Something's Fishy
Please, somebody help me. I'm here...in here! Let me out...47 total reviews
Comment from alexgeorge
Gripping, as always, Dean. I didn't know I could be chewing my nails on the one hand, and trembling with delight on the other. What a story, Wow! No wonder it gained 1st place! Well earned.
I used to be a great fan of sushi...now I've read this. Thanks, Dean! The author's notes added to the creepy feeling.
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2014
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Gripping, as always, Dean. I didn't know I could be chewing my nails on the one hand, and trembling with delight on the other. What a story, Wow! No wonder it gained 1st place! Well earned.
I used to be a great fan of sushi...now I've read this. Thanks, Dean! The author's notes added to the creepy feeling.
Comment Written 12-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2014
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Hah, thank you, Alex. Sushi's good...just stay away from the puffer fish, ha-ha!
Comment from joneau2
Well, Dean, I see you're going right ahead with writing superior stories, and this one a horror story, your speciality. For some reason I haven't been getting notice of new works you post despite being your fan. Also, I haven't seen you review any of my recent posts?
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2014
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Well, Dean, I see you're going right ahead with writing superior stories, and this one a horror story, your speciality. For some reason I haven't been getting notice of new works you post despite being your fan. Also, I haven't seen you review any of my recent posts?
Comment Written 12-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2014
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Thanks a bunch, joneau2, I have been away awhile. But, I'm back now with a vengeance! I'll look into your new works soon...
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Creepy story, but even creepier notes... Yikes! Well written, of course, as your work always is. The ending was too predictable, imo, but then I like happy endings, which was actually possible here, but not your style, I know. :)
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Creepy story, but even creepier notes... Yikes! Well written, of course, as your work always is. The ending was too predictable, imo, but then I like happy endings, which was actually possible here, but not your style, I know. :)
Comment Written 12-Jan-2014
Comment from c_lucas
Congratulations on your win. Your work is at a professional stage and you should be marketing it. This is very well written. Good job.
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Congratulations on your win. Your work is at a professional stage and you should be marketing it. This is very well written. Good job.
Comment Written 12-Jan-2014
Comment from TonyD
This is a fantastic piece of writing. I was on the edge of my seat as I read the story and felt claustrophobia,fear, frustration and all the emotions Mark felt. I knew, from the description of Mark's surroundings that he was in one of those enclosures for dead people in a morgue. I also knew that Mark would be delivered in the end.
But then came the last words ""Was that...Nah, couldn't be," the old man muttered. "Just a reflex action. Too many late, late shows playing tricks on me, I'd wager..."
Then I said out loud "This guy cannot be serious. Where is the rest of the story?"
TonyD
p.s. I read the Author's notes and I am appalled to say the least. Thanks for the information on Puffer fish.
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2014
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This is a fantastic piece of writing. I was on the edge of my seat as I read the story and felt claustrophobia,fear, frustration and all the emotions Mark felt. I knew, from the description of Mark's surroundings that he was in one of those enclosures for dead people in a morgue. I also knew that Mark would be delivered in the end.
But then came the last words ""Was that...Nah, couldn't be," the old man muttered. "Just a reflex action. Too many late, late shows playing tricks on me, I'd wager..."
Then I said out loud "This guy cannot be serious. Where is the rest of the story?"
TonyD
p.s. I read the Author's notes and I am appalled to say the least. Thanks for the information on Puffer fish.
Comment Written 12-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2014
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Thanks so much, TonyD, and sorry for such a late response. I've been a bit under the weather lately. I really do appreciate the kind comments!
Comment from ravenblack
Ouch....the worst nightmare of all- laid out on a slab and that bone saw getting closer. Of course, this reminds me of Poe, his intense fear of being buried alive. Just a recommendation- read Joe Hill' s NOS4A2. I think his dad has some competition.
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2014
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Ouch....the worst nightmare of all- laid out on a slab and that bone saw getting closer. Of course, this reminds me of Poe, his intense fear of being buried alive. Just a recommendation- read Joe Hill' s NOS4A2. I think his dad has some competition.
Comment Written 11-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2014
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He certainly does, ravenblack. I am currently reading that book. It is fantastic, and Christmasland sounds like one helluva' place, doesn't it?
Thanks for the fantastic review of this story, my friend!
Comment from TheWriteTeach
Oh, jeez Louise, this gave me big-time creeps. Your descriptions are very realistic and caused vivid images in my mind's eye. I am very claustrophobic, and just reading the details of Mark's confinement in the morgue started a panic attack. I had to walk away from this, seriously, and come back. I won't even talk about what it did to my stomach. The only way I got through this was to keep telling myself it was just a story. This had an AWFUL affect on me . . . I loved it! That is exactly what good prose is supposed to do. Nice job.
This was not just well written; it was absolutely fantastic writing! Congratulations on the seven stars and the blue ribbon. A well-deserved win! Awesome!
Suzanne
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Oh, jeez Louise, this gave me big-time creeps. Your descriptions are very realistic and caused vivid images in my mind's eye. I am very claustrophobic, and just reading the details of Mark's confinement in the morgue started a panic attack. I had to walk away from this, seriously, and come back. I won't even talk about what it did to my stomach. The only way I got through this was to keep telling myself it was just a story. This had an AWFUL affect on me . . . I loved it! That is exactly what good prose is supposed to do. Nice job.
This was not just well written; it was absolutely fantastic writing! Congratulations on the seven stars and the blue ribbon. A well-deserved win! Awesome!
Suzanne
Comment Written 11-Jan-2014
Comment from w.j.debi
Wow, now that is a horrible way to go. Congratulations on your win in the contest. Another well written and creative story. You obviously did your research.
Hey, welcome back. I've dropped by you page a few times in the last month and was beginning to worry something happened to you.
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Wow, now that is a horrible way to go. Congratulations on your win in the contest. Another well written and creative story. You obviously did your research.
Hey, welcome back. I've dropped by you page a few times in the last month and was beginning to worry something happened to you.
Comment Written 11-Jan-2014
Comment from Cajungirl
Congratulations on your contest win and for reaching Recognized status. What a horror story. Outstanding read. Very well written. It so scary to think that things like this can happen. I was told a story by my grandmother of a person who was buried alive back in the early 1900s.
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Congratulations on your contest win and for reaching Recognized status. What a horror story. Outstanding read. Very well written. It so scary to think that things like this can happen. I was told a story by my grandmother of a person who was buried alive back in the early 1900s.
Comment Written 11-Jan-2014
Comment from A Matter Of Words
The master of creepy has done it again! The terror of the man about to be autopsied is very palpable. The author's notes riveting, but sadly not surprising. This deserves a six Dean, but I am sorry to say that I have none are left. It is good to be back reading your work. Take care...Stephanie
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The master of creepy has done it again! The terror of the man about to be autopsied is very palpable. The author's notes riveting, but sadly not surprising. This deserves a six Dean, but I am sorry to say that I have none are left. It is good to be back reading your work. Take care...Stephanie
Comment Written 11-Jan-2014
