. I love the description of the views and the gardens. They seem to be very important to her. Brad and Julia are getting along famously. The dialogue is excellent and the chapter has a natural flow.
Comment Written 17-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2014
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Hi Liz, glad you liked this one. Kind of had to get it out and I'm glad you like it.
Thanks so much for the fine review,
Gayle
Comment from Rdfrdmom2
Gayle:
What the heck is a lanai (a bathroom, maybe?)? Anyway,
I am on one of my sporadic visits here but will make
every effort to read the chapters I've missed. I had
already begun to wonder when Ella's was going to come
into play.
Happy New Year.
Love,
Jan
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2014
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Gayle:
What the heck is a lanai (a bathroom, maybe?)? Anyway,
I am on one of my sporadic visits here but will make
every effort to read the chapters I've missed. I had
already begun to wonder when Ella's was going to come
into play.
Happy New Year.
Love,
Jan
Comment Written 17-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2014
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Hey Jan and Happy New Year to you, full of blessings and love.
A lanai is another word for patio or porch. Dont worry about writing a review if the bucks are gone. Just get caught up so you can get the gist of what's happening now.
So good to see you, my friend,
Hugs,
Gayle
Comment from lludlow
This is nice and easy. We get to see the characters in action and it's nice to take it down a notch every once in a while - let the reader breathe.
That said, I only have two specific points. In para. 8, Julia is "fascinated" by the entire unit. Maybe use a different word? I don't know, "fascinated" just seems a bit much.
Also, in the next paragraph you say the view is "breathtaking" but then you don't really describe it. Maybe describe the view, then you don't have to say that it's breathtaking?
Just my thoughts. Great work!
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2014
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This is nice and easy. We get to see the characters in action and it's nice to take it down a notch every once in a while - let the reader breathe.
That said, I only have two specific points. In para. 8, Julia is "fascinated" by the entire unit. Maybe use a different word? I don't know, "fascinated" just seems a bit much.
Also, in the next paragraph you say the view is "breathtaking" but then you don't really describe it. Maybe describe the view, then you don't have to say that it's breathtaking?
Just my thoughts. Great work!
Comment Written 17-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2014
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Great ideas, and yes, fascinated is a bit much. I just love that word, lol. And yes, especially when I'm first writing, I tend to do a bit more telling than I like.
So wonderful to see you again and thanks for the super review,
Hugs,
Gayle
Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep
That sounds like a lovely apartment and I enjoyed inspecting it with you. Some of the details were most interesting. This was a light chapter which gave the reader a welcome interlude of romance. Giddy
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2014
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That sounds like a lovely apartment and I enjoyed inspecting it with you. Some of the details were most interesting. This was a light chapter which gave the reader a welcome interlude of romance. Giddy
Comment Written 16-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2014
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Oh, it's for sale, lol. I got this one off the MLS, it's a real place - changed the address and all, but right in the neighborhood. Absolutely gorgeous, and only $750K. Gee, let's scoop up a couple while they're on sale, lol.
I think you're like me, in that you don't want some 'bare bones' description that leaves you wondering what color hair or eyes the hero has. Reminds me of Daphne du Maurier's novel, Rebecca. Except for the identifier of Mrs. de Winter, she had no name, no eye color and seemingly no HAIR! I was most disappointed, so I made up my own.
Ooph, who put a nickle in me?
Thanks so much for the great comments
Hugs,
Gayle
Comment from bookishfabler
Nice intro to Ella's.
Since we first met, you have had a battle with Evil Eddie. LOL
The unit was offered furnished, making it move-in ready, another strong plus for Julia.
She read the specs quickly, fascinated by the entire unit. It was available for a six month lease or sale.
I guess it gives me something to point out, since I rarely find nits and spags.
She wondered (-it) if could be the ocean.
hugs Heidi
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2014
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Nice intro to Ella's.
Since we first met, you have had a battle with Evil Eddie. LOL
The unit was offered furnished, making it move-in ready, another strong plus for Julia.
She read the specs quickly, fascinated by the entire unit. It was available for a six month lease or sale.
I guess it gives me something to point out, since I rarely find nits and spags.
She wondered (-it) if could be the ocean.
hugs Heidi
Comment Written 15-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2014
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IF!! Good grief, that wasn't EE, that was me, lol. Yeah, EE hates my computer, must have something to do with Reginald. He's always giving me fits. I've adjusted, finally.
Always so good to see you, sweetie, have a great day and thanks so much,
Hugs,
Gayle
Comment from Ric Myworld
They work quick and the story's pace is too. Just the way I like things. Thanks for another great chapter and I'm looking forward to many more.
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2014
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They work quick and the story's pace is too. Just the way I like things. Thanks for another great chapter and I'm looking forward to many more.
Comment Written 15-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2014
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One more slow one, Rick, and then we jet off. I think you're going to like it.
Thanks for the great review and comments,
Gayle
Comment from Sylvia Page
I didn't want to mention it but thought that keeping "Hali" would have jeopardized her new found freedom. Glad you decided to change her name and Julia does seem a good one. Although it is fairly common, it also has a sense of elegance that will support Hali/Julia quite naturally. Brad seems to be taking over quite fast. How will Julia explain about Edward holding her power of attorney and other background details which he will definitely question especially considering his own background and inquiring nature.
Good work on this chapter Gayle, keeps the reader thinking of what will follow.
Cheers
Sylvia
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2014
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I didn't want to mention it but thought that keeping "Hali" would have jeopardized her new found freedom. Glad you decided to change her name and Julia does seem a good one. Although it is fairly common, it also has a sense of elegance that will support Hali/Julia quite naturally. Brad seems to be taking over quite fast. How will Julia explain about Edward holding her power of attorney and other background details which he will definitely question especially considering his own background and inquiring nature.
Good work on this chapter Gayle, keeps the reader thinking of what will follow.
Cheers
Sylvia
Comment Written 15-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2014
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I figure over the next couple of months, they're going to have a lot of talking to do, lol. Should be interesting. You know, it was you and Helen - Terv Lass, that made me see the error of my ways, lol. And wait until you see how right you were!
Thanks Sylvia for all the great comments and questions. Yes, now it's time to get through Ella's and then drop a gear.
Hugs,
Gayle
